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    Posted: 14 December 2016 at 1:03am



I clench my fists..

My fingertips in the palms of perfection
Ya fingertips not on par, ya palms are defective
Going palm for palm, u got ya heart on a death wish
No you don't wanna spar or play no part ya pathetic
Not the smartest..a target trying to target a weapon
Imparting that u just something harmless i stepped in
Please..Pardon the venom, it's the garnish n dressing
More than you bargained for in the bars ya digesting
It's cut on top of cut like shwarma, eclectic
Sons will get sliced, but this too sharp to inherit
The mark of my merit got no regard for ya credit
Yeah i said it! Now this the part where i tell it..
How I'm...still the King like Arthur n Elvis
Once i get it started...its this art at it's zenith
The Father the Shepherd..but this lava too hellish,
I don't do brag verses cos its too hard to embellish
Karma'll step in..so i don't garner to fretting
This..Armour's harder than a Spartan's defense's
..A Shaman A Legend always calm n effective
The answer ascending from the harshest of settings
So..each psalm it's expected u get pardoned or perish
The return of greatness, L.a's smartest investment


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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Elite Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 14 December 2016 at 1:08am
damn the flow on this was really fuckin' smooth. really dug how you went with the same scheme throughout the entire piece. Some pretty cool punches in here too

My fingertips in the palms of perfection
Ya fingertips not on par, ya palms are defective
Going palm for palm, u got ya heart on a death wish
No you don't wanna spar or play no part ya pathetic
Not the smartest..a target trying to target a weapon
Imparting that u just something harmless i stepped in
Please..Pardon the venom, it's the garnish n dressing
More than you bargained for in the bars ya digesting


I loved these opening 8 lines. I could easily see someone spittin this on a real dirty boom bap beat. overall this was some pretty smooth shit.. get at me for a collab soon dude, would love to do some brag shit w ya
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FIYAH!!! 

this is some of the smoothest shit i've read in a minute yo. love these freestyle pieces and this is def one of the best. the flow, the demeanor, the wording...eything was on point. keep droppin brutha


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Yo Rut this was tough man...

That opening section was killer, the rhyme scheme was slick and your wording was on point. The entire piece had that fresh feeling all the way through.

A highlight verse from you bro
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This thang was clean as fuck. 

"Imparting that u just something harmless i stepped in
How I'm...still the King like Arthur n Elvis
The Father the Shepherd..but this lava too hellish,
Karma'll step in..so i don't garner to fretting
This..Armour's harder than a Spartan's defense's
..A Shaman A Legend always calm n effective"

^^^enough said. Those bars were not together but they were the highlight lines of the joint. Nice clean flow and delivery and held the aggressiveness throughout the whole rhyme. Welcome back Rut.
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Damn Ruttz,

This shit was dope brudda. Liking the scheme here and the tight bars in here. The flow was good, content was great and entertaining. The delivery was strong and you help a nice aggressive tone here. Very punchy with a slight touch of swag brutta. Good work
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Nice to see you posting again. This was a great read. Scheme was incredibly smooth and impressively consistent. I loved the 'zenith/father/shepherd' bit, along with your opening segment. Hope to read more from you. 


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Bro, you murked it! This shit was clean from top to bottom. Not a blemish or a bump to be found. Your scheme and your flow were the highlights here for sure. But you had some really sharp ass lyrics as well. Also, your wording was dope and I love how you kept hard "R" sound going throughout the drop. This was some impressive writing, Rutt.

You definitely hit bullseye on the target with this one.

Props!
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#swag

Loved everything about this, the content, the attitude, the "fuck this debate shit...I'm gonna drop to prove it", rammed full of quotables & you nailed that balance between having a superb rhyme scheme and making sure it doesn't come off as 'fillerish' or rhyming for the sake of it...you maintained that focus and intensity throughout. This was a real mature drop & pretty special all things considered.
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How I'm...still the King like Arthur n Elvis
Once i get it started...its this art at it's zenith
^^this bar went hard everyone pretty much said it best. your flow was on point and you had some really nice content.

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Thanks for all the love guys. It's a short piece but it took me a minute. I''ve re wrote it several times so i'm fooking relived you liked the one i went with.


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Just thought it was a good time to give some love to the OM section
Some dope drops lately, loads of styles on display
This one though
Rutter that shit was butter
This definitely my kind of drop
First eight really put down well , loved the mix of swag and stepping up, with the condescending "fuck with this at your peril bitches" vibe it had...
Multis really worked well making the flow on opening too smooth
Transitional onto the next set was really nice and the pace tempo just holds up nice and the material and very skilled rhyme set on display...just makes this read a continued joy
Loved that embellished number......
Dope to the end man
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yes sir. i really loved the multis in this. but people seem to fall too in love with multis and forget to make mention of just how dope the content was as well. From the opening lines, i really liked how you utilized the repetition of 'palms'. Nice punches, witty lines. Im a huge fan of using uncommon words that are just not seen in every day writing like ' eclectic ' . . . those small details are something i often pay much attention too. very good read man, thanks for dropping it 
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sup Rutt,  I love how you started off with the clench fist and the palm stuff.  That was actually pretty creative.

"My fingertips in the palms of perfection
Ya fingertips not on par, ya palms are defective
Going palm for palm, u got ya heart on a death wish
No you don't wanna spar or play no part ya pathetic
Not the smartest..a target trying to target a weapon
Imparting that u just something harmless i stepped in
Please..Pardon the venom, it's the garnish n dressing
More than you bargained for in the bars ya digesting"---That flow is pretty much impeccable.  Since the last time I've seen you drop I see that you have really polished that flow.  Very nice work rite here.  also that sons line too sharp to inherit was flames.

"How I'm...still the King like Arthur n Elvis
Once i get it started...its this art at it's zenith
The Father the Shepherd..but this lava too hellish,
I don't do brag verses cos its too hard to embellish"----yooooooo!! that last line I actually fucking smiled and was like daammn.  Your flow is crazy and you have stepped your shit up big fucking time.  the flow damn dude.  good shit.

"A Shaman A Legend always calm n effective
The answer ascending from the harshest of settings
So..each psalm it's expected u get pardoned or perish
The return of greatness, L.a's smartest investment"---dope way to end it.  I love seeing ya shit in the OM especially when your at this caliber now.  

Dope stuff Rutt









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