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    Posted: 26 March 2018 at 10:02pm

its not martyrdom on the internet, its suicidal
Dial in the key bored warrior disciple
Stand for what you believe, In real life though...
Being Open Mic of the Month is the only truth to your life bro
Put that on your resume, show em your rhymes yo
Tell em how DayDizzle made you retire Holmes
Cuz you stood up for what you believed in, thats Vital
Prideful grunts to get me banned cuz i spoke truth on a child
begging for a ban on a rap site hoe? In prison, you'd be puking teeth
A broken eye,nose, spines broke for snitching, betcha losing sleep
Gloominess dreams of putrid scenes with me polluting your computer screen
"Please Cuba Please, Dizz is ruining it for me"
"Hes abusive, im losing it, He finds this entertaining"
"Oh, i also reported him to scootz for being racist"
Chain, your passive aggressive replies like a Facebook post from a basic bitch
If you cant call me out by name, highlight your reply and erase it (quick)
Face it, in real life your just a complacent bitch
DayDizz reminds you of the kid who used to take your kicks
The type of asshole that will look you in the face and spit
Fucking snowflake bitch, This martyr shit in real life will have ya tasting lead
You the greatest? Shit, I bet you used to think LA would make you famous (Bet!)
At the end of the day... Chain all you do is basic text
The emotional investment you have on LA, you'll never repay this debt
put money on the odds that i have made ya wept, lets start placing bets
Slaying text Chain... will never trump real life accomplishments
Your text game flex but working for a slave wage is incompetent
Trigger warning, i said "slave" now he'll label me a racist, Ill abolish it
I'm a big Tipper, Drop the Benz, hand you the keys and have ya wash it quick
People like me will rob the lint straight outta your pocket bitch
Think real life type shit, I'd leave this snitch unconscious
Chain text game flawless, Spotless with over the top confidence
The few that acknowledge this pompous shit know "Chain cant drop a diss"




Edited by daydizzle89 - 26 March 2018 at 10:14pm
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DayDizz reminds you of the kid who used to take your kicks




bruh. this was hardbody.






imagine running someone for a pair of these rofl.


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anywhom!!! shots fired. t-minus ten seconds til LA gets passive aggressive again. cant wait.
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Came out swingin' on this... I feel like you had some real "in your face" shit that you normally do come equipped with. Opener was strong, I liked the second line alot, its was brought me in with your aggressiveness. take your kicks, face and spit, thought it was direct and to the point. I'd like for you to work on your wording a little bit but other than that I thought this was solid.
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Yeah i liked this diss here,you certainly know how to poke a stick into a honest
nest eh,this read forceful and in parts truthful too,and as a neutral it was enter-
taining,as i feel you jabbed at him in the right places overall,and as much as i
like the writing of the new DayDizzle of late,i still get a kick from you when you
enter this beast mode ego you have,what i like is your honesty,you don't care or
think about who's in front of you when you get on that hype trip,and you really
don't give a flying fuck about their feelings either,it's like you'll do whatever to
piss them (him) off, some ppl may disagree with me on that part about honesty,
and in the words of DayDizzle fuck em,but there is one thing i do know,he ain't
going to like this much,and although this seems to have come out from the
blue,i do remember that commotion back then,so from your prospective this is
a just cause,nice read here Dizzle..peace.
"There is no meaning to life,just a nature of life"
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Thanks for the kind words my frandz

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This is aggressive. Forceful and it was a proper alpha drop.

I would have liked more creative swings, like some plays and double-entendres which could have turned all these hard jabs into haymaker punchlines, since a punch needs to allude two meanings, but no doubt this was a strong outing still.

The emotional investment you have on LA, you'll never repay this debt
put money on the odds that i have made ya wept, lets start placing bets


   This line in particular has a stinging heat about it, along with the way you worded truths to hurt in some other lines. This was the highlight for me though.

    Not perfect. Not killer but it still has a sting which could realistically be perceived as scar-baring still. Just work on effectively building up better punchlines and you'll have one of the most formidable pens on the scene in terms of shot-making.
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I got you on some feed after lunch
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Quote its not martyrdom on the internet, its suicidal
Dial in the key bored warrior disciple
Stand for what you believe, In real life though...
Being Open Mic of the Month is the only truth to your life bro


Gotdamn, you went ham. Your words are sharp as and cuts like flying shrapnel. The flow is steady and the matter-a-factness in your written voice makes this section all the more potent.

Quote Put that on your resume, show em your rhymes yo
Tell em how DayDizzle made you retire Holmes
Cuz you stood up for what you believed in, thats Vital
Prideful grunts to get me banned cuz i spoke truth on a child
begging for a ban on a rap site hoe? In prison, you'd be puking teeth
A broken eye,nose, spines broke for snitching, betcha losing sleep


This that gully and grimy shit here. I'm not into choosing sides. You're both grown men whom are more than capable of holding your own. But on some purely rap/text shit, I gotta say this is a tough read. And by tough I mean rough, rugged and raw. The diction is on point and the imagery is dope. Enjoying it so far.


Quote Gloominess dreams of putrid scenes with me polluting your computer screen


5 bonus pts for the liquidation of the flow. +☆☆☆☆☆

Quote "Please Cuba Please, Dizz is ruining it for me"
"Hes abusive, im losing it, He finds this entertaining"
"Oh, i also reported him to scootz for being racist"


I don't even know what a "scootz" is, I get the general premise. Pretty funny.

Quote Chain, your passive aggressive replies like a Facebook post from a basic bitch
If you cant call me out by name, highlight your reply and erase it (quick)
Face it, in real life your just a complacent bitch
DayDizz reminds you of the kid who used to take your kicks
The type of asshole that will look you in the face and spit
Fucking snowflake bitch, This martyr shit in real life will have ya tasting lead
You the greatest? Shit, I bet you used to think LA would make you famous (Bet!)
At the end of the day... Chain all you do is basic text




That was sick. No punches. No wordplay. Just straight spittage and shit talk. A deadly jugular attack caught on tape.

Quote The emotional investment you have on LA, you'll never repay this debt
put money on the odds that i have made ya wept, lets start placing bets


Smooth and cool transitional wordplay wrapped in a diss savvy way. I dug it.

Quote Slaying text Chain... will never trump real life accomplishments
Your text game flex but working for a slave wage is incompetent
Trigger warning, i said "slave" now he'll label me a racist, Ill abolish it
I'm a big Tipper, Drop the Benz, hand you the keys and have ya wash it quick
People like me will rob the lint straight outta your pocket bitch
Think real life type shit, I'd leave this snitch unconscious
Chain text game flawless, Spotless with over the top confidence
The few that acknowledge this pompous shit know "Chain cant drop a diss"


Ewww...nasty


Bruh, Chain gotta run you the fade after this one or throw a brick through the computer screen. It was mean. I wish for peace. You're both dope writers and could so much more together than you can pitted against one another. But oh well. Thus is life. Dope shit, Diz. Peace.
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This was viscous and hilarious in equal measure
Straight out the gate with that opener all the way to that crushing close up line
So many highlights , you kept that heat going right through
I’ve had some brilliant back and forth shit with chain in the past but I don’t think he’ll be responding to this
Shame cos I’d like to see his reply
This was a hard hitting walloping

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Let it go...
I'm finished.
+Sick-Witted+
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