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Elevating

Printed From: Lyrical Assault
Category: Emcee Lounge
Forum Name: Open Mic
Forum Description: This isnt a Battle Board, this is for your Freestyle Verses to be Rated by other members.
URL: http://www.lyricalassault.co.uk/forum/forum_posts.asp?TID=12109
Printed Date: 29 March 2024 at 1:41pm


Topic: Elevating
Posted By: D.I.G. Deep
Subject: Elevating
Date Posted: 16 May 2007 at 2:27pm

I came throug the door my on baby on the floor

moma´s back from the store

she says I should earn more

cant take it no more

my wages are minimum my wifes lifestyle is premium

the press trying to get in to my dome

on the street blind assasins rome killing mentalety

like homing missiles do cars with crome

aint gona be another clone that comes straigth from the bone

ima stay in my zone crezy ammo get blown

my style has been shone those self sellers

leave me alone let the story be told

some call it bold but I dont even need to bite like Gold

ya feel this like the cold ok now its told

my girl is worth more then gold she dosent get sold

I love my bitch but she can iritate me likan itch

my baby boy Roy just plays with hes toy

new tacticks in my life I employ

the rap game I play like my boy dose hes toy

in the south they call me the rap Osiris

coz you cant get away with sqrewing with me

in England when they see me they say "yo Jack the Rapper"

iven after the show I aint no clapper.



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6 feet deep



Replies:
Posted By: D.I.G. Deep
Date Posted: 16 May 2007 at 3:03pm
feed back would be nice Approve

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6 feet deep


Posted By: Sejan
Date Posted: 16 May 2007 at 3:15pm
I liked the ideas and the story of this one.
Flow was a bit choppy in my opinion,
but I found this lines pretty nice :

"my baby boy Roy just plays with hes toy

new tacticks in my life I employ"

I didnt feel the line with your girl,
but overall a nice spit





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Laady #1.


Posted By: Fatal
Date Posted: 18 May 2007 at 7:47pm
One of the wackest peices i have EVER read...wow...

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Posted By: teken8996
Date Posted: 19 May 2007 at 2:16am
^hahahah^

umm DIG make ur line longer try to use multies the flow was reaaallllly chopy try and read the tutorials b4 u make some piece


Posted By: -XTC-
Date Posted: 19 May 2007 at 2:19pm

spoiled milk is better then your peice..

-Thumbs Down-


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Slick back in this shit.. time to put a hold on commotion
"See-sick'ness" in the mix cause I flow like the ocean..

..Slick..


Posted By: Point Blank
Date Posted: 19 May 2007 at 5:04pm
Ouch...Pretty Harsh.
Dont Give Up Man, Everyones Gotta Start Somewhere.
This Was Just Randomness. To Make A Decent Verse, You Need To Rap Bout The Same Topic Throughout The Verse To Make It Nice, Otherwise Its A Load Of Random, Meaningless Shit, Like This. I Aint Biggin Meself Up Or Anythin, But Read One Of My Topical Battles, Like With Senor Perfecto, Get Some Ideas!


Posted By: teken8996
Date Posted: 19 May 2007 at 5:07pm
 got the rep man u can u good PB


Posted By: D.I.G. Deep
Date Posted: 19 May 2007 at 6:35pm
(lol) no body loves me Cry

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6 feet deep


Posted By: teken8996
Date Posted: 19 May 2007 at 6:38pm
hahah its not tat its just we helpin u inprove



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