Elevation Centre: Need Some Advice

Alright, before i left for a bit, when battling i used to be criticized about not using research in my verses along with stayin away from self hyping. Now it seems this is allowed in most battles so far. Maybe its just me but i guess im going to ask for advice. I feel like i have the right idea but am not excelling at getting the point out. Could anybody let me know where i am going wrong. Use this verse as an example. It was my first tag battle and i would like to know how to improve the drop. Thanks in advance.

First off it was 'Arthur' and not 'Authur' bro.. , stay in touch so we can teamup later on sometime again

hawksdevil75 wrote: Alright, before i left for a bit, when battling i used to be criticized about not using research in my verses along with stayin away from self hyping. Now it seems this is allowed in most battles so far. Maybe its just me but i guess im going to ask for advice. I feel like i have the right idea but am not excelling at getting the point out. Could anybody let me know where i am going wrong. Use this verse as an example. It was my first tag battle and i would like to know how to improve the drop. Thanks in advance. They are no big guns(okay) watch us bring down their 'reign'(rain) like its bad weather (okay so its gonna be a weather punch) sleeping on me and axy just results into these kickbacks(these kickbacks?) not getting together(whats getting together got to do with anything?hows it an insult?) We got the one shot we needed but we brought enough rounds to take out an Empire(okay tell us how/why) Got arthur lined up in the sights (okay what now), but this point aint no blank we brought the live fire(its not a point its supposed to be an example, you just told us you fit the most basic requirements of having rounds, not relly saying much)  You gonna eat a whole clip, open your mouth and let the rocker unload in your face ( gun bar okay, how you gonna do it? Let the D/A , just state that you fucked with some white cops and they’ll throw out the case (but they didnt though did they) And Trizzy, your pic looks like a black gomer pile from full metal jacket (thats jadakiss) With a full of shit G-look and face that says I just took a nasty ass laxative (triz aint jadakiss) Tre rarey (kim jong) battled any vet, he's tryna hide under the high win percentile (how so? why? tell us about it) And we only see arthur (what about trizz) on field to clean it, this guy is practically phenyl( its an okay jab but its obscure, link your set up to you second line to build it up, but an okay jb at the end) Yeah that was a little cold but fuck its on track so its public information (everything on heres public) Let my boy axe start choppin this ass tre( tre is not pronounced tree)without an authors (arthur is not pronounced author) illustration (the two wrong nameplays is why this doesnt work)

take your first line...your saying that your opponents aren't high calibre, so you're going to end them. you then add that if they sleep on you it'll result in something bad for them. ..but here i didn't quite get what you meant. ..are we talking about the low calibre guns from earlier? so keep in mind this is supposed to be the punch that you have building toward. any confusion leads to it not landing or landing weakly.

in these cases, when i edit i ask myself whether my point is clear.   i then try to rework it until i arrive at something i like. i also like to make sure that my setup and punch work together.   now some people like to punch with each line. .but there has to be links or conceptual tie ins in the progression.

i think he's asking about how to improve his clarity or even his angles...idk how going over a beat helps concept or meaning...thoughts?

Young D wrote: to me, spitting to a beat always gives the lyrics shape....

That's true dude. The beat demands flow...

Droid answered you in detail @Hawk. Just meditate on what he said.