[BL4] DayDizzle vs Crimson Juice [Alias] (3-0)
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Topic: [BL4] DayDizzle vs Crimson Juice [Alias] (3-0)
Posted By: Cuba
Subject: [BL4] DayDizzle vs Crimson Juice [Alias] (3-0)
Date Posted: 04 August 2017 at 5:42pm
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BLOODLINES 4 Presents:  DayDizzle as Vladimir Putin vs Tri-Clops as Donald Trump in ALIAS BATTLE Rules 16 line max You diss each other in the character of your alias Due Midnight Sun 13th August* Best of 7 votes OR Default voting rules if above not achieved within 7 days of final verse submission LET'S GO!! * Contact me within 24hrs if deadline is not feasible and I will extend
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Posted By: daydizzle89
Date Posted: 04 August 2017 at 6:32pm
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Listen you orange fuck, you only won because of my foreign touch
Vlady imports oranges and peels back they skin gorging on trump Hillary was a whorish slut but i know that your performance sucks!!! Your voters dumb, Deplorable cunts chanting like adoring cucks Want war with Putz? Vladimar Putin his hands in US elections I got soldiers on the buttons of some nuclear weapons Get the stepping, I can expose you in seconds You fucking Russian prostitutes with discretion Heres a suggestion, lose some weight and let me fuck with Melania Ill invade that pussy with force like Czechoslovakia You got body guards bruh, i got the Russian Mafia You lack stamina, Ill choke you out of oxygen till ya lungs hit hypoxia Late night tweets gotta stop it bruh, what you got? Insomnia? You want beef? Go to sleep you fat fucking slobby cunt I might have phished Hilary's Emails but its obvious Trump Ill cut you up and skin you like a Tilapia cut |
Posted By: Crimson Juice
Date Posted: 23 August 2017 at 11:30pm
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Sorry guys,i've just gotten out of hospital due to Appendix being removed.. Bitch your not Tarzan & your Country's inferior, going about with no shirt in a snow filled Siberia, Fuck being a flake your actually counting them, & for fuck sake why not try reversing that trend, Let's rewind time do you remember flight 10H17?, A day when you spread an airliner about the scene, Even tried blaming rebels that your Country armed, Claiming they brought them cash & wasnt palmed, Before you start talking about fences acting all tall, I bet when finished my wall unlike Berlin's won't fall, Plus you must like wildlife giving guns to all Gorillas, When they carry more arms than a fucking Caterpillar, Bitch your weak cuz you have the gift of doublespeak, Your just a bald freak if i was you i'd wrap it like a Sikh, ------------- "You need to learn how to make an exit, before you can dare make an entrance". |
Posted By: Cuba
Date Posted: 28 August 2017 at 12:33am
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Votes. -------------
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Posted By: King Jehu
Date Posted: 29 August 2017 at 5:39pm
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DayDizz wins this because he had the better content. The punches were harder, with mentions of the Steele dossier, the Russian mafia, and the election interference, while still having great multisyllable rhymes and well-flowing syllables. Crim's verse was softer. The mention of the jet shot down over Crimea doesn't insult Putin so much, because he seems to have won that. The balding jokes don't work unless they're more clever than this. Something like "My media machine isn't just crushing foes I'll put rumors to rest when I piss on this Russian hoe" would have been a stronger hit and had more rhyming syllables. This was pretty one-sided. Vote: DayDizzle Eighty-Nine ------------- Insert something rappy here |
Posted By: spume corrupt
Date Posted: 29 August 2017 at 8:24pm
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Yeah got to agree with Jehu here Dizzy came thru with some funny punches and also had that aggressive vibe Melanie pussy was def a hole worth exploring The insomnia thing was cool Putin his hands was clever Crim was lacking that sting needed for the battle format however if this was a criminal warfare tribunal he might have won No shirt in Siberia? That requires an extremely tough man Blowing aircraft from the sky is almost a compliment So kinda backfired Both works were delivered pretty good but dizzy also came with the better more well rounded skill set overall Cool battle guys Vote day -------------  |
Posted By: D.Von Doom
Date Posted: 30 August 2017 at 4:23am
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In my opinion this was kind of one sided technically. Dizz painted pictures with those well written strange ass lines he wrote. The imagery with the "Vlady imports oranges and peels back they skin gorging on trump" line was dope as hell to me for that reason. The syllable use was pretty solid as well with dizz. His attacks are unconventional aggressive nonetheless but lyrical as well. Also you stuck the topic very closely which is another plus. Crim to me you were just trying to fight back pretty much versus knocking him out. Your drop was dope but not as potent as dizzles verse. Your hits didn't carry much weight in them. Technically you could tighten up your rhymes bro, Sometimes its okay to just rhyme the end rhymes but internals boost the strength of punches in some cases. I think you need some more sting. Still a good showing by both but could be better. MVGT: DIZZLE ------------- I can only fall off in space... |
Posted By: Nigma
Date Posted: 30 August 2017 at 6:50am
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Day, I feel you started strong, dipped a little due to wording, then the last half was really solid. First I put pretty solid, but then I decided you deff earned really solid level praise. Oxygen/hypoxia was nice, closer could have had a better end rhyme but was worded really well, solid verse. Crim, you had a couple good concepts here. Your best bar was the caterpillar bar because the wordplay gave it subtance. That's what a setup/punch type of thing should look like. You mentioned wild life and stuff, but when you have a base line like this you could look to change bits of it to incorporate more, for example, you could have gone with the caterpillar reference then went back and changed the beginning to something like "before the butterflies, im giving guns to gorillas//when they carry more arms than a fucking caterpillar. That extra bit adds impact, which is what a lot of your bars were lacking. +1 DayDizzle -------------  |
Posted By: Nigma
Date Posted: 30 August 2017 at 6:51am
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daydizzle89 wins via 3-0 KO ------------- |