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    Posted: 13 September 2018 at 12:16pm
16 lines - no extra lines earned - drop due in one week

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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 13 September 2018 at 4:55pm
His bars so milked out, it's showing that they're chymosin fast
I'm going down on a pussy, but not like his Rosen acts!
Not much about this fucking clown to go on, but I know he's fag'
Overheard he controls the work of 'semen' and he's no bosun fam'!
This freakin' jerk's just weak 'n' worthless, he's berzerk
To call himself a Boss on a rap site where his bars don't even work!
Did Battle Practice and before that, you were Trying A Different Flow
And Rhet' claimed it basic, stepping up something you didn't know!
This Nebraskan 'tard can't grasp a bar, just face it 'n' quit it
The only thing high in elevation about you is the state which ya live in!
Been here 12 days and says no extra lines earned, he's a big weak farce
If earning's based on days and dopeness shown you don't even deserve 16 bars!
Had a piece called Non-Title, which is funny to question, yes?
'Coz other than Wack Kid, that is something you'll never get!
All your OM's are fails, how can you embrace ya problems/flaws?
Story Of Mommy - should've been about her mistake to not abort!



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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 13 September 2018 at 7:56pm
I'm the holy water holy Cross call me exorcism Boss
Leave daemon, exhault, for I come in the name of rap God's
Demons aren't earthly but you are just plain out of orbit (gum)
chewed up spit out early like your flavor I ignored it
I'm in the devil's playground but never have an idol hand
Stay busy with my shovel and slay ground for bodies I plant
I will eat you alive and make you reborn as shit TuRDs
Bet this dude thrives for some ass corn and waers skirts
Hell I don't know, I'm fighting blind but daemon don't scare me
I was born in the valley of evil, you could say Satan raised me
I'm bullet proof your bars graze me so you should aim to kill
I hope you got what it takes to beat this dude with no skill
T-R-D more like Re-Tar-Ded, Hear it speak like Wee-Ta-Ded
Keep-bars-weak like loaves of bread, hear them weap-da-dead
15 down - done - leave you and this battle minus one
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TRD,yep nice start here,you opened up with a nice personal in that Michael
Rosen play on his alias,and the set up was kind of a force via the w/play but
it worked,and i'll also give you credit as you didn't have an awful lot of anno
at your disposal either,i also liked the maritime play in your second bar too,
in truth the whole verse was aimed well and directed,your w/plays certainty
backed up your punches/personals,and to be honest i found them witty and
creative for the most part,the main highlight for me in your verse was the
humour factor,it added more weight to them,(like a fat woman carrying a lb
of celery),you started with sprite and ended in the same fashion,so props for
the smirks..


RosenBoss,not to bad for you 1st battle here,and like TuRD (sorry i couldn't
help it,i found that bit funny,i know i know,it's the child in me),you also went
with the personal route,and in parts got at him quite well also,however there
were some drawbacks within, like in parts you had some filler content,that
really didn't progress the piece in any way,these can and for most ppl here
may be seen as waisted lines,sure its not a crime to have fillers within a piece,
but on the norm their used either to bolster up what your saying,or used as
transitions for a set up/play/punch,and the overall assonance was hit and
miss too,some of the end rhymes didn't rhyme,may be that's a accent thing,
but on the whole you gave a good account of your self,well done..



Overall,i liked the fact both went the personal route here,i thought Rosen did
well on the whole,he had a few nice jabs at TRD,and in truth i was quite im-
pressed really,but i feel TRD had no waisted lines,and each bar had a smirk
seam running through it,plus his plays were cool also,props though Rosen,
you ain't that far from being a handful in battle...


Vote...Daemon...peace.
"You need to learn how to make an exit,
before you can dare make an entrance".
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 18 September 2018 at 5:15pm

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RD easily had the best bar of the battle, the “bars don’t even work” bar, which actually flowed nicely with the setup as well. Rosen had just 1 creative (if not a bit played) play, the “orbit/ chewed up” line, which was poorly executed. No offense to either of you, but this battle was actually very lackluster. RD had a better constructed verse, better flow and his punches landed better than Rosen’s, therefore he gets my vote.

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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 18 September 2018 at 6:52pm
^^sorry but this vote does stand,and Hyperactive you need to give a little
more detail when voting on the why's who's and what's,type the whys it's
you feel battler x beat battle x by/ie punches assonance personals .......
peace.
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 26 September 2018 at 2:08am
This one could be close to finish..bump..peace.
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before you can dare make an entrance".
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 26 September 2018 at 2:27am
Hyper says why he thought rapper won... read the vote
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 26 September 2018 at 8:08am
Talking of votes,why didn't you leave one seens you were in here instead of
freeposting?..no disrespect intended but it does need improvment,because
if you recieved a vote with little explanation,you'd have something to say
about it,and you know how we do at LA where voting is concerned..peace.



Again bump ppl..(and votes only pls).


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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 26 September 2018 at 11:40am

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Quote His bars so milked out, it's showing that they're chymosin fast
I'm going down on a pussy, but not like his Rosen acts!
I had to look up chymosin, what can I say, my animal husbandry game is whack, but from I read ... it's not a verb. Good creativity here though, but not feeling the punch.
Quote Not much about this fucking clown to go on, but I know he's fag'
Overheard he controls the work of 'semen' and he's no bosun fam'!
Ok, this is comes across in the bad-bar style, but is cheesy enough to be good. I kinda liked it.
Quote This freakin' jerk's just weak 'n' worthless, he's berzerk
To call himself a Boss on a rap site where his bars don't even work!
Enjoyed the setup. Punch was good too. Bit of a syllable imbalance, but came out clean enough.
Quote Did Battle Practice and before that, you were Trying A Different Flow
And Rhet' claimed it basic, stepping up something you didn't know!
I never really bars that reference names of OM's, I know you have little to go on though, still the punch came out pretty weak.
Quote This Nebraskan 'tard can't grasp a bar, just face it 'n' quit it
The only thing high in elevation about you is the state which ya live in!
Nice enough concept. Reads well in the setup, similar to bar 3. But about that punch ... I know there are a lot of plains there which to me means flat not elevated, so I looked it up, and yes the state's mean elevation is above average out of the 50 states, so ... Bar!
Also I kept mistakenly reading it as "face n quit it" and found that sounded much better, and IMO can mean the same ... so how about ... "just face n quit it"/"the state ya live in". or if you don't like that how about ... "look mate just quit"/"the state ya live in" ... just a thought.
Quote Been here 12 days and says no extra lines earned, he's a big weak farce
If earning's based on days and dopeness shown you don't even deserve 16 bars!
Nice enough play, though "big weak farce" is a terrible setup. A little wordy but works.
Quote Had a piece called Non-Title, which is funny to question, yes?
'Coz other than Wack Kid, that is something you'll never get!
It was called 'No Title', but I guess that's just a typo. But 'funny to question, YES?' ... such horrible wording. I guess you were running out of steam here. Not a great punch.
Quote All your OM's are fails, how can you embrace ya problems/flaws?
Story Of Mommy - should've been about her mistake to not abort!
Nice concept, but but "problems/flaws" was lazy wording, and spoiled it for me. I can see it was done to match "to not abort" but what about changing two words around ...
"problems and flaws" / " not to abort" ... much better.

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Quote I'm the holy water holy Cross call me exorcism Boss
Leave daemon, exhault, for I come in the name of rap God's
Nice aggression to start off. Nothing too clever but works OK.
Quote Demons aren't earthly but you are just plain out of orbit (gum)
chewed up spit out early like your flavor I ignored it
Had some potential, but the final punch was so weak. Also check your syllables ... you are clearly matching "PLAIN" and "FLAVor" as a start of Multi (if you weren't, well they are strong syllables so it will come across that way anyway) but ...
Plain out of orbit = 5
Flavour I ignored it = 6
Quote I'm in the devil's playground but never have an idol hand
Stay busy with my shovel and slay ground for bodies I plant
Loved the setup, but it doesn't translate through unfortunately. Wording poor, and punch and rhyme were weak.
Quote I will eat you alive and make you reborn as shit TuRDs
Bet this dude thrives for some ass corn and waers skirts
Lolled at the setup, but nothing more. If you could at least tighten up the punch and make a Multi it would've been something at least.
Quote Hell I don't know, I'm fighting blind but daemon don't scare me
I was born in the valley of evil, you could say Satan raised me
Nearly. Just doesn't work though. Wording is OK, but ... Only thing that rhymes is Me and Me. (Not you).
Quote I'm bullet proof your bars graze me so you should aim to kill
I hope you got what it takes to beat this dude with no skill
I see now that anything that looked close to a Multi before may have been by accident. You should definitely try to use them. Wording is ambiguous also. Are you the "Dude with no skill" he should try and beat?
Quote T-R-D more like Re-Tar-Ded, Hear it speak like Wee-Ta-Ded
Keep-bars-weak like loaves of bread, hear them weap-da-dead
No, didn't like this. Not really sure what happened here.
Quote 15 down - done - leave you and this battle minus one
Interesting idea to finish with half a bar, a bold move which really needed to follow a stronger verse to really work.
Also sounds like you are doing a cryptic crossword ... but I can't work it out.

For reasons ... MFVGT ... The Daemon of Rap


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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 26 September 2018 at 11:51am
Rap Daemon wins 3-0 (KO)
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