The 187: Quarters) Orion V 20TheTruth

Damn, Iuno If I Can Post... Ima Be In Tha Studio Tuesday, An' Ima Be Busy

I'll Try...

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Done Point Ur against Orion...

Welcome to the Illest tourny OUT.. OOOOO

ORION

You poor bastard...

Fuck you an' fuck ya crew, I'm puttin' ya under dude
13 votes for cats that's already out, and NONE fa YOU! ..fool
It's my purpose to bring, a merkin' to him
It's fact Blank's makin' plenty noise but ain't hurtin' a thing
Ya still unlucky 13, so you've lost it this time
Quarters is the best you gettin' wit' you FOURS-in ya RHYMES
Of course I'ma shine, you'll see when I rattle Blank's
You fallin' quick in this tourny, like you been in the battle ranks
Jus' check his form, when I'm winnin' this cat's dead
You Blank off'a the top, kinda like ya signature's slaphead
Don't be spittin' the wack text, I had to get mean
You gon' make it 'bout as far in this tourny as you have in the teens

Enjoy the crew votes... you'll need 'em

Point Blank would've died against this shit haha...

*check our last battle... he "giggled" in a thread, i mentioned in a punchline
*dude's been loosin' and no-showin'
*shootin' ya self = shootin' blanks... no cum, no sons
*i already beat em, he no-showed cuz he scurred
*linked to a site where he was mackin' a 12 year old gremlin looking bitch

20TheTruth

Point Blank would've died against this shit haha...

*check our last battle... he "giggled" in a thread, i mentioned in a punchline
*dude's been loosin' and no-showin'
*shootin' ya self = shootin' blanks... no cum, no sons
*i already beat em, he no-showed cuz he scurred
*linked to a site where he was mackin' a 12 year old gremlin looking bitch

VOTE ON WHICH VERSE IS BETTA DISSING POINT BLANK

PEACE

Edited by ILLA

lol why didnt u post my expos... the first bar people wont get its cool....

UPPING

Wo shit sorry I thought I did hold up...

1-0 Uppin'

Fuck you an' fuck ya crew, I'm puttin' ya under dude
13 votes for cats that's already out, and NONE fa YOU! ..fool

Meh... nice flow, average punch. not spectacular bar. 3/5

It's my purpose to bring, a merkin' to him
It's fact Blank's makin' plenty noise but ain't hurtin' a thing

Dope personal punch. hot flow, killer name flip. 4.5/5

Ya still unlucky 13, so you've lost it this time
Quarters is the best you gettin' wit' you FOURS-in ya RHYMES

Didnt like this bar, didnt catch the flow, or the punch. wordplay seemed wack too. 2/5

Of course I'ma shine, you'll see when I rattle Blank's
You fallin' quick in this tourny, like you been in the battle ranks

meh, average personal punch, easy attack. nice flow. nothing special tho. 3/5

Jus' check his form, when I'm winnin' this cat's dead
You Blank off'a the top, kinda like ya signature's slaphead

ROFL ... funny as fuck, ended a bit weak, but was still funny. nice name flip again. 4/5

Don't be spittin' the wack text, I had to get mean
You gon' make it 'bout as far in this tourny as you have in the teens

not great flow again. average punch, has no wieght with it. 2.5/5

Total : 19/30.

20TheTruth

The funny thing is, I thought Point cudda beaten both of these verses if he had bothered...idiot, nevamind..

Orion had some good punches and some flat punches...the first one i didnt get till he explained it to me on MSN, so it doesnt come across that effectively to me, u gotta really make it clear what ur referin 2 in the punch for me...didnt get that fours in ya rhymes either...I also thought u used a cuple of commonly used plays against him (the youth thing, the blanks thing)...they were good examples of those but still a little uncreative, took a bit of the stong off them, still good punches tho, closer was dope actually...didnt really like that u used "fallin quick in this tourney...." and "get as far in this tourney", too similar disses for me, so you certainly wud have left the door open for the Point-dexter

20, nice opener, liked how you used the teen diss against him...similar to Orion, used a common diss against him and span it nicely, dope little continuation of the diss into the next line as well...stylistic, i like that a lot, porno with banks was ok, little flat but it still hit...that was kinda buildin up to be a nice little 4bars and then it kinda flopped, but still good openin 4...next 2lines, why on earth you didnt rhyme on there I will never know, dope idea and I give you credit for the way you set it up...but RHYME man, that was a shame, especially after the banks thing that was a bit dodgy...shootin yaself thing agen, i think thats ment 2 be a blank-play, doesnt really make sense and the diss isnt all that to be honest...its really jus sayin u aint gona beat me coz u 13 with a very simple spin off that, i didnt like that at all...that 4 bars turned out weak, which is a shame coz the wordin of ya set ups is really nice, jus need a bit more creativity with the actually punches...next line, good diss on the quitters thing but sayin his punches lack heavy hitters wud look really bad against him (takin into consideration its supposed to be AGAINST point...who is dope at 1-liners), and also that you didnt have many heavy-hitters yourself...closer was really nice, make me smile

Kinda tough, when I first read it I was leanin towards votin for 20 but then when you actually look a bit closer I think Orion did enuf to be better than 20s verse...in terms of writin a verse to combat Point I think Orion did a better job (tho I dont think he wudda beaten point if im honest with this, too many blips for a 12line verse)...but he did a slightly better job than 20 and thats all that matters

Vote - Winston

ayo, im findin this shit so hard to vote due to the fact theyre both dissin Point n not each other for some reason

anyways, yeah.

If it was the average textcee spittin what O did evry1 woulda been like "oh shit dats hot" fo rill n yall know it. anyways, O's flow was On-Point (no pun intended) as usual. A hard hittin verse needs flow as i say, tho flow's just a plus. Orion used his personals better than 20 did and also had him on the wordplay type punches tho i thot was that FOURS in ya rhymes thing was a bit extraneous for a great wordplay punch. opener was funny for me, seems like somethin i'd write. closer aint work too well for me.

20's verse did not seem like his best shit fo rill. The flow was on n off to me. It's the personals within the rhymes that saved this verse and made it "above average" to me. i see you had personals in mind and then put them in rhyme. i feel u depended on the personals to carry you the full weight throughout this thing and it prolly would have worked if they werent used as much before by other peeps.your closer was ma fave punch from you


the thing i aint like about both verses is they used played personals on dude. wordplay won this for me and O's verse consisted of better wordplay punches.

v/ orion

Big O Weeeeezy :

Fuck you an' fuck ya crew, I'm puttin' ya under dude
13 votes for cats that's already out, and NONE fa YOU!
^ Not feeling this flow is dope, build up is poor kinda filler (like me lol) but finishing punch was dead, for me didnt even clip him..

It's my purpose to bring, a merkin' to him
It's fact Blank's makin' plenty noise but ain't hurtin' a thing
^ LMFAO!! you serious? from your first bar to that? lmao, stop the battle now lol...that just killed my boy off flip was off the hook, flow was perfect..shit was maddd hot..

Ya still unlucky 13, so you've lost it this time
Quarters is the best you gettin' wit' you FOURS-in ya RHYMES
^ First off, flow is jarred thats unlike you, dont really understand it i guess? sorry... :-(

Of course I'ma shine, you'll see when I rattle Blank's
You fallin' quick in this tourny, like you been in the battle ranks
^ This is ok, had better had worse..flipped nicely good build up i guess..

Jus' check his form, when I'm winnin' this cat's dead
You Blank off'a the top, kinda like ya signature's slaphead
^ Funny, clever flip had to think about it for a moment then re-read..lol..ok build up good punch got there hit well so cant complain, dope flow again..

Don't be spittin' the wack text, I had to get mean
You gon' make it 'bout as far in this tourny as you have in the teens
^ Seems fillerish, could have put somthing alot better in, maybe a dope generic iunno somthing to go out with a bang, most flips on him are played or getting boring im sure you get me..

Overall : Not your best and i know you know it..came with one killer bar the rest were meh, ok here and there...in this battle your build ups lacked big style im not going to rabble on im sure you know what i mean..every verse will have a flaw no ones perfect thats the way it is..good shit keep it up and keep that game up, dont let it be slipping, cats are getting better all the time..

20 :

He poppin' his teen pimples.. does the bitch still giggle?*
lemme see if you've elevated.. you've actually fallen off a little...
^ Ok bulid up, punch was lacking that pack..hit but not brilliant, flow was a little akward...

a little? I meant lots-- dude's been gittin' Dropped in the Ranks
You spit like a homo... like the Porno with Bank$
^ Could have bein killer, but i think you've laid it down the wrong way makes it hard to grasp the full effect, i dont know were you could improve it but there is some way im sure...But otherwise im just not digging it, no what i mean?..

This youngin' gittin' schooled fool, lemme test you today...
Who's the weakest bitch on L.A.? Just fill in the (BLANK)
^ Damn this could have bein killer too, just none of it matches its like 2 diffrent lines put together?..iunno..

Whatchu know bout women? haven't even seen a pussy yet...
You shootin' ya self dumbass-- so you ain't sonnin' this Vet!
^ Sorry, allround weak, theres no punch..Dont really make 100% sense, sorry dawg..

You a pro? Fuuuuck that, your punches lack heavy hitters...
I've already merked ya once, no wonder why you're a quitter
^ This is better has a slight edge to it nothing out of this world though, rhyme scheme was alottttt better..set up was kool, flow was fluent..

scared to Face the Truth-- avoidin' the Mirror Everytime... (ugly)
so KEEP spittin' ya Whack Game to Ugly Bitches.... Online
^ Lmao, dope finisher your best do far, nice...Flow was ill final 'Online' was funny thats what i like allround solid bar, dope..keep that up..

Overall : Again not the best and you know it...Battling Blank is hard cus so much is played on him, i see you both picked one concept the same lol...well this verse lacked in a few more places than O's im sure you can see were in my brakedowns so im not going to annoy you and go on and on..

Vote : Orion, takes it just..overall better verse..

 

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