Vengeance: R2-B4) Fatal vs Mcwoods |
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Scotty32
Site Owner Speaker of Wisdom & Truth Joined: 18 October 2003 Location: North West, UK Status: Offline Points: 10489 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 3-4-0 Form: WLLWLL |
Topic: R2-B4) Fatal vs Mcwoods Posted: 18 January 2008 at 11:59am |
16 lines First to 5 or 3KO Crew Votes Allowed ALL Votes MUST be explained Vote swaying will be deleted Only Verses and Votes allowed, all else will be removed. No bitching, use the thread provided if you cant make the deadline see me BEFORE the deadline or you'll be treated as a no-show all verses must be in by: 25th January 2008 at 23:59 GMT (thats UK Time, so don't try an claim "Time Difference" as an excuse) theres no "you spit first", all verses have the same deadline so dont wait for your opponent. DO NOT POST YOUR VERSE. PM your verse to me! if you have problems PM'in it to me, my email address is in my profile, so Server Errors are not a valid excuse Votes will last for 1 week from when the verses are posted. Edited by Scotty32 - 18 January 2008 at 12:09pm |
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Scotty32
Site Owner Speaker of Wisdom & Truth Joined: 18 October 2003 Location: North West, UK Status: Offline Points: 10489 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 3-4-0 Form: WLLWLL |
Posted: 26 January 2008 at 6:39am |
Flash:
Expos: Ive Already Beaten This Chump 3 Times, He's Got No Chance, Ima Monster Against Fatal, You "Wont See A Wood-Win" Like A "Saxaphone Concert!" Its A Fact That I Stomp Herbs, My Shots Rip This Bitch Too E-Z I'll Have Woods "Tastin More Lead" Than The "Blowjobs He Gives To P.B.!" Ya Topicals Are Cheezy, Its Easy It See Ya Lackin Emotion Not To Mention "Woods Struggles Wit Flow" Like A Toothpick In The Ocean! Look Bitch, Im Not Boastin, But I'll Pack Him Wit Shells Ill Bring More "Heat To Woods House" Than A "Log Cabin In Hell!" Woods Pullin Them Bitch-Moves, Face It, Ya Shit Aint Be Hittin This "Pussys Cryin Over Votes" Worse Than Hillary Clinton! Im Sick When Im Spitten, My Hits Rock Yer Heavens At The Plate, "Woods Is Swingin And Missin" Like Im "Roger Clemens!" My Shots'R Endless, And These Keys Hurt Ya Visions Im "Cuttin Woods Off The Top" And I Dont Mean Circumcisions! This Jerk Is Finished, Ya Whole Style Is FAKE N Wack Hey Woods, Congrats On The Topical Title...Oh Wait, My Bad MC Woods: Don't dress ya shit up, faggot...... my punches so sharp, I don’t need tha damn blade call fatal a tree, cause he’s just “ a poor man’s shade” im made too beat fatal, leave you spanked in hearses because being a judge, the only time you “rank in” verses only time flash come hot, Is being heated like a bulb and its like were racing for orange juice, how ill “beat him to a pulp” fatal claims to be one of the best, but he aint got that speech shit, its like he’s throwing ‘“round” 2’ me….his shots that weak! don’t even gotta diss you, just say hello to my crew, “whats up ya’ll” cause I be going through your bars quicker than an alcoholic pub crawl and you aint gotta look at the rhymes, to know who’s above man it’s the court system backwards, how “kon rules the judge” sick of that forced shit, aint got no clout about his ways he comes like a dyslexic Shakespeare, needs help, “spelling out his plays” Im’a crush his hopes, before his folks can even start fatal’s dreams cause the only time “fatal holds a steady line”, is “heart rate machines” DONE...... " Edited by Scotty32 - 26 January 2008 at 6:41am |
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Bolo
Standard Member ¡Ke Viva La Fuckin' Revolución! Joined: 11 November 2004 Status: Offline Points: 1397 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 4-4-4 Form: NWLNNN |
Posted: 26 January 2008 at 2:54pm |
How come no one's votin?
Fatal - Ive Already Beaten This Chump 3 Times, He's Got No Chance, Ima Monster Against Fatal, You "Wont See A Wood-Win" Like A "Saxaphone Concert!" haha, liked the play....nice opener Its A Fact That I Stomp Herbs, My Shots Rip This Bitch Too E-Z I'll Have Woods "Tastin More Lead" Than The "Blowjobs He Gives To P.B.!" lead/pb's been done twice in bout a week in a half, but this had a twist to it, good bar Ya Topicals Are Cheezy, Its Easy It See Ya Lackin Emotion Not To Mention "Woods Struggles Wit Flow" Like A Toothpick In The Ocean! ehh...not that hard hitting... Look Bitch, Im Not Boastin, But I'll Pack Him Wit Shells Ill Bring More "Heat To Woods House" Than A "Log Cabin In Hell!" again, kinda played concept, or atleast not that original...n kinda generic Woods Pullin Them Bitch-Moves, Face It, Ya Shit Aint Be Hittin This "Pussys Cryin Over Votes" Worse Than Hillary Clinton! hahaha, liked it Im Sick When Im Spitten, My Hits Rock Yer Heavens At The Plate, "Woods Is Swingin And Missin" Like Im "Roger Clemens!" clever, not sure how hard it hits, but very clever and atleast it hits My Shots'R Endless, And These Keys Hurt Ya Visions Im "Cuttin Woods Off The Top" And I Dont Mean Circumcisions! haha, good bar, funny This Jerk Is Finished, Ya Whole Style Is FAKE N Wack Hey Woods, Congrats On The Topical Title...Oh Wait, My Bad hahahaha, this was funny...well-worded imo Woods - my punches so sharp, I don’t need tha damn blade call fatal a tree, cause he’s just “ a poor man’s shade” ehh, considerin he ranks higher, not sure how effective this is, but its decent im made too beat fatal, leave you spanked in hearses because being a judge, the only time you “rank in” verses again, decent...not that great only time flash come hot, Is being heated like a bulb and its like were racing for orange juice, how ill “beat him to a pulp” heh, clever..but pretty generic...good though fatal claims to be one of the best, but he aint got that speech shit, its like he’s throwing ‘“round” 2’ me….his shots that weak! a lil confusin...but not bad...kinda impersonal again don’t even gotta diss you, just say hello to my crew, “whats up ya’ll” cause I be going through your bars quicker than an alcoholic pub crawl kinda played concept...prolly ur weakest bar and you aint gotta look at the rhymes, to know who’s above man it’s the court system backwards, how “kon rules the judge” doesnt really DISS him, just kinda says kon's above him...n he never claimed otherwise sick of that forced shit, aint got no clout about his ways he comes like a dyslexic Shakespeare, needs help, “spelling out his plays” hahaha, i liked this bar...very good Im’a crush his hopes, before his folks can even start fatal’s dreams cause the only time “fatal holds a steady line”, is “heart rate machines” haha, again, nice...good closer well, after breakin it down....it seems kinda one sided in fatal's favor...no offence to woods... as for constructive criticism...woods, ur verse flowed well...u had some decent concepts, some of them were a bit to impersonal but the ideas were good...the last two bars were ur best by far imo fatal... ur verse was good...not "wow" but good...most punches landed well though a were weak or mediocre...a few played concepts as well...the flow was good... vote: fatal woods, if u want better reasoning, i'll be happy to provide it |
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I am the one that knocks...
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mcwoods
Superior Member Joined: 04 December 2006 Status: Offline Points: 4204 Crew: XFade: Phoenix Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 42-51-0 Form: LLLLWW |
Posted: 26 January 2008 at 4:38pm |
yeah provide it
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Bolo
Standard Member ¡Ke Viva La Fuckin' Revolución! Joined: 11 November 2004 Status: Offline Points: 1397 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 4-4-4 Form: NWLNNN |
Posted: 26 January 2008 at 4:47pm |
HAHA...well, if ur serious (btw, this makes the hillary clinton line, pretty fuckin funny)...
Fatal's verse wasnt' anything out of this world, but he consistently had punches that made me say "that was clever" or "oh shit.." or just laugh (out loud a couple of times)....his flow wasnt amazing, but it was smooth....on the other hand, your verse wasn't bad either...some rhymes were a little basic (also, bulb, pulp dont exactly rhyme)...ur flow wasnt bad, but it wasnt very good either (a bit iffy in places)...yes, u had some original ideas (the orange juice thing, heart rate machines) and a likd the shakespeare line, BUT the oj line was more of a jab...the last two bars, like i said were tight, but that was about it....meanwhile fatal had number of nice lines, save a couple....he took personals, punches, flow, plays....there wasnt a huge disparity in the plays category, but he still edged that too...it was a comprehensive victory....it wasnt a blow out, but bar by bar, category by category, and overall....fatal took this Vote: Fatal |
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I am the one that knocks...
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mcwoods
Superior Member Joined: 04 December 2006 Status: Offline Points: 4204 Crew: XFade: Phoenix Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 42-51-0 Form: LLLLWW |
Posted: 26 January 2008 at 4:54pm |
spose you aint been back too long, fair enough.
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dalinquent
Superior Member Joined: 04 June 2004 Location: United States Status: Offline Points: 4687 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 29-23-1 Form: WLLLWL |
Posted: 26 January 2008 at 5:53pm |
Flash, Verse was pretty cool...Seem like you went overboard on the woods plays...Wasn't really feeling most of em as there just cheap imitations of previous plays in most cases...Unfortunately, a few of em was still good. (heat to woods house, for example)...other than that I didn't feel you landed any of the other wood plays. Like the woodwin, I used it in my last battle with woods, at which point I found out sparta used it before hand. The verse wasn't poor tho, still had good flow, and consistent punches...
Woods, I don't know how to put this without it seeming like hate, but terrible effort dude. As if flash didn't bring enough played wordplay to the battle :). There isnt on play that stands out in my head for a good reason, opener played, followup played...then ya lost me at the shakespeare play. Shakespeare plays period have been play for about 2 years... Vote goes to flash...As mentioned above I was somewhat disappointed with both verses. Both brought played shit, and failed at making it fresh. Flash however was more direct. Tho he was using punches I wasn't feelin fa the most part, They were attacking woods, as opposed to the generic wordplay of woods...If your gonna go generic, You have to go super dope else you just lose... nuff? |
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Fatal
Superior Member ...Wicked Wit Wordplay... Joined: 08 March 2005 Location: Chicago Status: Offline Points: 6441 Crew: The Dynasty Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 44-4-2 Form: WNNWWW |
Posted: 26 January 2008 at 8:20pm |
Thanks for the votes yall...even fuckin dal's harsh ass... 2-0 uppin fa the ko
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mcwoods
Superior Member Joined: 04 December 2006 Status: Offline Points: 4204 Crew: XFade: Phoenix Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 42-51-0 Form: LLLLWW |
Posted: 26 January 2008 at 8:58pm |
im happy(ish) with dal's vote, but how are my opening two bars played? and heat to wood's house... shit ive never had a fatal verse were there wasnt a hell play in it, how that stood out as good, and my stuff's played? makes me question it. if im wrong in my accusations then someone say? |
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dalinquent
Superior Member Joined: 04 June 2004 Location: United States Status: Offline Points: 4687 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 29-23-1 Form: WLLLWL |
Posted: 26 January 2008 at 11:36pm |
very quickly woods...
fatals line, heat to woods house was good imo because it was a double play...heat and woods... woods, first was play because I've seen the same concept used gainst him before...second played because it was a stretched concept to begin with and poor grammer add to my disliking the punch...rank should have been ranked and it would have been slightly better...still wack tho then again, I have much higher standards when reading verses...so many its just me hope that helps, uppin |
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DressToKill
Superior Member Joined: 27 June 2006 Location: Canada,New Brunswick Status: Offline Points: 6872 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 78-62-0 Form: LLWWWL |
Posted: 26 January 2008 at 11:43pm |
I also gotta go with Fatal, like Dal said they both brought ALOT of played shit but it seemed that Fatal was more clever and more consistent with his hits...Woods if your gonna use Wordplay try to incorperate a good personal..The kon/con plays are done to hell and the shakespeare shit..but anyways I wasnt feeling either of these verses all to much but like I said Fatal GMV
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The original comeback kid
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U.N.L.M.
Standard Member Joined: 19 December 2006 Location: USA Status: Offline Points: 1955 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 23-15-0 Form: WWWWWW |
Posted: 26 January 2008 at 11:49pm |
Fatal
Ive Already Beaten This Chump 3 Times, He's Got No Chance, Ima Monster Against Fatal, You "Wont See A Wood-Win" Like A "Saxaphone Concert!" Nice opener but i've seen Dal AND sparta use this, a little played to be honest 2/5 Its A Fact That I Stomp Herbs, My Shots Rip This Bitch Too E-Z I'll Have Woods "Tastin More Lead" Than The "Blowjobs He Gives To P.B.!" Nice play tho the PB/lead thing is getting used to shit here..also a little bit of a stretch to say him and Woods are sexually tight since i don't see how they ride each other but still funny..3/5 Ya Topicals Are Cheezy, Its Easy It See Ya Lackin Emotion Not To Mention "Woods Struggles Wit Flow" Like A Toothpick In The Ocean! Nope, not feelin this at all, decent play but really kind of random 1.5/5 Look Bitch, Im Not Boastin, But I'll Pack Him Wit Shells Ill Bring More "Heat To Woods House" Than A "Log Cabin In Hell!" The hell theme has been used a lot by you but i thought this was a cool play 3.5/5 Woods Pullin Them Bitch-Moves, Face It, Ya Shit Aint Be Hittin This "Pussys Cryin Over Votes" Worse Than Hillary Clinton! Lol, believe or not i had a line just like this i was gonna use against sparta but sparta doesn't bitch over votes so i didn't use it..it was a very nice hit 4/5 Im Sick When Im Spitten, My Hits Rock Yer Heavens At The Plate, "Woods Is Swingin And Missin" Like Im "Roger Clemens!" Eh, decent i guess 2/5 My Shots'R Endless, And These Keys Hurt Ya Visions Im "Cuttin Woods Off The Top" And I Dont Mean Circumcisions! Dope, funny as hell too 4.5/5 This Jerk Is Finished, Ya Whole Style Is FAKE N Wack Hey Woods, Congrats On The Topical Title...Oh Wait, My Bad Not bad, wanted a more Oh shit closer tho 3/5 MC Woods: my punches so sharp, I don’t need tha damn blade call fatal a tree, cause he’s just “ a poor man’s shade” The shade comparison is played but i liked how you flipped it a bit and made a pretty cool play with the tree and all...3/5 im made too beat fatal, leave you spanked in hearses because being a judge, the only time you “rank in” verses ehh alright not feelin it much tho 2/5 only time flash come hot, Is being heated like a bulb and its like were racing for orange juice, how ill “beat him to a pulp” Cool play but kind of generic 3/5 fatal claims to be one of the best, but he aint got that speech shit, its like he’s throwing ‘“round” 2’ me….his shots that weak! Pretty good 3/5 don’t even gotta diss you, just say hello to my crew, “whats up ya’ll” cause I be going through your bars quicker than an alcoholic pub crawl Nice play but generic again 3/5 its only 16 lines most should be relating to him.. and you aint gotta look at the rhymes, to know who’s above man it’s the court system backwards, how “kon rules the judge” Not feelin this much, it was alright but a little bit of a stretch to say about him 2/5 sick of that forced shit, aint got no clout about his ways he comes like a dyslexic Shakespeare, needs help, “spelling out his plays” hahah dope 4/5 Im’a crush his hopes, before his folks can even start fatal’s dreams cause the only time “fatal holds a steady line”, is “heart rate machines” Nice closer, very solid 3.5/5 23.5/40 Well, how great it ends up a tie..Okay, now I'm gonna give this to Fatal for the next reasons..Every play he had either had to do with Woods or was a personal(votes, title) while Woods had 2 or 3 generic bars(even tho they were cool plays) when i really felt he should've tried to come more personal..I'll put it like this, both when i read it seemed about equal to me, and it came out like that when i did bar by bar so the best way to do it is to see who came more personal..It's 16 lines, come with some good stuff and make it relate to your opponent..Woods, you had the Shakespeare, alcoholic, and orange play that could've been used against anyone or in an open mic (they were dope though)..I enjoyed both of them since they both had creative, witty attempts at plays so that also equals out..Fatal had a better flow than Woods but it was really just the personal level that gives him this..Now, Woods i can see why you think you won but i believe it can go either way depending on how you look at it..Both of you didn't drop all that great but it was an extremely close battle..I'm always so inclined to vote for Woods in these battles cause he has creative plays and all but he just always slightly misses it to me..anyway, you can pm Woods if ya want me to explain more...Yeah, i realize it's easier to come with more plays relating to Woods since his name is open to possibilities but i still would've liked to see you relate those plays more to him, just IMO... |
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U.N.L.M.
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Posted: 26 January 2008 at 11:51pm |
damn, if i saw DTK"s vote i wouldn't have wasted all that time lol...i should've refreshed the page..o well....
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DressToKill
Superior Member Joined: 27 June 2006 Location: Canada,New Brunswick Status: Offline Points: 6872 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 78-62-0 Form: LLWWWL |
Posted: 26 January 2008 at 11:57pm |
Lmao..KO Fatal..
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The original comeback kid
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Scotty32
Site Owner Speaker of Wisdom & Truth Joined: 18 October 2003 Location: North West, UK Status: Offline Points: 10489 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 3-4-0 Form: WLLWLL |
Posted: 27 January 2008 at 5:51am |
flash thru
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