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    Posted: 15 August 2018 at 5:43pm
~ Ill ScriptureZ ~

Every feature I appear on is gruesome & dope
Beautifully wrote go together like Cuba & coke
Shower blood over myself like a loofah & soap
Brutal & broke, I set the fire in Lucifer’s throat
Only muhfucka on a beat to choke a musical note
Proven to ruin any human approach
Secluded from folks, steady exclusive & ghost
Other verses on collabs I’m Putin to most
Workin’ in the lab, half mutant & G.O.A.T.
Hangin’ on every word never loosen the rope
Though a lot of y’all trash pollutin’ the globe
The axe is the same as an executioner holds
Combat from these raw raps written for leisure
Scriptz is The Reaper, dead bodies hidden in freezers
Sinner & creeper, spittin’ what lit up a heater
Sick with a clever split’em like the shit is procedure 
Dave Infinite wishin’ he’d never give him a feature!

~ Dave Infinite ~

You're about to witness an intricate and significant Ill-Infinite tandem
This memorandum features random an peridoc sarcasm like
Yeah you just as nice as scripturez on the Mic, I can't do it, syke 
I'm psyched swinging bats that's spiked like porcupines 
Crack spines the designs of the rhymes intertwines and combines 
We are snatching bitches hearts and not talking valentine's 
Introducing the evolution of the gruesome twosome 
infinite & scriptz will never loosen there grips the imprints 
Of our finger tips are  evidence on this apocalypse so be convinced 
we exist Permeating out of the deepest abyss 
Our illness is a testament to our brilliance so dont test the resilience 
Of our candor because even an innocent bystander 
Can be victimized by our slander swinging our grammar 
Like it's a sledgehammer names affixed to the stages banner 
We just upped the swagger to a new standard 
It will be a disaster if you try after so good luck to those who try to answer

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Every feature I appear on is gruesome & dope
Beautifully wrote go together like Cuba & coke
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This was dope

Shower blood over myself like a loofah & soap
Brutal & broke, I set the fire in Lucifer’s throat
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Loofa and soap, so dope


Only muhfucka on a beat to choke a musical note
Proven to ruin any human approach
Secluded from folks, steady exclusive & ghost
Other verses on collabs I’m Putin to most
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You are fucking silly dude

Workin’ in the lab, half mutant & G.O.A.T.
Hangin’ on every word never loosen the rope
Though a lot of y’all trash pollutin’ the globe
The axe is the same as an executioner holds
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God damn

Combat from these raw raps written for leisure
Scriptz is The Reaper, dead bodies hidden in freezers
Sinner & creeper, spittin’ what lit up a heater
Sick with a clever split’em like the shit is procedure
Dave Infinite wishin’ he’d never give him a feature!
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This is why you are a savage. Your multis and choice of
words is nasty. Dope shit here. per usual.



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Im not getting this. Forced and you can cut out alot of words to make this
more tight. Its not always good to drop vocabulary like this.

Yeah you just as nice as scripturez on the Mic, I can't do it, syke
I'm psyched swinging bats that's spiked like porcupines
Crack spines the designs of the rhymes intertwines and combines
We are snatching bitches hearts and not talking valentine's
____________________________________________________
Work on your multis, if you look at Ills verse, you see tons of them.
You have a grasp on basic rhyming. thats good


Introducing the evolution of the gruesome twosome
infinite & scriptz will never loosen there grips the imprints
Of our finger tips are  evidentnce on this apocalypse so be convinced
we exist Permeating out of the deepest abyss
Our illness is a testament to our brilliance so dont test the resilience
Of our candor because even an innocent bystander
Can be victimized by our slander swinging our grammar
Like it's a sledgehammer names affixed to the stages banner
We just upped the swagger to a new standard
It will be a disaster if you try after so good luck to those who try to answer
___________________________________________________________
I was hoping for something more outta your verse. You have the
vocabulary to write and some basics on rhyming but you need to
working on internals (rhymes mid sentence), Transitions (Ryhmes that
transition into a new scheme), Multis (Rhyming multiple syllables) and flow
which is usually the result of a good grasp on rhyming and cutting out
forced vocabulary.
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Word Dizz, thanks for the time.
   
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Exo
I thought you was hold them end rhymes up to the end, even so the switch in the last four didn’t harm this beyond a slight glitch
Was a nice easy and enjoyable read that looked very polished! Even though I know you would have thrown this together in less than an hour

Dave
I felt inspired to read your drop with emphasis on reading it quickly
Then it all fell into placed and I saw the potential was good and the skills was evident
I enjoyed reading this work as much as I did the other half of it and that saying something if you working with The Ill of theS........ I didn’t like the last line! It felt like it didn’t do justice to this otherwise decent drop

It was a very dope little collab overall

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Originally posted by spume corrupt spume corrupt wrote:

Exo
I thought you was hold them end rhymes up to the end, even so the switch in the last four didn’t harm this beyond a slight glitch
Was a nice easy and enjoyable read that looked very polished! Even though I know you would have thrown this together in less than an hour
 

BRUH WHAT?
   
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Originally posted by spume corrupt spume corrupt wrote:

Exo
I thought you was hold them end rhymes up to the end, even so the switch in the last four didn’t harm this beyond a slight glitch
Was a nice easy and enjoyable read that looked very polished! Even though I know you would have thrown this together in less than an hour

Dave
I felt inspired to read your drop with emphasis on reading it quickly
Then it all fell into placed and I saw the potential was good and the skills was evident
I enjoyed reading this work as much as I did the other half of it and that saying something if you working with The Ill of theS........ I didn’t like the last line! It felt like it didn’t do justice to this otherwise decent drop

It was a very dope little collab overall


Spume what fucking imaginary land are you living in?
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Thanks for the feedback on my feedback

Also and let me be clear
Cloud 9 is not an imaginary place

Elaborate further if either of you feel the need
Air out those issues boys
You may even gain some sympathy for this ordeal?

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Omfg
What a stoner I am when I’m off work

Scriptz honestly I don’t know how the I managed to call you Exo
Apologies

I’ll be honest I am trying to make something happen with Exo included at the moment
So his name was in my head I guess
No mistakes though I did know who I was feeding Scriptz when I wrote the feed

Just a tongue twister kinda weird slip of the mind


Damn
I need to get my act together
I’m an idiot and I got kids
Not really I’m a good dad

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Yo ILL this was a dope verse you dropped here it bounced nicely off the tongue whole way through
You had some nice lines to

Only muhfucka on a beat to choke a musical note

Thought that was sick ^^

Combat from these raw raps written for leisure
Scriptz is The Reaper, dead bodies hidden in freezers

Another bar I was really diggin, real raw right hurr ^^

And you passed it off nicely to the next verse

Yo what up Dave welcome to the site
You did a dope job on this verse a nice continuation here

Introducing the evolution of the gruesome twosome
infinite & scriptz will never loosen there grips the imprints
Of our finger tips are evidence on this apocalypse so be convinced
we exist Permeating out of the deepest abyss

Thought these few lines were dope as fuck


swinging our grammar
Like it's a sledgehammer names affixed to the stages banner
We just upped the swagger to a new standard
It will be a disaster if you try after so good luck to those who try to answer

You ended it off nicely here, it all flowed together pretty well
Looking forward to seeing you elevate here




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inner demon violent beast so
warn the mother fucking people
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Props Slip..
   
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