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The Poets Skills
Newbie Joined: 11 March 2019 Status: Offline Points: 2 |
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Posted: 11 March 2019 at 7:59am |
Now my eyes closed, so I sleep through it all
I'll dream you to feel you to keep you involved I seem to withdrawal, when I'm guessing this is it Trying to move heaven two-stepping with the wind Questioning my sins but I know destiny's a bitch Heading to the pit, out of options, heaven is a miss All the while I'm trying to find a pleasure in a fifth A pressure in my lid has my mind heavy as it is Regretting all this shit as I'm hurting in my thoughts Drinking all this bourbon has me nervous when I'm sauced Cursing at a god, my heart is certain that it lost Now I'm just a burden, who couldn't purchase all the cost Cursive's all I got, I jot it on my own heartstrings So I'm worthless, writing cursive like bone carvings A frozen rose to hold you close while your souls parting The hatred you project is just so charming We could never compromise to connect the lesson
Got no future, 'cause our past affects the present Acceptance? never! - that's why I'll be dead in seconds Filled with hollowness that fill regrets in heaven God doesn't give a fuck, and rejects my essence On my knees praying, saying "please, accept my penance" It's so crushing, I'm left with nothing except my guessing My minds stuck, fuck a witty line to end this sentence My shoulder is chipped, nothing colder than this What hurts most is words won't fucking ghost on you quick Knowing its it, and acceptance is harder alone A broken artist who knows, beauty's in a garden that grows Or a carcass disowned, who wants to harvest the bones? Seasons pass and on the beaten path you chartered alone My heart is just stone and you wanna chisel the edge? I give in with little defense, we can’t be civil in death FEEDLINK: http://www.lyricalassault.co.uk/forum/topic46459_post474542.html#474542 |
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Crimson Juice
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Well my friend, i really liked the enduring quality of a kind of forbidden love
here, and the cause and effect scenario you had going on, was a real nice slant for the reader to digest, you did well in my opinion with the emotional aspects too, the details/imagery kept this verse fresh & ticking along nicely for me, your obviously no novice to writing poetry, & i look forward to reading more from you (i likes ya swagger), i enjoyed this one, good shit...peace. |
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Sammy
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dope. I think i know who you are, if im correct then welcome to the site, if not then welcome to the site. hope to see you drop more.
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