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    Posted: 30 May 2015 at 12:13am
im far from perfect, in fact.. 
when im parched, im nervous, 
beggin to be swallowed by the turf n
lookin for a dark spot to lurk in
to swig my last half of bourbon
beer bottle philosophy's murky -
sweet but sinister, an its too late
if you already taking it up early
it stinks when emerged from.
mate, iv not got a pot to piss in 
i pissed my last lot, on the first one
my differing faces hurt some
take a chance on me, i tend to flip 
and high tail it for a savoured sip
rosy cheeked, wet smiled, what day is it?
ignorance is bliss isnt it, kids..
regrets for later, that much is obvious
let the rum run in streams, ill sail away
captain jack swagger, i speak with a light spray
drenched in my poured, poorly thought epiphanies 
convinced of my insight, 
sat on my pint sized high horse, listen to me -
stumbling over the words as they jump out
im having fun now, well in my element
head in the clouds, laughing at anything 
its all a joke isnt it? 
sweating out shandys now, this is brilliant
ill take a ride on a barstool, all the way to oblivion.





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this was really dope man! nice to see you come back with such an impact. i was concerned about a lack of direction in the first quarter but you proceeded to round the verse out so nicely. you allow your content to dictate your flow in a very abstract way that comes across so pure and organic that its a breeze to read through, and keeps the reader unaware of where youre going next. your vast references to different alcohols as implemented naturally as well. overall solid drop and a nice little read. 
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