Open Mic: Stepping Stones

my man this was a fucking great read from start to finsih

Sup Concrete, first let me just type this was a joy to read, i really really mean that, (honest
talk), this piece manages to capture a character in self preservation mode via a series of
greed and power, in the first segment i found myself wanting him to obtain wealth to gain
a foothold of some sorts to change his standing, he seems to be at a crossroad in life, so i
didn't view his needs as greed (if you need it and can use it, then it's not greed), in the 2nd
segment we read his standing has now elevated he's now gaining and dream of material
objects, which is a normal trait in humans, i mean we all want better, but we lose sight of
what is really better for us via shinny objects and indulgence,in the 3rd segment the power
and wealth are starting to take this weak individual over, forgetting real quick his own humble
start on the ladder of life, and losing touch of his emotions, greed has consumed him, and
compassion has left the building, He's divorced humble logic and now he's learning nothing
in the emotional process,in the 4th segment his rise is now his downfall,this is where i wanted
to read of some sort of demise, hoping there was going to be a reckoning where he needed a
parachute for the plummet, but instead he grows, really this was a solid piece in detail and
writing, i was glued to the story line from the outset, and you made sit there and finish like a
child at a table during meal time, really impressive from imagery to wording.....Ripe Work Con
Ripe work indeed.peace.

A good read indeed
Somewhat predictable in the direction, but still you hit the topic with a relatable scenario that both enhanced the image you used and created its own imagery.
Starting from the bottom as most hustlers do, trying to get a head , this period shows the need to change the scenery. Can’t hustle forever, next move has got to be more aggressive. Right now you dealin with struggles, making minor moves, you have to step over the next to get to the next level, I like how he is feeling regret at this moment, but realizes regret don’t earn shit. Nicely done.

Next he made it across track , now he has to ideas pave the way for his family’s future so that they don’t have to start with step one, doing what’s nessasary may not always be right, but it don’t matter who he has to step over. Going backwards is not an option. Nice

Going up the Corporate ladder people have become faceless, just numbers , and numbers don’t have feelings or voices, they serve one purpose. The imagery in this section is vivid , this characters mindset is completely changing from the beginning I really enjoy the development.

The wording in your closer is phenomenal, you bring everything back to the basics and stays on point.


Furniture made from oakwood, I don't miss the old hood— satisfied that hunger with a taste of success, fk going back

Climbing the corporate ladder - constantly up to no good— nice

simply being that shrewd dude to rudely undermine fools— anyone who has been on corporate side knows this asshole

through all walks of life they were dirt under my shoes—again nice

All in all enjoyed I enjoyed this.