...

Real parents left me on the curb for the foxes and birds:

Next set wanted the brother that their daughter deserved,

But this set off some resentment; kept me from bonding with her.

Third set, lucky charm. No cause for concern.

The Reed's were real nice people. They were entrepreneurs.

This rubbed off on me a lot, I was rewarded for working

Hard in school and in their office and my confidence surged.

I stayed sober, never smoked much in my collegiate years,

Was focused more on chasing grades than moving onto the skirt.

But then the skirt moved onto me man, I got me a girl

And it felt like Hallelujah when my heart mixed with hers.

But still, I've lived my whole life up on orange alert.

Owned a car for just a day before the constables searched.

Showed my license, was polite enough. The officers weren't.

They came with weapons at the ready and provocative words.

It turned my stomach how the cunts were just so prompt to assert

Themselves and how a word of mine was never properly heard.

That's just not the philosophy we're taught to observe,

'Cause when the law turns a profit, then it's profits we serve.

Truth has gotta be learned if there's to be cop repentance.

When a wrong sentence could result in the wrong sentence.

When a kid gets sent away for getting baked in the car,

You know that Reagonomic shit has gone & plagued us too far..

We've lost our way, the day is run by dominant firms

Who dictate all the rules, ensuring profits will surge.

They say the law is black and white, so why's it constantly blurred?

Unless the law is 'black' and 'white'.. then there's a conflict in terms.

I mean, look what happened when the Black Panthers hit nerves:

The feds Hoover'ed up when Freddy Hampton emerged.

People can't rise in violence, lest the pattern returns,

So here's 10 commandments based on what I have learned:

Thou shalt not arrest or suspect an unarmed man

In the street because you feel his skin's too dark tanned.

Thou shalt not wage a war on the possession of drugs,

Thou shalt wage a war against the men a few levels up.

Thou shalt only use a firearms as a last resort,

After all non-lethal methods that you can exhaust.

Thou shalt not run divide and conquer tactics in the press

That cause whites to see a black presence as a threat.

Thou shalt not transfer these abuses of power

Onto any other race that may suit you at that hour.

Thou shalt treat crimes committed by law enforcement

In the same way you treat those committed by the poorest orphans.

Thou shalt not allow law makers of the nation

To receive any funds by way of corporate donation.

Thou shalt not use religion as a weapon in politics.

Thou shalt focus on an issue and how you plan on resolving it.

Thou shalt arrest all employees of Fox News

For inciting racial hatred by spreading false truths.

Finally.. thou shalt kill Donald Trump

And use his wealth to distribute free healthcare for a month.

 

 

This was fucking nice. I love where you took this. The intertwining between the old school version and you version is fucking awesome. I love creative shit like this. The vocabulary, content, flow, concepts and delivery was smooth. Your transitions between each line and scheme were hella nice. Your slant rhymes were well placed and easy to pick up with assonance. The creative aspect with throwing the ten commandments in there is some flavor and style really helped take this from an OM to ART. Dope work here THE VERMONATOR

A lot has been said and I'm just here to stroke your ego a bit more. This is the best I've seen from you and the messed up part is that what I wrote was actually similar to this, except I kept my story in the middle ages. I love the second segment with the whole preaching aspect and shit. Donald Trump line killed me haha.

'Cause when the law turns a profit, then it's profits we serve.