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The Rap Daemon
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Posted: 22 April 2017 at 1:24am |
Man this world will never change until it goes silent Say we wanna be safe, no war but we boast righteous About power and grow Riots so tireless against those tyrants Who do the same, oppose by starting a whole crisis In hopes it'll show the other some dope brightness To put a halt on the whole fighting thing, but no, fighting Fire with fire's just adding fuel to the hate that's grown spineless I mean is still tight but knows no bounds to promote sights in To bring a war, a peace effort bringing the most violence? Makes no sense, but it goes like this Win or lose you'll both lose with soldier's going home crying And the door's open to someone else promising a way out to go blighting It's sad, that even trying to say to y'all forget ya problems And work out a fair treaty for both parties is best to stop this Solace turning to solid solemn and going off to avenge the fallen 'Coz that's just throwing more dirt on 'em, leaving them to rest in sodom Having yourself sent to bottoms so low to what, defend with offence? Is garbage 'coz you'll either be pushed back or become the pest collosus That you were fighting against, looking for a reason... Nah, the best thing to look for is a reason to reason And seize that peace 'coz peace goes both ways, a piece goes both ways In making fair shares, see? Only way to rise above the known hate Is to learn to love, or least forgive or go away to locate A better place, than stay and get nowhere and to be shown graves. Trust. Violence in defence is put in place to only be used as a last resort. Evaluate the options, 'coz the way out isn't always straight ahead. That's just sometimes a bleak, gloomy and dark dead end which is impossible to come back from, and it's just making you the enemy and giving the real foe all the more reason to carry on with whatever they were doing that caused it. See? Walking away or shutting something down by not feeding it isn't giving up, it's showing the enemy that they can't get to you like that, making them weak and valueless, and that will make THEM give up. Trust that. |
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this was alright. I was confused on why you put a capital r on riots and why youd ever write the term dope brightness. but as a psuedo think-piece it wasnt that bad. I felt like win or lose we both lose. but the avenge the fallen line was ace dude.
anyway. your intro inspired me to grab a slapper. so thanks for that. |
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The Rap Daemon
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Lmao thanks.. Enjoy the slapper. The capital R on riots was literally my phone being a dick, and yeah I pretty much wrote this one on the fly from random thoughts that had popped in my mind based on the subject matter.
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This whole piece is creative and quite interesting, even though I grabbed some errors there and there.. Your out-tro is quite an inspiration, I can really comprehend. Keep it up
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