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    Posted: 14 December 2018 at 8:09am
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Good luck Rapper T
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Edited by Crimson Juice - 19 December 2018 at 10:48am

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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 17 December 2018 at 5:53pm
You want to battle again what the hell is with you?
Shit ... at this rate I’m gonna run out of L’s to give you!

I’ll mock his fake sound then I’m beating him down
Because I don’t got to play golf to put T in the ground!

No one in their right mind would buy an album of this geek yelling ..
So You’d have to look in the immune system to find a place where T sellin!
(T cell in )

I’ll bruise this opponent it’s a fact this dumb dude isn’t true and I know it
Because he stays on some bull shit ..
like a magic mushroom when it’s growin!
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 17 December 2018 at 6:39pm
Vaggum ain't no villain she's a failed phlagellum
Fuckin' melons on her swellin' while she's wailin' her ballad

Don't mean to fade her but hell if slum gonna sweat on the boards
I'm decapitatin' Vaginellum ... love gettin' head from a whore ...

N you a deadbeat bore, probly 9th cos of bum buddys
Fat piece of shit you remind me ov Al ... um ... BUNDY!!!

Can't fuck up T - he God - won't fell the mind of his
Neph Vellum (Nephilim) callin' "UNCLE T!!!" but hell if I know kid
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 17 December 2018 at 8:58pm

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Vellum, Iiked your first 3 couplets, I thought your first 2 couplets were particularly clever and smooth.

"I’ll bruise this opponent it’s a fact this dumb dude isn’t true and I know it
Because he stays on some bull shit ..
like a magic mushroom when it’s growin!"

I felt the flow broke a bit here but I like content. I liked your drop though.

Rapper T, I don't know what your first couplet means

"Vaggum ain't no villain she's a failed phlagellum
Fuckin' melons on her swellin' while she's wailin' her ballad"

I don't see how failing as a villain relates to a defective flagellum. Not capable of movement perhaps? seems like it was placed there for structure alone. Completely lost on the second line, seems placed for the sake of internal rhymes not for content progression. Also phlagellum/ her ballad (or just ballad, not sure) was a reach rhyme to me. I think starting like this set a bad tone for me.

The rest I felt were empty punches. Just bein crass for the hell of it. Wasn't very captivating. The last line was cringey because the rest wasn't great and then you claim invincibility and call yourself god.

Vote: Vellum.
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 25 May 2019 at 11:27am
Due to how long this battle has been sitting around,I've awarded the win to Vellum
and i'm moving this to the battle archive.

Win Vellum.
"You need to learn how to make an exit,
before you can dare make an entrance".
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