Open Mic: Skep - Untitled 3

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    Posted: 18 June 2020 at 3:15am
One day I'm a fold'em up and I cash out
I can never catch a break I'm on a fast route
I drink away my days standing under black clouds
I say I'm done and I turn around and blackout
Mama forgive me 'cause liquors killing my kidneys
I know the devil with me, but I just can't seem to slip'em 
I'm praying to the lord and I'm just wishin' he listen
Keep these mother fucking people out my business
I sit here staring through this empty bottle, praying to another glass
'Cuz on this road, we lost some people who ain't coming back
Whiskey got me spinning around in circles like we running track 
While we chip away at the surface, hoping that something cracks
I just try to hold it down (It's funny I ain't slipped yet)
And most of you don't come around (Unless you see a quick cheque)
My baby mama screaming, my son just wants to see me
She thankful she keeps him from me, somehow that makes us even 
No seem to believe me, that's why I'm drinking these demons
100 proof ain't the reason, it's a wonder I'm still breathing
Lord, keep me in your reach, even tho I know I'm a heathen
'Cuz the devil trying to keep me through this whiskey that I'm drinking



Edited by Skep - 18 June 2020 at 3:38am
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I feel like this would have a way greater impact if done on a beat. It’s a bit simplistic as it is now, especially in a technical sense. Some lines were nice though, like “ drinking these demons” part.
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