Skep - Untitled 4
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Category: Emcee Lounge
Forum Name: Open Mic
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Printed Date: 19 April 2024 at 6:56pm
Topic: Skep - Untitled 4
Posted By: Skep
Subject: Skep - Untitled 4
Date Posted: 25 June 2020 at 3:15am
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See, I've been walking down this long road The same turnpike where my life lost hope Blowing smoke just so I come across ghosts I lost my faith, the same day that my cross broke Pops knows, 'cuz his couch bares my burden Broken and cold, I know my cares are burning Back tracking through the past, wheres the purpose When I'm looking for the point like squares inverted So go ahead and judge me like whore fuck me Take a perfect picture, I'll wither if I'm lucky Just another dummy with his weapons stocked Searching for help now like I was begging lots This what heaven wants for my subtle heart To be split down the middle where couples part As I stroke my pen to begin my troubled art Missing pieces in the creases where puzzles start ------------- Live Battle Artist The True Audio Champ Verbal Assassin |
Replies:
Posted By: spume corrupt
Date Posted: 27 June 2020 at 3:31am
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Next level drop man, sunfin like the best short written I seen you do Read this a good few times and every time I did the clinical precision hit me more Solid with the concept/vibe Solid with the end rhymes and the transitions were perfect and tied this little gem together and helped make it such a smooth read LA has so much talent -------------  |
Posted By: spume corrupt
Date Posted: 27 June 2020 at 3:35am
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First four lines just shout “Keep reading” That’s the way forward ------------- |
Posted By: Mitch.Wagwaan
Date Posted: 27 June 2020 at 7:46pm
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Digging the scheme on this, flowed a beast. Tbf my favourite line was the closer.. As I stroke my pen to begin my troubled art Missing pieces in the creases where puzzles start. Fire. |
Posted By: Crimson Juice
Date Posted: 02 July 2020 at 4:47pm
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Yeah good work here,i was feeling it, and i agree with Mitch that bar he hashed out was solid and poignant, the flow through out was nice in fact i have little time no gripes with this verse...enjoyable read..peace. ------------- "You need to learn how to make an exit, before you can dare make an entrance". |
Posted By: Skep
Date Posted: 02 July 2020 at 6:49pm
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Respect ------------- Live Battle Artist The True Audio Champ Verbal Assassin |