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Newbie Joined: 10 April 2013 Location: fucksville Status: Offline Points: 3074 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 27-6-0 Form: WWWWWL |
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Posted: 30 May 2015 at 12:13am |
im far from perfect, in fact.. when im parched, im nervous, beggin to be swallowed by the turf n lookin for a dark spot to lurk in to swig my last half of bourbon beer bottle philosophy's murky - sweet but sinister, an its too late if you already taking it up early it stinks when emerged from. mate, iv not got a pot to piss in i pissed my last lot, on the first one my differing faces hurt some take a chance on me, i tend to flip and high tail it for a savoured sip rosy cheeked, wet smiled, what day is it? ignorance is bliss isnt it, kids.. regrets for later, that much is obvious let the rum run in streams, ill sail away captain jack swagger, i speak with a light spray drenched in my poured, poorly thought epiphanies convinced of my insight, sat on my pint sized high horse, listen to me - stumbling over the words as they jump out im having fun now, well in my element head in the clouds, laughing at anything its all a joke isnt it? sweating out shandys now, this is brilliant ill take a ride on a barstool, all the way to oblivion. |
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Nigma
Site Moderator Joined: 25 March 2013 Location: Canada Status: Offline Points: 4077 Crew: Elision |
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this was really dope man! nice to see you come back with such an impact. i was concerned about a lack of direction in the first quarter but you proceeded to round the verse out so nicely. you allow your content to dictate your flow in a very abstract way that comes across so pure and organic that its a breeze to read through, and keeps the reader unaware of where youre going next. your vast references to different alcohols as implemented naturally as well. overall solid drop and a nice little read.
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