Open Mic: Onslaught Redux

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    Posted: 25 May 2020 at 7:40pm
still sick with it on a wicked quick visit
got slick wit to kick shit and rip vicious
on frigid bitches unlike heat my bars emit
that fierce fire from an arsonist narcissist
the flame burn MCs until straight surgery
no fake curtesy I need to break curfew see
in a state of emergency the scene is declining
that seems to be whining please dont remind me
I fill empty halls like a scene from The Shining

free styling rhyming and reviving forums
tiring poems have peeps dying of boredom
trying be awesome to belong in the kingdom
new recruits giving veterans PTSD syndrome
them foes getting banned is a righteous act
now trifling acts contemplate fighting back
returning with double accounts twice as wack
thats misery, trickery and bickering all moody
but if Im brooding I find it rather soothing
to just punch somebody, call it a mood swing

several blows permanently damaging temporal lobes
shining like emerald glow on you basement dwellers
blatant failures being misled by red herrings
think the board is slow - check your bearings
or try nuance, fix your glasses, get new ones
people flexing on my text equals sub-humans
selfish crooks aiming to maintain a well kept look
catch em at the bookstore reading self-help books
spotted as marks, chumps who get robbed in the park
put the glock to my heart only make a shot in the dark
mobbed from the start, greeted with relentless silence
punches lack any point, bars literally senseless violence

dunno why these cats thinking they some rap kingpins
getting pissed on by everybody, time to let facts sink in
coming to complexity, Con's taking it to new places
crafting intricate lines, they can barely tie shoe laces
if we battled, they'd be too traumatized to remember it
crack their craniums and give em fractured memories
im the type to unleash mortars on any mortal scum
you're basically a straw person packing a water gun
leave em slaughtered and gone, all bastards decayed
have kids passing away so I can be dancing on graves
blasting facades, no turning back when Im busting facts
leave noobs hanging, only to use them as puncing bags

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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote D-NoS Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 06 June 2020 at 3:30pm
Solid asf , interesting lyrics , sweet self-hype piece , dope .
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Crimson Juice Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 07 June 2020 at 10:20am
Well,i'm not going to type up paragraphs here saying this and that,but what i will
type is this had a very mature approach for a self hype verse, it had meaningful
content backed up with blunted and to the point similes, and the putting it into
segments gave it a building up effect,Ripe verse Mr Concrete, enjoyed this one..
"You need to learn how to make an exit,
before you can dare make an entrance".
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote spume corrupt Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 04 July 2020 at 1:28am
That was a brilliant read, easy to see why you had that belt brother
I just felt whilst reading that you could go on for ages without getting repetitive
I know you probably just knocked this together in a couple of hours and that’s why the quality is inspiring to me
Won’t break down bars because I trust you already know I found the whole thing dope

Nice to see you can still flex the pen main

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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Schematic Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 14 July 2020 at 12:10am
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