Open Mic: Pennies For Wishing Well

Damn i love these social awareness drops, and this was RIPE for many reasons, it draws a reader
in and makes him stay put-t like a birdie in golf, untill its end, the content had this skimming effect
in depth, you broke the water and left it to the reader to dive for concepts and details, which it had in
abundance, you managed to convey an awful lot, with so little, a minimalist approach that projected
volumes...clever writing that my friend, clever indeed, i would like you to expand on this and then turn
it into an audio, but the i've always been greedy....a Ripe an enjoyable piece that hits home, it kinda
makes you look at one self....peace.

Nice read Neek. Always enjoy your style.

^^yooo Rhet hit it right on the head. I think neek is the only one who can do sarcasm in a text/topical verse without it being ambiguous ha. That's some serious skill set. that eve line was fucking perfect. not just in wording but the weight of what is being said. short, sweet, precise and poignant. nice, sir. ps i don't hate my big bro ha 

Dope read. Alot of the depth without trying to over do it. I agree with your political stance, and the ima get mine if you don't yours mentality lol wouldn't mind hearing this over that jay electronica- never ending story beat. Fire as always bro

My name is Cuba and I endorse this message.

Bloody Mary lookin Wary 
Getting high with magic dust is the Doobie Fairy
Executed Fairly
Shine light like the sun when Snooping Barely
Prepared to Loose him Dearly

I think you meant "lose" - its a common mistake, so dont beat yourself up over it too badly. The Shine Light/Snooping was pretty solid, but the "like the sun" portion took away from its impact overall. opening line is a keeper tho. I thought the doobie part needed work, especially after executed fairly..a killing scheme wouldve tied it together a little better. perhaps not a pcp reference, but referencing killing the buds to dust and maybe a keif tie in as well. sprinkle keif while the buds turn to dust…etc.. easy stuff. youll get there.


Allure the Scary
A secret Imbued Clearly
Ghoulish character Spooking Daily
Shooting Rarely
Blind to a Proof Merely
Revealed by the Blue cloaked in Truth Scarcely

this is alot like my issues with suffix rhymes, your leaning on a crutch heavily and its steering your content. the key to writing better…is just writing. the rhyme should never paint your narrative. your rhymes need to be a byproduct of the message. the random capitols dont help either. this whole section is a jumbled mess. I saw you working on this the other day, so its not like you rushed it either. you took time and still just go completely nonsensical for the lulz (which I appreciate…trust me..) but the key to a good trolling.. you gotta make people think youre being serious. youll get there tho.


Frozen gargoyle Moving Faintly
Here to nourish not Mute the Mangy

Mute The Mangy.. "situation hairy…" you had so much direction. another misstep.


Renewing a Tomb Shaky
Walking above a watery Lake climbing rays to the Moon Sacredly
Stabbing at Angels with a Harpoon Fiercely
Running with the Saiyen of Doom in Snaky


now, I understand the goal was to troll me... but this woulda been better suited at Dizz. he would have engaged you and bodied you for this poor attempt at his style.



overall, opened well.. but then it turned to ramblings. maybe you were too insecure to show your real writing in fear it wouldnt be good enough. opening stanza showed promise, but the substance was null and void. step the pen up and step the troll up. youll get there one day. stay safe and all the best.