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    Posted: 25 June 2020 at 3:15am
See, I've been walking down this long road
The same turnpike where my life lost hope
Blowing smoke just so I come across ghosts
I lost my faith, the same day that my cross broke 
Pops knows, 'cuz his couch bares my burden 
Broken and cold, I know my cares are burning 
Back tracking through the past, wheres the purpose
When I'm looking for the point like squares inverted 
So go ahead and judge me like whore fuck me
Take a perfect picture, I'll wither if I'm lucky
Just another dummy with his weapons stocked
Searching for help now like I was begging lots
This what heaven wants for my subtle heart 
To be split down the middle where couples part
As I stroke my pen to begin my troubled art
Missing pieces in the creases where puzzles start



Edited by Skep - 25 June 2020 at 3:32am
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote spume corrupt Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 27 June 2020 at 3:31am
Next level drop man, sunfin like the best short written I seen you do
Read this a good few times and every time I did the clinical precision hit me more
Solid with the concept/vibe
Solid with the end rhymes and the transitions were perfect and tied this little gem together and helped make it such a smooth read
LA has so much talent

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First four lines just shout
“Keep reading”
That’s the way forward

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Digging the scheme on this, flowed a beast.

Tbf my favourite line was the closer..

As I stroke my pen to begin my troubled art
Missing pieces in the creases where puzzles start.

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Yeah good work here,i was feeling it, and i agree with Mitch that bar he
hashed out was solid and poignant, the flow through out was nice in
fact i have little time no gripes with this verse...enjoyable read..peace.
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before you can dare make an entrance".
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