Open Mic: Sion. The Master. The Priory.

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    Posted: 20 October 2005 at 3:09pm

Sion .. The Province

We Have No Hope

We Have No Dreams

The Master

Sion, your sent from heaven by the deaths of sempteber 11
so many thoughts of the dead but dont remeber the present
your duty's apparent, scout the living, be recruiting the talent
re birth the priory for me, we're forever producing the gallant
you will scour the earth, find the man who plays to the crowd
this man sion will represent everything that is brave and is proud
i do not doubt you son, but this is a task only fit for a man
to this you will stand, your fiight for this, this mission is planned

Sion

Master i accept my duties, and i will show no mercy to achieve
but this priory, im concerned i am the only person who believes
master, for the knowledge is not known amoungst the mankind
and if i shall not suceed sir, what should i do once the plan dies?
these worries i have, they bring doubt that i feel will overshadow me
but i will prove my worth for the confidence i know u have in me
i will search high and wide, and over all four corners of the earth
i will give my life for the priory, and for the reforming of it's birth

The Master

your doubt amazes me, for there was a purpose you're choosen
you have the key to unlock the minds that are deserted and frozen
Sion, the man you sought after, he has the heart of all hearts
you will first see him weak and unable, and maybe laugh at the start
but his reign will be supreme, for he will be the soul and the fire
he will appear before you know it, and he will show his desire
Sion he will fight for the priory, his love and history behind us
powerful beyond dreams, while we search i also wish he would find us

Sion

Master i think i know this man your searching for, maybe im wrong
but this man, master, have you known his name all along?
is this a test of faith, to show that this man is capable of this
and would uphold the name of the priory, even while facing his fears?
this man master, he now knows what he must do to be graced
he must have the courage and belief to stand and look you in the face
and say the following, master, "The Priory Defines The Purities"
i believe the man you have helped me find for you, is me







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Damn this was Sick man one the best pieces i seen from u.

Flow was tight, The multis were crazy Real deep and creative

Nice peice man

8.5/10

Sion, your sent from heaven by the deaths of sempteber 11
so many thoughts of the dead but dont remeber the present
your duty's apparent, scout the living, be recruiting the talent
re birth the priory for me, we're forever producing the gallant

VERY sick Intro man.

re-pay the favour on my piece lol

 

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that's some other level shit. I've wanted to write some shit like this, like god's choosing of Jehu to kill the king and take his place. well done, would be nice if it was longer tho. like explained more, but 
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oh.. so YOUR sion.. u bastard...
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nice spit man. u shoulda made it alil longer tho. feelin it.
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Thanx For The Feed!!! ..and yo G Mike ... i thought u new!! .. im sure Echo Told you about ABYSS!!!






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well i know about some of it.. but i think its bullshit.. :P

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Dope idea...liked the way you did this, I agree with Jehu that the storyline could well have been extended cause the whole idea behind "finding yourself" is a dope one...but a little piece of advice, jus because you have an idea doesnt mean it has to be directly stated, uno wah i mean, you kinda wrote like "this is the end, i will work to the end", a phrase that i wud use the verse was a 'means to an end', maybe if i was bein harsher I'd label it "filler", I liked the verse, the flow was there but it kind of seemed like it was there for no real purpose but to take you to the end...sometimes the journey itself is more important than the end and you probably cudda make this better by movin about and bein more clever with it...coz the conversation format made it kind of flat to me as well...Also something that I've noticed about your flow, its good, its almost always there (a few little bumps now and again but everyone has those) but its kind of laid back ALL the time, which kind of makes it so things dont get emphasised...like in our battle (ino u rushed it, im jus usin it as an example) its like you had the ideas about the punches but you didnt really have the feel of an ATTACK if you know wah i mean...i jus quoted a line in the new guys spit that I said wasnt awesome but the way he worded it made it stand out, i think you lack a bit of that, like you have nice ideas and you have a smooth bubble around it but you lack a bit of cuttin edge (not in terms of structure, which is where MOST people lack that edge) yours is like in your mood or tone, i think maybe you think about writin as "puttin ideas on paper" where I'd say to you try and think about it being a script for you to act out, ok the lines are there now get more FEEL into them, yanahwahimsayin?

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