Way To Hell
Printed From: Lyrical Assault
Category: Emcee Lounge
Forum Name: Open Mic
Forum Description: This isnt a Battle Board, this is for your Freestyle Verses to be Rated by other members.
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Printed Date: 20 April 2024 at 2:22am
Topic: Way To Hell
Posted By: D-NoS
Subject: Way To Hell
Date Posted: 06 June 2020 at 3:07pm
 I'm under the influence since I was a truent youth Pinched my fathers cider and I swiped his blunts too.. Stuffed girls down the side of my bed like used tissues Always up to no good ignoring the curfew Profanity everywhere, F*ck Sh*t C*nt B*stard Terrorize my neighbour and chase the girls with this wood Stole marker pens from school.. my dumb ass got booked Tried to jack a car and only opened the boot Screws loose, yea got more than a few skewed views Aint a G, I got a fucking F in school dude recently I be resident in mental hospitals talking to myself schitzo lunatic unwell Still fighting with a pen, shit like professional Dicey's on the attack you fuckers can melt I still dont know why they let me out my cell No turning back now Im on my way to hell ------------- https://dnos.bandcamp.com https://soundcloud.com/dnos_aka_dicey |
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Posted By: Crimson Juice
Date Posted: 07 June 2020 at 10:11am
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Well this verse did have a rolling theme,it was a little spatial in parts but it still came off with a start and end scenario still,i liked how you highlighted the crimes/sins that put you on the path to hell,i had these visions of a miss guided youth on reading,the wrongs were more of a push back to your surroundings than a wayward delinquent who is out of control,although a short and quick read,you put in enough detail to give this verse an icy vibe considering its length,nice drop..peace. ------------- "You need to learn how to make an exit, before you can dare make an entrance". |