Text Battle Archive: Noumenon VS Beans.. (0-2) |
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Noumenon
Suspended Joined: 15 September 2019 Status: Offline Points: 101 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 0-3-0 Form: LLL |
Topic: Noumenon VS Beans.. (0-2) Posted: 30 September 2019 at 2:22pm |
5 bars, due by the 2nd.
Edited by Crimson Juice - 06 October 2019 at 10:04am |
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Beans
Superior Member Joined: 12 October 2013 Location: MA Status: Offline Points: 6718 Crew: EMPIRE Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 95-24-5 Form: WWWWWW |
Posted: 04 October 2019 at 7:15am |
Listen faggot My explosive swing’ll have dude fearin fists Ironic I bomb your face w/punches cos we’ll never see a Nou clear hit! You receiving a beating from LA’s Patriot! My gun formation hittin neck or a throat Think AB & Brady... No matter how many bullets you catch you’ll never stand next to the GOAT Judging by your looks you broke! So I’ll kill this scum, waste.. & if there’s any talk bout Nous Paper? It’s a “Body Found” article on the front page It’s “All Said & Done” w/one hit, cos you weak as shit Not only do you have ‘An ILL Body’ but THATS how we describe your beef w/ScriptZ We saw you music video ... your terrible, filled with wack boredom To get your name noticed you had to get yourself banned on an inactive forum |
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1-2 Season 1 Final Champ
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Noumenon
Suspended Joined: 15 September 2019 Status: Offline Points: 101 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 0-3-0 Form: LLL |
Posted: 05 October 2019 at 12:50am |
My lyricism leaves heads spinning like a hamster wheel
I'll shred the skin off of your dick like a banana peel this is like a match between Janet Biehl and the man of steel Cause' I'm an angry commie, and I'll put beans in a can that's sealed (the name of Stalin, the notorious "angry commie", means "man of steel") cause' Beans contain more harmful shit than you might guess is in em' they're lectin ridden, give you gas and fuck up your digestive system it's probably those soy beans where you get all that estrogen from sayin' you're the goat, but your puns are forced, that's desperate shit son your set up for each line is weak, rhymes your forcin' in Beans always seems to have wieners next to them or in them. |
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Crimson Juice
Site Moderator Joined: 20 December 2015 Location: U.K. Status: Offline Points: 3258 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 6-11-0 Form: LLWLW |
Posted: 05 October 2019 at 10:14am |
This vote has been accepted by a moderator. Pleasing tussle.. Beans, As i expected you came with the punches, which were in truth like warm to hot, but you word play was nice, bombing ya face/nuclear and the ill body/ Scriptz to hash out a couple, i also thought your personals were directed rather well too, the getting banned/inactive forum was like ouch, made me smirk for real, all in all a nice verse. Noumenon, Now you surprised me here with your offering, i was expecting you come at Beans like you did iLL, more of a debate scenario than a battle verse, but this was leaps and bounds better than you prior battle verse so props there, and although some of the slants you used against Beans are nothing new,(but hey whatcha gonna do) you came with a little twist to them still, all in all a nice verse.. Overall i feel Beans was just that bit harder with his drop, he showed here that he's a seasoned battler, so props to both here, Noumenon you were unlucky.. Vote..Beans. Edited by Crimson Juice - 05 October 2019 at 7:34pm |
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"You need to learn how to make an exit,
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Mitch.Wagwaan
Groupie Joined: 21 June 2014 Location: England Status: Offline Points: 380 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 3-5-1 Form: LNLWWW |
Posted: 05 October 2019 at 11:08am |
This vote has been accepted by a moderator. Beans// Opener - It was aaight, wordplay came off nicely. 2nd Bar - I see where you were going with the Patriots/G.O.A.T play but in all honesty it didn't really hit deep enough for me. 3rd Bar - The lead up in the first line wasnt great but I liked the play and punchline in the second. 4th Bar - This was more like it, multies flowed smoothly. Two personals capped of with a strong Punchline. Nice work. Closer - A decent closer, relevant and rampant. Verdict - Not the strongest I've seen you come. The first three bars wasnt awful but wasn't very damaging either. You came to life in the last two bars and incorporated some nice personals and tied in some tidy punchlines. Nous// Opener - Had a nice Horrocore feel to it and flowed nicely but I was generic and needed a more personal angle to it. 2nd Bar - Again nice multies and flow, the nameplay was good too. 3rd Bar - This was shit. Why you teaching people about the contents of baked beans rather than attacking Beans? 4th Bar - Nothing really hit hard here either. Closer - They concept of your closer was good. It was painfully stretched in the second line which just messed it all up. Verdict - This was a massive step forward from your battle with ILL. A rapid improvement. It was more direct towards your opponent minus the third bar. There was some good concepts although some didn't come off. My criticism would be that, Nameplay is an ample weapon in Battle but shouldn't be the only one in your Arsenal. You needed to research your opponent a little more and find some personal material to use. Vote // Beans This was by no means a walk in the park for beans but I feel as though his last two bars won him the battle. |
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Point Blank
Superior Member Joined: 20 May 2005 Status: Offline Points: 7234 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 92-27-5 Form: WWNWWN |
Posted: 12 October 2019 at 7:55pm |
This vote has been accepted by a moderator. MVGT Beans He was the clear winner here, the first bar alone was a stronger punch than anything in Nou's verse, even if the wording seemed a little off. Nou's paper and Ill body bars were decent also, no real KO blows in this verse but you did throw punches and personals which are essential in battles. This is where Nou slipped up IMO - your opener should always be one of your strongest bars, you should come out swinging in a battle, not write about hamster wheels and dicks. It did get better from there but there were no real hard-hitting personals or punches. The dude has had 100+ battles so you need to think outside the box, rather than stating the obvious disses about bean cans and gas. Also, please don't put your explanations in the middle of the verse like you did in the brackets - I read it like it was a bar in your verse and I'm sure others would have too, which kinda fucked up the flow. Anyway, you do have the basics nailed, good rhymes and flow, you just need to be a little more creative and aggressive. Nice battle though. |
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Crimson Juice
Site Moderator Joined: 20 December 2015 Location: U.K. Status: Offline Points: 3258 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 6-11-0 Form: LLWLW |
Posted: 13 October 2019 at 12:43pm |
3-0 Beans and KO..
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