Cuba:
Think Cubes will choke? I'll go Bain with a neck chord Take an L from Stalin? That'd be a stain on my record
Quick flow with question marks I like how this starts and the aggression in the opening multi, filler could have linked more topically to the punch but it's a strong start.
This guys barely a star, should call me Ursa Major Your bars lamer than Rapper T tryna stack the tourney in his favour
Haha this is good, and man I didn't even want to be in the tourney, rather study some greats, and what an opportunity that presented itself. It's all for the culture innit. The looseness with which tourney in his favour/Ursa Major sits in the bar stylistically works but I feel this could have been carved harder, and the Your bars lamer sits ok as an inner rhyme for Ursa Major but again yeah could have been carved harder. Also I mean not that direct but it's a builds bar.
I roll at defcon 3 you can't control the sirens Crystal clear I got 2020 on lockdown worse than Coronavirus
This is a dope braggadocio line, again not that direct but on point relevantly and that's a call for props rolling at defcon 3.
Made the deadline two weeks coz you're too weak to pop a para sooner Bro you couldn't drop flames as a burning paratrooper
This was pretty funny, I liked the use of alliteration in the filler with the use of the word pop, but I still didn't find this bar that direct, like it's a bit generic to me but I like that the para up in there could mean chute or graph.
So fuck name flips or a lame diss you could blame this or that again Everybody like "oh great we gotta pretend Stal can rap again"
That filler line played quick with cool inner multis, I wish it carried through somehow into the punch, cos while there was the quote, the rhyme was just rap again/that again and it just felt a bit lacking in creativity for me even if it was a bit funny.
When the vote comes in we know its Biden time Till Stalin goes Trump crying like his lying's fine
I liked the relevance of this content, and the flow of the bar, at this point I kinda want to feel more brutality in the bars cos you started with going Bain with a neck chord just for people thinking you'd choke and then it's been verse so far of like a few kinda soft digs about his ability to drop flames and you being a bright star.
Face it homie you're mid 30s and done nothing with your life Been on a site two decades and never picked up a mic
You know as a personal this might be pretty disheartening as a jab if this guy did nothing with his life or picked up a mic, the rhyme though of just mic/life in the multi and no inner stylistically left me scratching my head a bit analyzing this bar, it kinda flows on as your style from some earlier bars so it's like aiit but yeah this one might be your weakest bar for me.
And I could glam it up, make it glorious like its Senna In the end you always been bitch inside like Caitlin Jenner
Man I just don't know if I get this line in how it's relevant to Stalin personally, I'm not sure if Senna is a racecar driver, a herbaceous plant, or a League of Legends character after googling. I mean I know the Kardashians but idk how I feel about someone just calling someone else a bitch in a battle with no kinda reference point so this one kinda fell flat for me and might tie for the weakest bar in the verse.
I'm the main script...you play around in the margins Call me Leninism, coz I always been ahead of Stalin
Man I liked this bar the first time I read it through and still liked it in the contemplation and reading it just now, I guess for me Lenininism/Cuba cos it was just margins/Stalin that rhymed it was a bit weak as a closer cos I like multis heaps. Thematically it was excellent, I liked the depth of the allegory but yeah I felt like it could have been carved a bit harder even though it tied the whole thing together nicely and as an overall stanza the whole piece was solid.
Stalin:
I wish you wrote 16 but whether it's being like you're too good to write 16 for Cuba or you were just like that'll do it has to reflect in the vote I think surely, anyway..
I cant even respect him, he should die by a lethal injection Hes a virus to the site not even beaches would let in
Flow of the bar and inner in the filler was killer, I wondered if beaches was a person like an old mod or something that didn't let Cuba in but idk about that and google just reckons like Coronavirus isn't allowed at beaches and that Cuba's beaches are free of large crowds so I mean I still didn't hardout 'get' this bar but like I think I did and it rhymed good and while it could have been more direct it was a good aggressive start.
Saying hes better than Stalin, thats blasphemy When he cant carry the weight, like a McCaffery knee
While I reckon the use of the NFL player reference is cool for imagery and to tie in the start of the punch which was pretty funny, the filler could have been more related to it and the overall bar could have been more direct and the rhyme of the multi which only hit at the ends of this bar was a bit stretched but it was still a good bar and continued to setup the vibe good.
I raised your whole style, you lost all sanity But your fathers bout to ruin your career like the Ball family!
The flow on to the ball reference was cool and I like the use of references and the smoothness of this multi, calling him your son is pretty harsh but still similarly to Cubas verse I feel like you could have been more brutal with your lettering/word choice overall. Stylistically though yours so far feels more cohesive.
We had alot of crew beef but name one who stopped the 'Gades Only ever been a member of a crew whos top, then fades
This bar is dope, braggadocio components are so important and the tribute to the old school is what it's all about, the remembrance of the history and the shout out to the time gone is cool. The multi sat well with the topic of this bar and the personal in it while it hit well, it could have still been even more direct, the way the punch starts with only could almost come across as a flow-on from the filler you know what I mean.
Cuba always needed Stalin you cant get past those facts If they knew you represent them, theyd ask for castro back!
This while a cryptic bar is phat too and I like it like maybe the most out of all the bars personally, it's direct and really straight to Cuba with its content. The multi hits good and the reference again to castro was cool, and the historical context that goes along with it is dope too, it's similar as for me to Cubas closer.
You were a joke to the Lawless like the Gravano sentence Stalins came to scrap til you fade to black like a Soprano ending
That inner multi in the punch and the two references that sat together nicely in the closer were dope. The personal up in there and the imagery of James Gandolfini there at the end brought the verse together well.
Fuck so overall I feel like I wanted to read more of a horrorcore style added into the brutality of both of the bars, but that's just me. Both battlers brought strong bargame that's for real and both really know how to execute an opponent with text personally. Stylistically I'mma say that Stalin edged it but it's gotta be overall and had Stalin brought more bars and a bit more content it could easily sway that way cos man that verse was a dope read but equally Cubas verse was a dope read and while both verses had their differences by way of style and flow and timbre, for me Cuba really captured more overall components in his writing of crucial battle rap components and was a bit funnier. Close battle yo, though
MVGT Cuba
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