Open Mic: Still Down

pro's.

Well its obvious that you have a cool text flow popping on this drop, the short
lines were working real well here, they even injected some zest into this piece,
as well as being pleasing on the eye too, you had some similes that helped this
to tick along and aid its pace and keep it appealing.

con's

For me this verse lacked depth, it was very direct and thug/gangster-ish for my
taste, also because it didn't contain any descriptive content it was flat to read,
and at times scatty, with that typed, let me state now that if g-raps is your thing
then carry on doing your thing, but a word of caution, it'll get stale real quick, try
doing a topical or a concept to add real flavour to your writing, plus if you do or
are thinking of doing audio's, a better writer/spitter has to have lyrics, homing
your skill will achieve that,overall,expand in depth with the pen by diversifying
in subject matter.. peace.

Edited by Crimson Juice - 12 March 2020 at 2:44am