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    Posted: 11 August 2019 at 9:28am

Do you want the word play or the bird-play?
Hear the Cat calls, follow what the herd say.
They flock in droves, but their bars are as hollow as can get
Swallow more than pride to get as many followers as can get
We who follow the following moves of followers
Invisible to all, move in plain sight like the borrowers
Trump's tryna kill the Little-Man on Twitter and Insta-Gram
But you can't get iller-than Marlon and Shawn in-a-pram
Wayans' in because they bought the wisdom
Weighin' in on my thoughts on the system
When i out rap them, i lap them. They're worried about my nearness
Ahead of my time, you want the greatest? - here's a clear list
Me, Cole, Lupe, Electronica, Nas and Jay - call us the feared six
That's my peer list so i won't apologise for my weird mix
They tell me "we look and see Em' when we see you"
The lyrical acrobatics and vocabulary bleed through
But others don't recognise what's real, try to clown me sooner
They'll be one of the first to fall like Robert Downey Junior
My Pops left, so in a way my mother became a Black Widow
Her world became dark like looking through black windows
She became a bird that 'prays' - like a detailed Falcon
Can't kill the 'Little' man again - she's a female Malcolm
When you're born black, don't know what to do with the debt
But i can manoeuvre a set, they would know who is the best
I was not born to be rich, would ruin a Jet as true as can get
If i was born in the 90's i would have moved with 'Cadet'
The industry knew i'm a threat, were rough when they dissed me
All the haters are just tough when they're tipsy
Misguided missiles - tried to cuff, but they missed me
If i was born in the 80's i would have Hustled with Nipsey
It's possible to top-it-all with something topical
That has many obstacles, Trump-like - nothing tropical
Is the tendency to Supremacy? - or is it all optical?
Illusion i got is collusion a lot with Russians is logical
You're scared of brown skinned people with a back-pack
You get the truth from Hip Hop and you say 'Fuck Rap'
Some 'suicides' are not literally correct call for a critical protest
But Republican Political connects demand trivial affects
And Scriptural context will help an individual progress
They're own back is what a Hypocrital Liberal pitifully protects!




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"I just tackle the subject, the flack of the public/
Nothing!I know real N***** just happen to love it"

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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Crimson Juice Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 11 August 2019 at 3:25pm
OK firstly i don't normally feed your drops as you don't normally feed others, but this isn't
normal times here at LA at present, plus i felt compelled on reading to leave feed at this
time, i really enjoyed the blend you brought here, (self hype/political satire/perception/
social awareness) and a trip down memory lane (via the decades and relative artists) to
boot, this in truth is a well thought out verse via its direction, it flowed nice also via the
odd internal rhyme scheme thrown in in parts, yeah I got a kick from this on reading, real
nice piece...peace.
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before you can dare make an entrance".
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote AshleyKaos Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 17 August 2019 at 3:11pm
ey this was like really dope dude. Like holy shit the end rhyme scheme was lit and got so in depth it like almost went over my head for a second. I wanna almost saay it was a little bit to wordy but im not because you reigned it in right at the cusp. I thought the second half of the verse was way more sicker and clever and your multis started coming on a higher level of performance after you warmed up it seems. nice, dope drop. we should collab. Heres some highlights:

"When i out rap them, i lap them. They're worried about my nearness
Ahead of my time, you want the greatest? - here's a clear list
Me, Cole, Lupe, Electronica, Nas and Jay - call us the feared six"

"he became a bird that 'prays' - like a detailed Falcon
Can't kill the 'Little' man again - she's a female Malcolm"

^^ Dope ^^


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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Absolute Abomination Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 19 August 2019 at 8:30pm
This was cool but I find it hard to praise when a fair few lines are just Lupe bars. Maybe you're just a fan and wanted to redo his verse. I did the same thing my first drop on LA but kept it a buck from the get go. Seems weird to me now though.
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