Onslaught Redux
Printed From: Lyrical Assault
Category: Emcee Lounge
Forum Name: Open Mic
Forum Description: This isnt a Battle Board, this is for your Freestyle Verses to be Rated by other members.
URL: http://www.lyricalassault.co.uk/forum/forum_posts.asp?TID=46787
Printed Date: 20 April 2024 at 2:53pm
Topic: Onslaught Redux
Posted By: Concrete
Subject: Onslaught Redux
Date Posted: 25 May 2020 at 7:40pm
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still sick with it on a wicked quick visit got slick wit to kick shit and rip vicious on frigid bitches unlike heat my bars emit that fierce fire from an arsonist narcissist the flame burn MCs until straight surgery no fake curtesy I need to break curfew see in a state of emergency the scene is declining that seems to be whining please dont remind me I fill empty halls like a scene from The Shining free styling rhyming and reviving forums tiring poems have peeps dying of boredom trying be awesome to belong in the kingdom new recruits giving veterans PTSD syndrome them foes getting banned is a righteous act now trifling acts contemplate fighting back returning with double accounts twice as wack thats misery, trickery and bickering all moody but if Im brooding I find it rather soothing to just punch somebody, call it a mood swing several blows permanently damaging temporal lobes shining like emerald glow on you basement dwellers blatant failures being misled by red herrings think the board is slow - check your bearings or try nuance, fix your glasses, get new ones people flexing on my text equals sub-humans selfish crooks aiming to maintain a well kept look catch em at the bookstore reading self-help books spotted as marks, chumps who get robbed in the park put the glock to my heart only make a shot in the dark mobbed from the start, greeted with relentless silence punches lack any point, bars literally senseless violence dunno why these cats thinking they some rap kingpins getting pissed on by everybody, time to let facts sink in coming to complexity, Con's taking it to new places crafting intricate lines, they can barely tie shoe laces if we battled, they'd be too traumatized to remember it crack their craniums and give em fractured memories im the type to unleash mortars on any mortal scum you're basically a straw person packing a water gun leave em slaughtered and gone, all bastards decayed have kids passing away so I can be dancing on graves blasting facades, no turning back when Im busting facts leave noobs hanging, only to use them as puncing bags |
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Posted By: D-NoS
Date Posted: 06 June 2020 at 3:30pm
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Solid asf , interesting lyrics , sweet self-hype piece , dope . ------------- https://dnos.bandcamp.com https://soundcloud.com/dnos_aka_dicey |
Posted By: Crimson Juice
Date Posted: 07 June 2020 at 10:20am
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Well,i'm not going to type up paragraphs here saying this and that,but what i will type is this had a very mature approach for a self hype verse, it had meaningful content backed up with blunted and to the point similes, and the putting it into segments gave it a building up effect,Ripe verse Mr Concrete, enjoyed this one.. peace. ------------- "You need to learn how to make an exit, before you can dare make an entrance". |
Posted By: spume corrupt
Date Posted: 04 July 2020 at 1:28am
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Wow That was a brilliant read, easy to see why you had that belt brother I just felt whilst reading that you could go on for ages without getting repetitive I know you probably just knocked this together in a couple of hours and that’s why the quality is inspiring to me Won’t break down bars because I trust you already know I found the whole thing dope Nice to see you can still flex the pen main -------------  |
Posted By: Schematic
Date Posted: 14 July 2020 at 12:10am
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Posted By: Concrete
Date Posted: 12 August 2020 at 8:15pm
| Salute for the words spume & Crim, and especially the advanced feed from Mr Scematic, thats how its done. |
Posted By: Alien365
Date Posted: 04 February 2021 at 3:13am
| Another freestyle. Liked the wordplay on the mood swing line. This was a solid display of the elements, structure is there and definitely some witty lines included. You have great flow in text and your subject matter is interesting as in where the lyrics are headed, so far you bring in nice references. Dope drop. |