Book of Revelation (The Real Four Horsemen)
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Printed Date: 20 April 2024 at 12:49pm
Topic: Book of Revelation (The Real Four Horsemen)
Posted By: Cuba
Subject: Book of Revelation (The Real Four Horsemen)
Date Posted: 25 July 2009 at 4:13pm
 Conquest Clean cut suit with a business like appearance My swipe card credence gives me the clearance As I step into the office and flash a false moniker Security guard watching X Factor on the monitor No 'excuse me officer', because this fool is docile Doesn't suspect that there's a virus on my mobile An algorithm written with precision and vision About to leave the financial system in derision Wipe out bank accounts as all created equal Fight Club the sequel gets meshed with a prequel A world wide web set, getting ready to capture Start a revolution much more heavy than Napster Or that levy disaster, lost within confusion despairing Beyond the scale of Nick Leeson losing his Barings With motives colder than the season of winter The end is coming, without a scream or a whimper... War Hit the beepers for panic, herd the Sikhs and Islamic..getting heated and manic, it's deceit we had planned slick....kids from Eton and Harvard, beaten and starving..feeling cheated by farmers with wheat they had harvest-ed, but the bloodshed bred - many dead....taste the dread with, no electricity, internet connectivity...or propaganda ministry, just tyranny and misery...fresh code of the samurai, best to batter guys...send them swift to Paradise, a world of bad advice...slash and smash a wife, just to haggle life...exchanges, arranged them with strangers...while armies and mafia clash on territory, you'd ask for clemency, trying not to kiss grass in cemeteries...and grasp to memories where cash brought remedy...now it's faceless paper, pieces of plastic, with receipts of lavish - lifestyles gone by, it's bonsai like growth from shallow pots...from plentiful to having not, the damage rots... Famine Hunger, deception, it's tumbled...reflection We stumble and plunder but grumble defection It's crumbled, disgruntled, we wonder...perplexing And stunned by ones that run our elections Shunned, and huddle, shudder...protection As bugs impugned our struggle's dementia Drugged and drudged, we hung in inertia Succumb to the plunge like funds for a murder As we walk the land with pain in our stomach Lay blame that'll plummet at faces of puppets Chambers and summits, delaying the substance We're praising consumption yet praying for justice Dumb and flustered, shuttled from fences Skunk that you suck, it fucks with ya senses With junk that corrupted, blunted, defenceless Destructed to dust, brought balance with tempest Death Green like the mist that's descended to man Change, shame it's too late to then give a dam Had watchdogs for the prevention of scams Yet lies spreading deeper than the sending of spam Conquest kicked it off, he planted the seed War sprouts to damage, and ravage like weeds Famine wiped it out...like a savage's creed Now death is the cancer to answer the pleas.... These people diseased, believed in Eastern religion Claiming equal reprieve, relieved with secretive sinning Prostitution rings and vows of wedding's disbanded Kids turn to crime and sex as they steady abandoned Followed by Hades, filling coffins with babies Ideas foam from the mouth like a scholar with rabies Impossibly crazy, as we render you casually As another victim that witnessed the end of humanity ...Holla at a Scholar...
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Posted By: Calibra
Date Posted: 25 July 2009 at 4:48pm
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Wow... I dunno where to start.
When you showed me the 1st verse and I predicted a classic I think I hit the nail right on the head, this was fucking insane. Already read the Conquest verse, was dope, nice litle story, great vocab and rhyming. Good way to set off the peice. War had some great multis in there, the way you set it off through me off a little even though you told me thats how you were gonna set it out, I could still read it fine and like the idea behind the lay out. Famine easily had the craziest rhyming, that shit was nuts cause you didn't loose anything in content, just consistantly stayed on point. Then Death, this was probably my favourite verse, the intro 8 lines were great way to set it up and then you added some great lines such as "Ideas foam from the mouth like a scholar with rabies" was just madness.
This has to be one of the best Open Mics I've seen in a long time bar anything from me. You had everything, a great concept, great rhyming and you stayed on point all the way through. Very impressed. Classic in my eyes.
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Posted By: sparta
Date Posted: 25 July 2009 at 7:10pm
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Yeah, not bad
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Posted By: Cuba
Date Posted: 25 July 2009 at 7:15pm
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Posted By: sparta
Date Posted: 25 July 2009 at 7:17pm
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Nah, this was fuckin outrageously good, war was my favourite and death kind of let up on the compact rhyming which was nice, everything else was nigh-on flawless
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Posted By: Point Blank
Date Posted: 25 July 2009 at 7:23pm
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This was a great piece man, 4 completely different verses and they all linked together nicely, the Death verses being my favourite. The picture at the start set the scene well (which is cheating ). I thought the war verse was dope too. Really good piece Cuba, props!
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Posted By: N8Ball
Date Posted: 25 July 2009 at 8:11pm
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was a nice spit... i only skimmed the last parts of it cuz i'm short on time...
I liked the verses but didn't feel they stayed wit the topic...
and in some parts you forced rhymes just to rhyme instead of keepin the content on point...
but besies that it was tight... ------------- Look to the sky to try n find god in the clouds hoping when he looks down i dont get lost in the crowd |
Posted By: Calibra
Date Posted: 25 July 2009 at 8:17pm
Really?
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N8Ball wrote:Posted By: N8Ball
Date Posted: 25 July 2009 at 9:39pm
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like i said i didn't put much thought into the comprehension of wat i read of it... i got time to do so now ------------- Look to the sky to try n find god in the clouds hoping when he looks down i dont get lost in the crowd |
Posted By: N8Ball
Date Posted: 25 July 2009 at 9:49pm
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Aight i strike my last statement... I liked Famine and Death the most. "Conquest kicked it off, he planted the seed = WOW! :D but back to the start For conquest the picture i imagined after reading was more like chaos... this was tight "Wipe out bank accounts as all created equal The beggining and ending of war wasn't bad but the middle was hot overall nice piece and sorry for not putting more effort in the read earlier ------------- Look to the sky to try n find god in the clouds hoping when he looks down i dont get lost in the crowd |
Posted By: JoeyNice
Date Posted: 25 July 2009 at 10:43pm
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this was dope.. every part..
ur vocabulary is rediculous my man... .. the foam out the mouth line was a jaw dropper..
enjoyed the read very much
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Posted By: Fatal
Date Posted: 26 July 2009 at 12:31am
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Madness...
This drop was creative as fuck and each verse was dope in its own right. One of the illest drops ive read ina while... U bastard. -------------  |
Posted By: Junior Shade
Date Posted: 26 July 2009 at 12:41am
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Holy shit man, this was a whole new level.. Whoever decides on Classics needs to be chackin' this out.. In all honesty i really don't know where to start.. The second verse was my favorite but they all had there own unique style an' delivery.. Vocab was outrageous.. An' it was even more stupid that you maintained the flow even with some real tounge twisters in there.. Just wowzers.. ------------- 
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Posted By: Fatal
Date Posted: 26 July 2009 at 1:05am
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^Wtf is "chackin?" lmao... But yea, Hangin needs to seriously relenquish his lead mod dutys... i say turn them over to neppo, cuz they'res YEARS worth of classic verses AND battles jus wasting away in the archives...------------- |
Posted By: Calibra
Date Posted: 26 July 2009 at 1:07am
Preach!
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Posted By: Junior Shade
Date Posted: 26 July 2009 at 1:55am
Lmao.. Checkin'.. It's not that hard to guess!.. -------------
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Posted By: Cuba
Date Posted: 26 July 2009 at 4:12pm
I had three versions of the photo...when I'd finished I was looking at them like "which one works best" -------------
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Posted By: Cuba
Date Posted: 26 July 2009 at 4:31pm
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I'll explain a few things as well... Nick Leeson was the guy that fucked up Barings Bank, it's the largest ever financial crime...I also meant it like "losing his bearings" (I thought that line was crazy when it came to me )War is written like that coz it lacks order...reflects the chaos (plus listen to Biggie - 'You're Nobody (Till Somebody Kills You)' for the effect I was going for) The famine was a whole bunch of "uh" rhymes, coz that's kind of like onomatopoeic & is the same sound as like a rumble in your stomach when you hungry...the last line, Famine (the horseman) carries a Balance Death...one line I thought was smart: "Prostitution rings and vows of weddings disbanded"...like, husbands cheated on their wives with hookers...woman are smuggled from Eastern Europe in a "prostitution ring"...but you give your wife a "ring" or a "wedding band" as a seal on your wedding vows, as in....the ring is a symbol that your vows with never be broken, disbanded as in, breaking up the marriage figuratively...but also literally Ok, I'm done *Fades to Black* -------------
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Posted By: King Jehu
Date Posted: 28 July 2009 at 4:32am
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Cuba, you are The Monster. Period, No menstrual. ------------- Insert something rappy here |
Posted By: BiggStankDogg
Date Posted: 28 July 2009 at 3:26pm
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My God. SLOW CLAP. ------------- 
Fear the Bow of the Silent Archer |
Posted By: NepentheZ
Date Posted: 28 July 2009 at 6:33pm
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I've read this a few times, declined to comment thus far, because its hella difficult to type on the iPhone [yeah I do got one Cu, its just really difficult to navigate forums on it] But yeah, this is crazy. One of the most creative pieces I've read since I re-read something I wrote, naturally. On the real, this was just out there. OMOTM, OMOTY too. An instant classic imo. Some bars were crazy. SMH @ you explaining your own shit though. I didn't get the Famine shit, but the other stuff you explained I caught onto after reading it a couple times. Yeah, the rhyme schemes here were nice, vocab was extraordinary. This is just one of those pieces. -------------  I'm so fucking intelligent, half the time I don't even know what I'm saying... |
Posted By: 2smooth
Date Posted: 29 July 2009 at 3:12am
what he said.
holy... fuckin'... shit.
classic verse if i've ever read one... shit was absolutely bonkers... best verse i've seen, since... wow... maybe ever... wow...
scotty... wake your goat-mouth ass up an' classic this!
very well done kid....
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Posted By: I-kontinue
Date Posted: 29 July 2009 at 3:52am
| Cuba, you're like me... You can be anything you want to be if you put your mind to it cause you're a partial genius. |
Posted By: King Jehu
Date Posted: 29 July 2009 at 3:46pm
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Partial? ------------- Insert something rappy here |
Posted By: I-kontinue
Date Posted: 30 July 2009 at 3:59am
| Modesty is the best policy. |
Posted By: -Orion-
Date Posted: 30 August 2009 at 2:12am
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My man
------------- They just said that FUCKIN' with me They didn't mean it Nah . . . |
Posted By: -XTC-
Date Posted: 31 August 2009 at 6:26am
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My man.. You listen to me.. You listen to me real fuckin good.. Okay.. This shit was fuckin beautiful.. Ya hear me.. Ya fuckin bum.. Absolutely fuckin beautiful.. [/Tony Montana] ------------- "See-sick'ness" in the mix cause I flow like the ocean.. ..Slick.. |
Posted By: that guy
Date Posted: 31 August 2009 at 11:07pm
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this was incredible...flawless...divine
my favorite part being
Impossibly crazy, as we render you casually
As another victim that witnessed the end of humanity
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Posted By: CHAIN
Date Posted: 03 September 2009 at 2:27pm
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unfuckwittable.....one of tthe best drops ever...maybe the best, lol
nothing's fucking with this
i tilt my hat
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Posted By: Mackie
Date Posted: 31 January 2010 at 4:37pm
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i know this is diggin but after the hype i heard about this drop figured i should find it famine was my favourite verse. all sick tho |
Posted By: Cuba
Date Posted: 03 August 2012 at 9:30pm
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Old school, new school need to learn though...
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Posted By: J504
Date Posted: 03 August 2012 at 9:49pm
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^ cosign Damn, this was sick. I'll make sure this gets another bump when I'm off this phone, it deserves more proper feed. Classic shit right here tho, glad u bumped it or I woulda missed it. |
Posted By: J Sass
Date Posted: 03 August 2012 at 10:00pm
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that was a power move at Bumpin this Cuba....ima give sum proper feed later my nigga HG)Sass -------------  |
Posted By: -Que-
Date Posted: 03 August 2012 at 11:33pm
Good classic.......Cuba you fuckin bastard! This shit was cool.  .....All elements of an HOF's scripting.
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Posted By: spume corrupt
Date Posted: 04 August 2012 at 12:40pm
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That defo warranted the bump This was an awesome works Highest quality! Props fa back in 2009 -------------  |
Posted By: -Orion-
Date Posted: 05 August 2012 at 1:11am
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Shit Scuttz, come on man ------------- They just said that FUCKIN' with me They didn't mean it Nah . . . |
Posted By: Neek
Date Posted: 05 August 2012 at 5:45am
I burn baby, burn..like disco inferno. anyhoot. this was ridiculous. you're one of the most visually descriptive writers, which always brings your pieces to life. even without a vocal tone, the shit sets a vocal tone..feel me? ------------- #Bananas 
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Posted By: CHAIN
Date Posted: 07 August 2012 at 6:52pm
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Shut down the site for the whole summer...Fact ------------- |
Posted By: fuckoff
Date Posted: 05 January 2014 at 11:56pm
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barings and scholar lines were rediculous. i read this before, and after seeing the other thread on this idea figured id check the classics for it. needs to be there imo. well played. this was sickness -------------  |
Posted By: Smoothtung
Date Posted: 06 January 2014 at 3:46am
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crazy good cuba, for real. Im glad to see you back dropping classics like the good ol days ------------- Though you never even had the chance to witness it |
Posted By: Cuba
Date Posted: 05 January 2017 at 8:24pm
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Throwing this up on the Spotlight for a few as a search engine was looking at it & Endeeze said I should bump it. -------------
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Posted By: Endeavor
Date Posted: 07 January 2017 at 4:24pm
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Posted By: Crimson Juice
Date Posted: 26 January 2017 at 9:38am
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Now this was ripe,first my apologies as i was going to break this down,and believe it or not,I started to do that and found myself giving the same feed as everyone else,I loved the modern take on the 4 riders of apocalypse here,I thought you did a splendid job describing each one also,this was a truly well crafted piece,from details to concept all were nailed here,I'm really feeling this piece and the creativity levels are off scale for me,I read in the past many similar on this subject matter,but never delivered with this kind of angle,damn Cubes you really wrote something special with this offering, I'm not going to waffle on saying this was this and that was that,I'm simply going to nod my head put my hands together and slowly clap,a stunning piece that oozes and drips craftsmanship with the pen,tremendous work bro,now you've done destruction here I would love to see you do a modern take about creation,I feel you have the tools for the job,on the low you're quite the wordsmith eh,a highly enjoyable read, that kept me glued,and dare I say wanting more,brilliant just brilliant..peace. ------------- "You need to learn how to make an exit, before you can dare make an entrance". |