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Cee-Jay Outlaw 
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 Topic: Round 2: Dougy and LD vs Spume and BrothaGoosePosted: 08 August 2013 at 3:31pm |
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8 lines each
Due 16th August BST Good Luck Fellas!
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Cee-Jay Outlaw
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Joined: 11 October 2007 Status: Offline Points: 2131 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 3-3-0 Form: WLLWWL |
Posted: 20 August 2013 at 3:31pm |
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Dougy and LD
Get the cam and zoom, have you seen spume cry before? Probably have, after he lost to manc and j504..* goose got handled by block, but me first. then he got sentimental and started to restructure his verse... I corrupt the instrumental, to clean it you'd need lysol and a wash cloth Goose is next on his list, It aint salad when they toss froth Fuck the tourney, I'm out... How am I supposed to talk? I cant. I'd bump my battle against ell, But I got fucking banned..... He got bodied though... spume /spyo͞om/ Noun Froth or foam. Verb Form or produce a mass of froth or foam. Synonyms noun. foam - froth - scum - lather - yeast - suds - mousse verb. foam - froth - scum - effervesce - lather Expo 1, spume's 2 losses are from losing to j504 and manc for not putting his best effort in. Expo 2, goose's first loss was from me, then oblock. Expo 3: brotha started to format his verses because his structure sucked I'ma break through connect on jaws have a neck fucked noose
Hunt troops holdin' guns watchin' as you just duck duck goose Equal to ya childs play, I pound ya doggs like overrated corrupt Split Spume in half look at my feet that's how ya see luck- Me ups Flow viciously, malicious melt downs leave ya instantly deceased My partner gettin' banned is tha only chance these bitch see us defeat Hold weapons and takin' aim bruised ya souls these fucks are now harmed Even with a leperachun and a box of cereal you couldn't see Luckys Charms |
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Cee-Jay Outlaw
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Posted: 20 August 2013 at 3:32pm |
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Spume and BG
Aiming shots at snuggs chest, give this lame a doug test cos what i'm fuckin sayin is... every day he is dug-less Check the weakest pairing, they aint no rise to the top shit luck d's recent airing, shown his scribes will be dropped quick Lies gotta stop kids, busted like when doug went unforbidden an luck d knows how that feels cos this bent cunt has bitten!!! Shit on this cancerous filth, then take em to the cleaners promptly stop em from infecting we rejecting double d's like Angelina's body Bert N Ernie, found gay, changed names- meet them as Doug N Dave,
Same game of behavin' strange, Scotty sent Doug away with a wave. These two combined minds IQ about 5, wont find nothin witty, Double D's sum fine lines,but not these guys, im talkin tittie. Snuggy has been deemed a lame under all 3 different names, Luck's 2 ashamed to say, but clearly him and Doug one in the same. Dougy feelin all Lucky its funny, they both wearin a pair Rabbit socks, Kinda crummy how D landed Snuggy, swearin he's a Charmed Cereal Box! |
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The Law
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God of the Minions Joined: 15 June 2013 Status: Offline Points: 5504  Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 64-8-8 Form: LNWWWW |
Posted: 20 August 2013 at 11:19pm |
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Dougy: first bar was mehh, wasn't too strong of a punch IMO.. Next bar was just more or less a statement and just a continuation of trying to play off of the people your opponents lost to. Last 2 bars were very weak also.. really not much of a punch there either. TBH this was a very weak verse on your end for a semi final.
Lucky: Opening 'duck duck goose' play had the potential to be something hot, but I think it fell short on the wording.. Again 2nd bar had some wording issues. Third bar was okay. Nothing spectacular, nothing below par either. Closing bar was more of a self-glorification saying they can't see you rather than a diss or a punch towards your opponent. Spume: Opening bar was mehh IMO, it was missing something. The next two were okay, they brought some consistency punching and I thought the closer was crack. I liked the way you finished your piece off. Goose: Opener was mehh tbh.. You could have used the personal brought in a much better way there.. 2nd bar was ehh tbh also, after hearing spume's nice double D's lines and then reading yours, felt the concept kinda dropped a little there.. next bar was okay, just nothing hard hitting though. Wording in closer could have been much better. MGVT - Spume & Goose - They had the overall better verses in this one. They were just more consistent with punch attempts. They also had a few personal throws Both Lucky and Doug's closer were not really punches. I didn't even think this was closer, tbh. But either way stay up. My vote is in.
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spume corrupt
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Posted: 20 August 2013 at 11:39pm |
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Good looks on the feedback Law;
Preciate ya time man |
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levy420
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Posted: 20 August 2013 at 11:49pm |
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Dougy- like law said pretty weak verse from you coulda been way better nothing really hit n were more statements then anything. i could see the concepts but there was no real conection
lucky- its obvious u had the better verse of the team but ur closer kinda lost any momentum u had gained cuz u ended it wit a self hype bar instead of that go for the throat bar spume- thought u had a good voriety of disses on ld n ds n each concept was fresh imo u had the best vere in tje battle Goose- really was expecting more from u on this dunno if you was goin light on d because of him being our crew leader or what but i expected more from the quality of ur om's recently neways u had a better verse then doug so wit that said mvgt spume n goose for havin more direct n personal angles |
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Brotha Goose
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Posted: 21 August 2013 at 12:34am |
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To be completely honest, I just couldnt come up with enough usable material that fit into LA's new rules regarding personala. Lucky has been on hiatus til recently and Douvy, well its, its Dougy everybody has touched that subject. Anyway, thankz to Law&Levy for the votes!
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The Law
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God of the Minions Joined: 15 June 2013 Status: Offline Points: 5504 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 64-8-8 Form: LNWWWW |
Posted: 21 August 2013 at 12:37am |
There are plenty of material for those two. Lol exactly it's dougy he obvious would have a ton of material. and Lucky has been on hiatus, you could have used that. There is always stuff there. Trust me, I've been to the point when it's like 'fuck, I can't think of shit'. That's when you just take a break from the writing for a few hours or so, or however long and come back to it.
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spume corrupt
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Posted: 21 August 2013 at 7:52am |
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Thanks for taking a look an voting on this levy
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$n00z
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Posted: 21 August 2013 at 8:31am |
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hhmm definitely gotta go with spume n goose Doug n Luck -Dougs verse started out ok as far as flow. had a decent -Luck, duck duck coulda hit if it was setup better.korupt line was not that good of a punch, neither was split spume. next 2 lines ok. next line not a punch, and closer was ok
Spume n Goose -Spume, openin 2 lines were dope. loved the dug-less punch -Goose, nice opener. its a personal as im takin it their names are doug n dave. double d line was nice. not too hard but solid. loved the next 2 lines. closing 2 line were decent. 2nd best verse in the battle thats why mvgt- Spume n Goose |
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U already know...
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spume corrupt
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Posted: 21 August 2013 at 11:00am |
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Preciate you coming thru with the vote snooze; always good to see you up in here main!
Thanks for the battle luck an Doug Well played brotha, I thought yo closer was a righteous blind flip and sealed this for us It's the belts next goose!!! |
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Brotha Goose
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Posted: 21 August 2013 at 3:35pm |
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Thx for all the votes fellas! Appreciate the feed!
@Spume Damn right Bruh! |
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Cee-Jay Outlaw
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Posted: 27 August 2013 at 9:59pm |
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spume and goose win, closed.
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