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    Posted: 24 February 2006 at 4:35pm
Met you through my girl at the time, 6 years ago
Back when I first let my beard just grow
Before my rhymes and beats ever steered the show
about 4 years before foes feared my flow
I used to always play guitar
back when days where hard, your ways were dark, life rated R
I used to joke like "when will you have sex with me?"
Bugged out, cause my girl was standing next to me
Wifey was bi so we had a little wager
it was just a game and you were the middle player
it was an oral sex test, and you'd be the judge
But she cheated on me and I held a grudge
On the way home from school, one of those days wasted
Till you flashed me on the train, gotta say, they were great tits...
My ex moved away, but we never got closer
new girl in the picture, I quickly approached her
Me and you sat together in class
talking bout me and the ex never could last
We joked about it and felt better with laughs
"You're so short, if we had sex, I'd sever that ass"
but you were the study buddy, you were making me work
We complained about our lives but they can be worse
        We both used to shamelessly flirt
but we would never give in to the game and be hurt
I always hoped we'd stay the same as we were
We were supposed to be friends till they made us leave earth
Was it luck that I saw you in November? gotta be so
You worked in Times Square selling tickets to comedy shows
Told me your mom kicked you out the apartment
"Living at your friend's house must be pretty hard then"
You said "I'll be ok, I'm good"
I woulda taken you into my house if I could
But I still wasn't famous, I was still broke
We chatted up like old times and still joked
I had a new girl, you still smoked
and I bought a couple tickets to a really ill show


I said goodbye, you had no number to call at
Said I hoped I saw you again and all that
Never thought it'd be like this, it's so strange
to see you on the train homeless, asking for change...


Now, seeing homeless people breaks my heart
but bringing it this close to home rapes my heart
you see, I was afraid you'd go astray somewhere
Your past trials were nothing, the way these days compare
116th street women's shelter in harlem?
You have stories behid this, but don't know where to start'em
I know, but first, I will tell you mine
I make money producing beats, and I now rhyme
I have my own place and that doesn't suck
and for you to find me here, your ass is in luck
Hey, don't walk away, don't be embarrased
Don't be silent, little lamb, this is not Thomas Harris
I got mad love for you, I'm willing to help
It's fate you found me here before killing yourself
I'll take you to my house, you can sleep with my shirt
By next week you coulda been deep in the dirt
At my place, you can relax and you can shower
I'll let you sleep on my bed for a couple of hours
Now this must've made you stronger, cause it didn't kill you
Let's talk, you always had a way with words, hope you still do
Tomorrow we'll talk some more, you'll eat something
Can't believe old classmates saw you like this and did nothing
Tomorrow, I'll get you some clothes and look for jobs
you can live here a bit, share whatever I got
I'll let my girl know but she should understand
cause in this life, I know i will do good as a man...

2 days after that, i get home and she's gone
I know she stole nothing, she'd never be that wrong
I see a note saying "Thanks, I love you for this too
I have your number, I'll call you sometime, I'll miss you
I'll have a phone and a place cause you got me on my way
but I'm a rolling stone, and you'll see me again someday...
What you have done for me goes farther than friends
One day I will pay you back when I see you again"
Insert something rappy here
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote ILLSTARRR Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 24 February 2006 at 4:48pm

Just wow man.. Wow

Sick shit man... Ur story tellin' skills are dope man.

Just make me keep reading an reading.. an I loved every bit of it.

Cant wait for the next piece

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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote -Orion- Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 24 February 2006 at 4:57pm
Yeah... this was nice... in the first part you rhymed a lot which sometimes took away from the way u phrased what u were sayin'... Story's told real nicely tho... Can't say I knew you had your own place or made money from beats but hey, hot shit...
. . . Now who said they fuckin' with me?
They just said that FUCKIN' with me
They didn't mean it
Nah . . .
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Junior Shade Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 24 February 2006 at 5:22pm

Damnnn the ending just damnnn.. Imaginary is unreal i felt every single line & the ending just wow sent a tingle down my spine.. Realness, it felt like you actually put me there i could feel everything you said..

Mad props duke..

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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote I-kontinue Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 24 February 2006 at 8:11pm
haaa, the story was interestin as fudge. i was def. feelin this. read like a book. to be honest while readin i didnt een concentrate on flow but more on what was goin on in the story. stay up.
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Bloody Renegades and novels, ur stealin my gimmick dammit?!?!?!
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote NepentheZ Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 25 February 2006 at 9:55am

^ lol

"You're so short, if we had sex, I'd sever that ass"

^ lmao!

Man ... i dont even know what to say, i hactually had goosepimples by the end of this, fucking moving.. deep deep deep ... not a bad word to say about it. %100 first class.







I'm so fucking intelligent, half the time I don't even know what I'm saying...
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Cuba Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 25 February 2006 at 10:13am
Thats the shit right there....Jehu impressin me more and more with every drop, Orion and Jehu on some next level shit, inspirin...wudda been crazy if you two were back on WB in the good old days, make a brother reminisce

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THis shit was sick as fuck. J reminds me of sum fuckin Nas storytellin shit. Hot drop J.
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