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(TWD#3) End

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Printed Date: 28 March 2024 at 7:47pm


Topic: (TWD#3) End
Posted By: The Rap Daemon
Subject: (TWD#3) End
Date Posted: 12 March 2018 at 9:14pm

Demon's say humanity's had it's time to breathe
A legend's life's too long I'll break you down like refineries
This your home? Too bad you'll lose your life violently
'Coz your days' 'numbered', death I 'owe one' like 'binary' (0-1)
Eons no object, just the theme that reasons me to seek gore
As your walls close in, the end's as concise as trenches scream war
My fists pulsate as I attack on my travels
Drown your fam' in so much sorrow it's like they're aquatically grappled
You'll try fighting back as 'C flows' with these hits, collapsing your castle (sea flows)
But once the 'water? You' come to a 'rocky end' like I'm 'blasting the gravel'. (war-to-you)


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Faggot



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Posted By: spume corrupt
Date Posted: 13 March 2018 at 10:17pm
Sup RD?
Good to see you up in here!
This is why you was nominated most improved of the year back in the day
You grabbed the feed done the math and developed the the tools..Props on that
Some of this was dope fam!
Tha binary line....great vision
The trench line was a fucking WOW moment
The gravel line was str8 grimey
And the aquatic line despite being a stretch was still dope

Very nice work here main delivered perfectly for the WD
Good shit

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Posted By: Slip
Date Posted: 13 March 2018 at 11:26pm
Nice drop good to see you back on the board
Im diggin that binary play to


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See no evil speak no evil silent echo alter ego
inner demon violent beast so
warn the mother fucking people


Posted By: SELF ACTIVATE
Date Posted: 25 March 2018 at 5:24pm
The binary wordplay was super clever. A real stand out moment. Humanity-legends-refineries was also dope. The C-flow line could have been ill. But unless your real name starts with the letter 'C' it loses relevance and impact. Either way, this was dope, Rap. I dug your battle bars.


Posted By: Sammy
Date Posted: 26 March 2018 at 12:35am
oohhhh shit, my man RD handling bidness. this is actually really good. and to echo others, that binary code play was very notable. if i do a mag, i'm definitely puttin that in a quotable. good shit sir.

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Posted By: The Rap Daemon
Date Posted: 26 March 2018 at 3:25am
Thanks for the feed, guys..

Really appreciate the kind words. Been taking a lot of the feed and with the challenge, I refined what I knew and did my best to make as polished of a piece instead of winging an idea from the mind straight on to here and tried hard not to get carried away and focus on refining the technical sweetness. I wasn't sure, but I'm grateful for the feed, because it's helped a lot and I guess it's been a working a treat.

And yeah, Self, my real name begins with C.

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Faggot


Posted By: SELF ACTIVATE
Date Posted: 26 March 2018 at 4:13am
You did ya thing on this one, Rap.

And thanks for clearing that up. It makes the bar twice as nice.


Posted By: Lord Puente
Date Posted: 26 March 2018 at 3:51pm
I wasn’t feeling your usage of eons or trenches, but on the other hand you had my fav usage of the world aquatic. But then you had a lot of stretches I wasn’t feeling such as water- war to you. That’s gotta be one crazy thick accent to get that from water.

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Posted By: The Rap Daemon
Date Posted: 26 March 2018 at 5:40pm
War-to and water is the same pronunciation for me. I didn't play water with war to you. Rather water? You, and war to you. ;

Anyway, glad you felt some of it. I'm appreciating all this feed back. Wasn't expecting this much tbh.   

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Faggot


Posted By: spume corrupt
Date Posted: 27 March 2018 at 10:51pm
Whatever happens fam
I gotta say this
You fucking killed that binary line, your thought process with the play on that word was top tier
Keep on

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