Concrete:
aka KillSpree, yet versus me I'm one on a first degree murder streak call me bad chef fits perfectly, I'm just serving beans
Aiit I've read this a few times and I can't fault the style firstly, and the knowledge dropped in the opener is dope. More of a connection between the bad chef part in the first line could have tied it together tighter but that versus me/murder streak/perfectly/serving beans inner and outer multi scheme was mean.
win the tourney? please, being dope you can't claim tell women you not average, they label that man's plain
The personal here is pretty funny but idk for me saying he can't say he's dope and he's plain didn't hit that hard after saying you're on a murder streak. It was smirkable but not that funny. Style was aiit but could have done more with this bar.
damn shame, battling noobs to the top, better stop cant see Orion as the equivalent of a broken telescope
While this bar is a pretty hurtful personal, it was a bit stretched in the punch and the flow was a bit average there cos of that. Wanted to see a bit more brutality in the language used overall by this point. The imagery here though was nice. I liked this bar.
with sub-lethal lines you'll pay the ultimate price most impressive feature: zero life on multiple sites
sub-lethal lines/ultimate price/multiple sites were tight multis there but for me there was a lack of connection between the set-up and punch in this bar. Saying his highest achievement is no life on multiple sites is a bit of a reach without some kind of reference point so it didn't hit so hard for me this bar. Still a bit of a burn.
imagining clever nameflips until his head fractures pull any Connery here and wind up as the dead actor
Yo I liked this bar for that nameplay and multi. Could have done more with the scheme but it's concise and funny and that Sean reference brought it together nicely.
B a veteran? peep Cubas L line on how to weather storms and removing u from any forum turns it to a better form
Mild diss here saying removing him from a forum makes it better and Cuba had a line, idk didn't hit that hard for me. The rhyme was solid but only those two three-syllabled points, just feel that more could have been done with it even with the limitations of the short line style used.
an absolute abomination, my punches leave more bruises brutally beat you, good sport or not, another sore loser
This line was nice for its brutality, and I liked the flow of the punch but again it had just those two three-syllable points of rhyme which kinda detracts from the flow for me. Felt a bit generic.
making peeps snore, useless unlike this champion cruising I dunno whats more monotonous, your bars or ambient music
While this line was pretty funny, it fell a bit flat for its generic nature. The multi hit a four syllable point which increased its complexity but with more combos of complex rhyme in the scheme it would just make your bars hit with more punch and have greater flow and pace and just overall x-factor cos they come across a bit monotonous and could have more depth with more creativity.
I'll swiftly hand him grief trying to dismantle Crete cos like Rapper T, you're just out of your damn league
Then you come back to a scheme with more complexity like this and instantly like the flow and creativity that's gone into it is more apparent straight away, had the start of the filler flowed on from that ambient music/champion cruising at the start of here too it could just make the pace of the piece altogether flow with more fluidity like "Rough handle Beans bruising, he'll have to bleed trying to dismantle Crete". And while the dismantle Crete/damn league isn't an exact fit as a rhyme the way it ends like that on the closer works well. It's pretty fresh and relevant too cos I am just out of this league haha so props for the name drop there too.
Beans:
his names Terje..pronounce Tay-Ruh. (Expos for Crimson either way I know I won’t win but I need to explain shit to him) -He got abused by PointBlank -I Beat him in the 1-2 League -Headstones/graves stand up -Forestay/Force Tay- Tay is his name -Concrete has a OM titled Stepping Stone -Ok Crim if you google Phillip Rivers he’s a QB and just threw a interception vs GB to blow their lead -Ok Crim... Con and I beefed. And then we had a crew battle... Empire won the crew battle. A crew is something you should google incase you don’t know and I have a good feeling you don’t know... -ok so His name is Terje... T Top is on a Pontiac Trans Am... that’s a car crim. A Caaaaaarrrrrrrrr
Damn that was a massive expo.
hit you w/a Wave of punches! You ain’t harder on text S’like how we saw Point Break your neck...I’m Float’n over your Watered concepts
I like the opening filler and the reference to Point Blank who definitely has strong bars. I liked the way this bar flowed and the aggression that it started with. It was a bit stretched which while it defines a sense of style, left it looking messy but the feeling of that in the flow pulled it off as an ok opener.
My crew get sick w/it & we know you ain’t known for threats You still couldn’t see me @ 1 Bar, even w/a mask & a Negative Covid Test
The relevance of the covid/mask/sick stuff is cool, it comes across to me as though you're saying your crew get sick with it but you aren't sick at all so that was a bit confusing even though I got the concept. There was a bit of discontinuity between saying he's non-threatening and then saying he couldn't see you and idk for me it just didn't come across as that hard-hitting.
Get this Hard Rock to the face right, so your winning faith light Next time Concrete Stands Tall in a Field? I’ll be spitting on his GraveSite
The first time I read this through I enjoyed the imagery and the visual and the brutality and disrespect in this line. The winning faith light/spitting on his gravesite is stretched of course and could have been carved more but it kinds of adds to the style brought to this battle. The nameplay was aiit and it worked as a bar though just could have done more with it.
B/c Rappers bracket? You Sinkin to death, clown Hit you w/this Forestay! & Sail right into the next round
The sinking/forestay/sailing link was aiit, kinda pirate-like. The pace of the bar was aiit and the rhymes were ok but it could have been more complex and direct. I struggle to see the link conceptually between hitting Tay with your force and the death of a sinking clown. Expected more but maybe I missed a point here.
You were texts rep of thrones, Beans cause death in tones Walking over you & everyone in your crew is my version of “Stepping stones”
The multi was cool, giving him props in the filler was interesting to me and the personal was aiit but it could have been more hard hitting and direct with its imagery as a bar.
This Colt Action? Damage your throat & face Then Phillip Rivers w/Cons Body parts after Drowning him w/these Throw Aways
The reference and concept was cool but the relevance was lost on me as to how it was directly towards Concrete and the filler was real generic and the damaged throat and face led to body parts and drowning so while the violent intention was there, the continuity between the content in this bar and the generic nature of it that didn't have much wordplay didn't connect for me. The concept was there and there was a multi but it was a weak bar.
Our OM beef? No respect was how things were rash’d I saw Con Diss Ending, & then Empire patronized how much Syn is trash
The facts here and the wordplay gave this bar heaps of potential. The rhyming was a bit loose and while it was cool conceptually, it's just saying that someone is trash which isn't that hard hitting but for the concept it was aiit.
We’ll Drive up, aim for the head & ruin this mans plan One shot’ll Remove T Top! Then we’ll pull body parts off my Trans Am
This bar is aiit, for me knowing the rapper as Concrete and referring to him as T took away from the intention here. The drive up/T Top/Trans Am link was cool and had violent intentions again, but similar to earlier in the piece the lack of continuity between taking off his top and then pulling his body parts off was detrimental to health of this bar and being the closer, for me the stanza in its entirety. While it could have been a cool concept, yeah for those reasons the closer didn't connect as hard as it could have.
Overall after reading over this battle a few times and contemplating how much bad outweighs how much good for a while, Concrete takes it and Beans wasn't as consistent through this verse. For the references and creativity side of things, Beans brought some good game but the continuity between filler and punchlines wasn't as solid as Concretes. Both had some aiit nameplay and wordplay going on and while Beans had some violence in his bars, a lot didn't connect with the humour side of things, it was more like my gun does damage whereas the bar schemes that Concrete brought were personally more funny I found personally. There were some fucking next level awesome concepts going on in the creativity overall and both brought quite the game to try to pick between. Beans hit him with some punches and a rock and some damage. Beans got served, his head fractured, punched, brutally beaten and swiftly handed grief so there was slightly more that way but just after feeling through the verses and for the overall conceptual creation and application of personals in a funny way
MVGT Concrete
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