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    Posted: 06 September 2014 at 2:11pm
So look..

I read
scientific Zionistic hieroglyphs in Thai linguistics.
Mine are spit on vinyl disks and finely fit to mind logistics.
Might permit a rhyming clinic dominant like molotovs.
Learned to write the finest lyrics compliments to Robert Frost..

No, but really..

I’ve never tried to sever ties with letters but the pleasure died,
and pressure forges treasures but this pressure more than weathered mine.
I wished to board a charter toward the blessed but the devil told
to wish to board a charter ‘for this wreckage mends a rebels soul.
It’s merely time you hear me rhyme severely fly through cpu’s
I’d nearly dried my teary eyes but dreary lies the evening dew.
This eerie smile I’m breathing through would lay you down with what it spits.
It’s clear that while you’re creeping through I’m laying down a ton of bricks,
And weighing out these subtle tricks which once I used to ease the pain,
I need the same..
I struggle through the lust to prove I’d seized the day.
Don’t hold me to the marriage that I cheated on, it bloody bites
It’s lonely on this terrace that I sleep upon on lovely nights.

But..
Im mean as fuck still..

I’m that
egotistic evil cynic Leo from the keno district
Reprimanding weasels from the steeple that my people lifted..
Understand I’m lethal when I’m dropping hot upon your screen
I’m up an’ branding eagles like I’m popping off across the sea.
I swim amongst these fishes but I’m deeper than the rest of em..
I live amongst these bitches and I’m eager just to mess with em.
I’m ether at a metric ton and doing some to keep me straight.
The reaper was a medic once but used a bunch to mediate.



Edited by Smoothtung - 06 September 2014 at 3:09pm
Imagery so vividly intrinsic you might miss it..
Though you never even had the chance to witness it
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Jesus your flow and multis hit hard. This was dope as shit. The opener was sick. The closing g was sick. Top shit right here
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yeah the opener was good and it flowed well and the multies and rhymes were were also strong Smile
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Damn smooth

This was hot the flow was eisenbergs son the multis were awesome and welcome back bro
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Wow the flow and multies in this were off the charts. The opening bar in your last stanza about knocked me on my ass, great job
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Nicely constructed and hard hitting bars aight there,but the multies were predictable and dope...keep up with the good job
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Nicely constructed and hard hitting bars aight there,but the multies were predictable and dope...
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God damn this was retarded....sick ass flow and multis smooth.
 
That 2nd verse was killer, the schemes and wording were spot on. Front top to bottom it felt fresh and kept rolling bar after bar after bar.
 
Loved this part:
egotistic evil cynic Leo from the keno district
Reprimanding weasels from the steeple that my people lifted..
Understand I’m lethal when I’m dropping hot upon your screen
I’m up an’ branding eagles like I’m popping off across the sea.
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Whoa! The kid is on deck here! This shit was fire smooth. You sly bastard. Welcome back


I struggle through the lust to prove I’d seized the day.
Don’t hold me to the marriage that I cheated on, it bloody bites
It’s lonely on this terrace that I sleep upon on lovely nights.
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My lyricism leaves heads spinning like a hamster wheel
I'll shred the skin off of your dick like a banana peel - Noumenon

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You've got mad talent smooth, you're definitely on par with freeda, exo, chain etc. when it comes to multies. I much prefer when you write longer lines like this than the shorter line structure you were using recently. I hope all is well in your personal life and that you can keep writing stuff like this to get you through it
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Wivked multies
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote KrueL Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 08 September 2014 at 5:29pm
Dude, I'll be honest, I didn't understand half of these lines, seems forced, but since I don't Understand half there of' I'd rather just comment on the stuff I fathom. It's a unique way of writing, the multies were dope, but ay, somehow you've brought more content to the game with this verse.
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I hate you Smooth! Lol....that shit was nasssstty! Keep'em commin bruh

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Wow man. Bar for bar some of the best quality I've read from you, was really feeling this. Extremely consistent with some dope ass lines. That last stanza was epic. Big props, got me fiendin to write. 
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And dat closing bar. Damn
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