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iLL ScriptureZ
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Posted: 21 February 2017 at 9:10pm |
Rhyming with the kind of wit that scientists find scientific Climb entire winding bridges - lines of piff, mind as lifted As Mayan wizards tryna shift the signs of wicked some tiny inches Finding lines I'm spitting couldn't cut it with giant scissors Mind you I'm flyer then the highest limits, designer linen & finer women Slicker then the slimy liquid on lion fishes scaling the rise of physics Diamond grit I'm grinding with is covered black like minors pigment Violent vicious silent misfit mimicking ancient tribes and stigmas Pilot homicidal missions transcribed in different dyes I script wit I'm the vision described to nitwits as the sickness with a dying wishlist Stride into the cypher with it, moonshine twisting with a side of cider sipping Something wild like Ryu kicking diner dishes... ...don't even gotta get up to shit on'em like a tired infant.. Colder than an ice front or frozen pie crust, a tyrant like Kobe Bryant Driving with an open Bynum, holes in your Golden line up A global pirate fuck social, holding hostage the solar climate Looking over these lower privates & smolder islands Like molten lava against Trojan riots holding tridents This is the physical sign of an autographed Mein Kampf The releasing of white doves... the dying of my love Seeing me postal is equally poisonous as eating a toadstool Demeaning me won't do the harm I frequently vocal Peace keep? I re-lease a 3 piece then a clean sweep for disposal Leave it PC for the for TV my mean streak's a repeat of Chernobyl I'm revealing a photo of me depleting the ozone still seeking a low-blow From a Rican with no clothes pleasing & eating my creamy risotto This is a sequel to the evil, an upheaval my dolo This was just refill of lethal to you weasels plus the people I don't know
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daydizzle89
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Lets just open up a verse with assonance overload. yah, that sounds like a great idea. Fast pace off the bat. Vocabulary starts off knarly and stays throughout both verses. Thats dope. You kept the same assonance aye thoughout two verses. I give you kudos on that shit.
"Violent vicious silent misfit mimicking ancient tribes and stigmas" Jesus fucking christ kid. Slow the fuck down. Nah, this is typical Ill Scripts just flexing his crown around LA. Dope shit here. Showed alot of flex, showed skill and showed flow. No rust here brudda. Just swag juice. "Violent vicious silent misfit mimicking ancient tribes and stigmas" NASTY "Colder than an ice front or frozen pie crust, a tyrant like Kobe Bryant" Fuck outta here |
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iLL ScriptureZ
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appreciate it my dude. I'm gonna return the feed tomorrow if/when I have some down time from work
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alicewonder
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This was just impeccable. Too many highlights to point out tbh. I loved the 'rise of physics' reference, along with the entire second segment. You're always on point when it comes to the consistency of the schemes you employ, so I don't really have to emphasise on that. A very enjoyable read throughout.
Glad to see you dropping again.
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Crimson Juice
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Rhyming with the kind of wit that scientists find scientific
Climb entire winding bridges - lines of piff, mind as lifted As Mayan wizards tryna shift the signs of wicked some tiny inches Finding lines I'm spitting couldn't cut it with giant scissors Mind you I'm flyer then the highest limits, designer linen & finer women Slicker then the slimy liquid on lion fishes scaling the rise of physics (the tempo here is ripe,and the companion words were twisted well too,slicker/ slime,fish/scales,the plays in this segment were also quirky and in tune with this part here,i'm liking this content and vocab ..) Diamond grit I'm grinding with is covered black like minors pigment Violent vicious silent misfit mimicking ancient tribes and stigmas Pilot homicidal missions transcribed in different dyes I script wit I'm the vision described to nitwits as the sickness with a dying wishlist Stride into the cypher with it, moonshine twisting with a side of cider sipping Something wild like Ryu kicking diner dishes... ...don't even gotta get up to shit on'em like a tired infant.. (lol.....i thought the humour here tied in well with the wordplay,and the little tongue twisting concept was nice too here,the inner rhymes were done really well also,they did their job nicely via set up i thought,and still going strong with the wording also, I'm feeling this drop..) Colder than an ice front or frozen pie crust, a tyrant like Kobe Bryant Driving with an open Bynum, holes in your Golden line up A global pirate fuck social, holding hostage the solar climate Looking over these lower privates & smolder islands Like molten lava against Trojan riots holding tridents This is the physical sign of an autographed Mein Kampf (I do like a good presented self hype piece,and this is that,again your house is in order via plays and abstract contents,this also has a subtle vibe running along side too,which just enhances this further in my opinion,again props there for creativity,this is truly a heavy stamp/mark being made here..) The releasing of white doves... the dying of my love Seeing me postal is equally poisonous as eating a toadstool Demeaning me won't do the harm I frequently vocal Peace keep? I re-lease a 3 piece then a clean sweep for disposal Leave it PC for the for TV my mean streak's a repeat of Chernobyl I'm revealing a photo of me depleting the ozone still seeking a low-blow From a Rican with no clothes pleasing & eating my creamy risotto This is a sequel to the evil, an upheaval my dolo This was just refill of lethal to you weasels plus the people I don't know (again nicely done with the wording/tempo/contents,well just about everything really, this has been quite a display on the whole,the aggression read as totally controlled and vibrant,plus the fluidity has been solid,a highlight in itself to be honest,(and man there is some highlights here),one of the best self hype pieces i've read in a long while,and boy it was enjoyable to read,ripe work here,really,RIPE..peace..) |
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"You need to learn how to make an exit,
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iLL ScriptureZ
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Thanks Crim & Alice!
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Exoduzt
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ill scriptz my homie! long time no hear from! really glad to see your back.
"Rhyming with the kind of wit that scientists find scientific Climb entire winding bridges - lines of piff, mind as lifted As Mayan wizards tryna shift the signs of wicked some tiny inches Finding lines I'm spitting couldn't cut it with giant scissors Mind you I'm flyer then the highest limits, designer linen & finer women Slicker then the slimy liquid on lion fishes scaling the rise of physics Diamond grit I'm grinding with is covered black like minors pigment Violent vicious silent misfit mimicking ancient tribes and stigmas Pilot homicidal missions transcribed in different dyes I script wit I'm the vision described to nitwits as the sickness with a dying wishlist Stride into the cypher with it, moonshine twisting with a side of cider sipping Something wild like Ryu kicking diner dishes... ...don't even gotta get up to shit on'em like a tired infant.."----oh my fucking god...What rust are you talking about. This was a flawless piece of work rite here. Absolutely amazing. The word play mixed with the impeccable flow is something to be admired. This is some of the best writing I have seen on this site in quite some time. damn dude. Colder than an ice front or frozen pie crust, a tyrant like Kobe Bryant Driving with an open Bynum, holes in your Golden line up A global pirate fuck social, holding hostage the solar climate Looking over these lower privates & smolder islands Like molten lava against Trojan riots holding tridents This is the physical sign of an autographed Mein Kampf The releasing of white doves... the dying of my love Seeing me postal is equally poisonous as eating a toadstool Demeaning me won't do the harm I frequently vocal Peace keep? I re-lease a 3 piece then a clean sweep for disposal Leave it PC for the for TV my mean streak's a repeat of Chernobyl I'm revealing a photo of me depleting the ozone still seeking a low-blow From a Rican with no clothes pleasing & eating my creamy risotto This is a sequel to the evil, an upheaval my dolo This was just refill of lethal to you weasels plus the people I don't know"---SMH I know I just quoted your whole verse but damn...Me being a Laker fan that Kobe Bynum shit was dope. This entire drop was insane. amazing work my man. Glad to have you back |
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iLL ScriptureZ
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Appreciate that EXO!
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JackBarz
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Shakin off the rust?? Nigga tell You kiddin me lol...rhyme schemes off the chart oh man You killed from start to finish,I tell you bro this ish dope,the 1st bar set the tone if you were shaking the rust here I wonder when You go deep how was this gon pan out good read man peace!
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iLL ScriptureZ
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Thanks Jack, appreciate that
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Amgin
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This was a good read.
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iLL ScriptureZ
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Your feedback is as bad as your writtens
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