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Posted: 11 August 2019 at 9:28am |
Do you want the word play or the bird-play? Hear the Cat calls, follow what the herd say. They flock in droves, but their bars are as hollow as can get Swallow more than pride to get as many followers as can get We who follow the following moves of followers Invisible to all, move in plain sight like the borrowers Trump's tryna kill the Little-Man on Twitter and Insta-Gram But you can't get iller-than Marlon and Shawn in-a-pram Wayans' in because they bought the wisdom Weighin' in on my thoughts on the system When i out rap them, i lap them. They're worried about my nearness Ahead of my time, you want the greatest? - here's a clear list Me, Cole, Lupe, Electronica, Nas and Jay - call us the feared six That's my peer list so i won't apologise for my weird mix They tell me "we look and see Em' when we see you" The lyrical acrobatics and vocabulary bleed through But others don't recognise what's real, try to clown me sooner They'll be one of the first to fall like Robert Downey Junior My Pops left, so in a way my mother became a Black Widow Her world became dark like looking through black windows She became a bird that 'prays' - like a detailed Falcon Can't kill the 'Little' man again - she's a female Malcolm When you're born black, don't know what to do with the debt But i can manoeuvre a set, they would know who is the best I was not born to be rich, would ruin a Jet as true as can get If i was born in the 90's i would have moved with 'Cadet' The industry knew i'm a threat, were rough when they dissed me All the haters are just tough when they're tipsy Misguided missiles - tried to cuff, but they missed me If i was born in the 80's i would have Hustled with Nipsey It's possible to top-it-all with something topical That has many obstacles, Trump-like - nothing tropical Is the tendency to Supremacy? - or is it all optical? Illusion i got is collusion a lot with Russians is logical You're scared of brown skinned people with a back-pack You get the truth from Hip Hop and you say 'Fuck Rap' Some 'suicides' are not literally correct call for a critical protest But Republican Political connects demand trivial affects And Scriptural context will help an individual progress They're own back is what a Hypocrital Liberal pitifully protects! |
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Crimson Juice
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OK firstly i don't normally feed your drops as you don't normally feed others, but this isn't
normal times here at LA at present, plus i felt compelled on reading to leave feed at this time, i really enjoyed the blend you brought here, (self hype/political satire/perception/ social awareness) and a trip down memory lane (via the decades and relative artists) to boot, this in truth is a well thought out verse via its direction, it flowed nice also via the odd internal rhyme scheme thrown in in parts, yeah I got a kick from this on reading, real nice piece...peace. |
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AshleyKaos
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ey this was like really dope dude. Like holy shit the end rhyme scheme was lit and got so in depth it like almost went over my head for a second. I wanna almost saay it was a little bit to wordy but im not because you reigned it in right at the cusp. I thought the second half of the verse was way more sicker and clever and your multis started coming on a higher level of performance after you warmed up it seems. nice, dope drop. we should collab. Heres some highlights:
"When i out rap them, i lap them. They're worried about my nearness Ahead of my time, you want the greatest? - here's a clear listMe, Cole, Lupe, Electronica, Nas and Jay - call us the feared six" "he became a bird that 'prays' - like a detailed Falcon Can't kill the 'Little' man again - she's a female Malcolm"^^ Dope ^^
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NUMBER 1 FEMALE MC TILL THE DEATH OF ME
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Absolute Abomination
Standard Member Joined: 15 May 2015 Location: Australia Status: Offline Points: 556 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 3-3-0 Form: LLWW |
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This was cool but I find it hard to praise when a fair few lines are just Lupe bars. Maybe you're just a fan and wanted to redo his verse. I did the same thing my first drop on LA but kept it a buck from the get go. Seems weird to me now though.
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