This was a cool first entry. You did well in your word usage describing the event. I did think there were a few lines you got a bit over zealous with the vocabulary that and it halted the smoothless of the line itself.
For example:
They feast like draconian creatures on humans with great enormity deformity as bodies leak out with brains oozing on the tables cordially Using swords to eat and pick at the bones with normalcy Im next and the gorgons forcefully tear at my organs with teeth
Here reading through it, the end rhyme normalcy/organs with teeth is where it puts the hiccup in the fluent readability. The syllables also don't line up with the two either. There was a couple other instances as well. face n limbs line was another multi that the syllables didn't line up, however, it didn't effect the read as much because the 'arcane winds' multi to start the line made it roll of the tongue ultimately and the short line following it 'spaceship'/'amazement' was quick enough to pick up the previously end rhyme. Being as this wasn't a consistent trend throughout the verse, I don't think you meant to do that. Other than some occasions like that with the flow and multis, it was technically sound. And the grusome imagery at the end was what Self was looking for for Bloodlines, so that should be a plus when he goes through the verses for a winner.
The story was definitely an interesting take on the KOTM topic this month. I liked the idea of being abducted by aliens that are holding people from other nations. It was fast paced and had an aggressive start to the story to get the reader interested. The way it began, you also left it open for a prequel as to how your character reached this point. What I thought this story did lack was the depth and creativity. Instead of continuing off the interesting beginning, there was no purpose for the capture other than for the aliens to eat. There was no reason for the other 32 nations to be there. No depth behind the character, it was a random person that got captured and eaten by aliens. You had more lines to work with and you should have used them to put some depth behind it because I thought the start was great.
Well I said my piece, both critique and praise. It was overall an enjoyable first read to the BL4 KOTM.
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