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    Posted: 05 November 2019 at 8:33pm
ayo...something quick...looking for a place to post rhymes and build...hoping to battle some people...

flow water....all day long...I'm no toddler....
grew up strong....no father....
through damning up leaks...wit no otter....
and piping up freaks....wit no sodder...
no bother....hit lanes like greek freak....
heat seek...its like writin with cheat sheets....
keep receipts....cuz I aint buyin ya bs.....
stay high cuz theres re-grets......
hope to find me a re-set....
no time for a re-gress....time flies in the east/west....
please...less...is more when it seems stressed....
dreams....yes....although it seemin I dream less....
talk more.....scream less....I mean....blessed....
is what I feel when I fiend less....
mean flex...dreams of a key down in key west.....
straightin up.....hoping to lean less....
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No offense but rap isn't for everybody...
I can only fall off in space...
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^Lol..

This was very random, it mostly seemed like a bunch of words strung together for no apparent reason. Like your first line for example. There’s no connection between your thoughts or at least I can’t see it. Maybe you could write on a topic or something more consistent? You had some semblance of consistency here witn the regrets/reset part but it doesn’t add anything to it if the rest is.. random. Anyways though welcome to the site!
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