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Stuckinthepost VS Capture
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    Posted: 07 July 2010 at 2:39am
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Goin at the kush like an opposin jets defense
hit too fuckn hard, stay more stoned than 3 day old cement
this is da shyt and da lifestyle i wanna lead
wanna blo the master and the og until me and the whole team cant breath
cant see, through the beard and the way i fucked ova everyone
im mentally inclined to not give a fuck, jus tryna burn like the sun
i dont care how it affects us all, i jus wanna toke til i go numb
smoke weed til i run, from my problems and my sons
im nt father nor a player, a runnin back is nt a savior
dnt look at me tu blame cus i didnt wanna be the opposite to jason taylor
i get up one day, maybe it was the thought of my family or the broke
the state of my pour, the state of my well-being was to hard to choke
cus i had been chokin for months, tokin months
repeatedly and non-stop blunts
fuckn mad pussies and cunts, but now i wanna switch my life around again
forgive me my family, friends and gon place a hold on my sins
fishing wit fins for forgiveness and contracts
not blaming no one for my mistakes n the shyt that i lacked
but if i miss a block or give up one sack
ill blame myself, the one who got outta shape for green crack
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Post Options Post Options   Quote stuckinthepost Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 07 July 2010 at 11:42am
Holla. Heres the verse, it's a bit shabby seeing as I only found out what the whole topicwas about 35 minutes ago.
American Football? Naw.
Anyway, I drop.
 

Don't Demonize me- Don't blame me, don't hate me, don't demonize me.
I ain't soilin' the sport, this is social anxiety.
I'll go quietly your honour, I ain't making a stand
Getting high before games weren't ever part of my plan
Put yourself in my shoes, Put your lips on my spliff
And realise it ain't a game hating player that chu fucking with
It's summat far different, can't you see my frustration?
I'm a man, not a dolphin, this ain't echolocation
Yeah I got game, but I got heart, And I bleed when I hurt
I'm a man with a problem, not a disgrace to the shirt
I was a weapon for hire, I was misused, I was made mad.
I was brimming with fire from being abused by my Dad
That shit sent me crazy, sometimes I took the easy route
I was smoking the weed when all that I need is time to chill and therapeut.
I was raised to be true, you insult me? I hit ya
I was tryna get good at a sport, not fucking hang with Mike Ditka
They say I'll be here forever, say they'll remember my name
But I'd rather be looked up to than rot in the hall of fame.
I ain't lying, ain't fucking, and I know I hurt now.
But I'll keep running, I'll keep trucking and I'll keep getting first downs.
Kickin' knowledge in the face since 1994'
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Post Options Post Options   Quote J504 Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 07 July 2010 at 6:55pm
Before I vote, I'm from New Orleans and I HATE Ricky Williams. I could probably write 2 pages of hatred on this guy with my eyes closed. Also, I'm glad this didn't really turn into a Yank Football VS Brit Football because I always find it funny that Brits look at U.S. football as being gay when Brit SOCCER players are running around in fruity outfits falling out from getting hit.
 
But again, Ricky Williams has hurt our sport so much we deserve it.
 
Ok, so with that outta the way...
 
Capture- This was your topical concept, so we should expect you to be on point with what you had to say. It was kinda all over the place to me, not sure if we were supposed to feel sorry for the guy or hate him, not sure if you were saying that the weed smoking was good or bad. It just didn't flow when I read it.
 
Stuck- For a guy who doesn't follow American football, you did a much better job of telling a story and making it flow. If I didn't already totally hate Ricky Williams, you probably coulda made me feel sorry for him some a bit with what you wrote. Stuck, definitely not your best work here, but it was still good.
 
 
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Post Options Post Options   Quote stuckinthepost Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 07 July 2010 at 6:57pm
Thanks a lot geez. I can't really form an opinion on him, but general opinion seems to be hatred towards, and I like being an awkward bastard.
Cheers for voting!
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Post Options Post Options   Quote Capture Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 07 July 2010 at 11:54pm
lol..yea i admit my verse was kinda off, i was jus tryna get in da battle feild a lil...betta nxt time shyt..vote up
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Post Options Post Options   Quote Senor Perfecto Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 14 July 2010 at 10:04pm
Capture... I do not know of this Ricky Williams nor what happened to him... but you told the story of a defiant and selfish sportsman who was caught out and is now trying to do penitence... whether genuine or not...  Flow and rhymes were good... until the second half when the character became repentant...

Stuckinthepost... you did well to research for a topic you knew nothing about...  The verse read like a defence statement without telling much of a story...

Vote: Capture...

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Post Options Post Options   Quote Manc Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 31 July 2010 at 7:13am
Decent verse by both and a strange topic, but you seemed to pull it off nicely on both parts.

Stuck - I was surprised at your verse seeing as you don't/didn't have a clue who he was, and thought you did a fair job.

Capture - Decent try at this but I feel as this was your chosen topic, you should of came more prepared than you seemed.

MVGT Stuck

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Post Options Post Options   Quote Tommy Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 01 August 2010 at 6:33pm
This ones a pretty easy one for me, aside the fact stuck knows little of american football
as most brits do..as the game stops n starts more times than broadband on a highjacked networkWink

he killed it...very descriptive...and like j504 said

"If I didn't already totally hate Ricky Williams, you probably coulda made me feel sorry for him some a bit with what you wrote"

I dont know the guy...n yea its what i was think in toward him...
really verse man....impressive shot at somethin you know little about!!!
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Post Options Post Options   Quote BIG GAME Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 08 August 2010 at 8:35am
I liked Stucks verse.
it was just a more enjoyable read.
straight up.
 
Capture had a decent verse but it got sleepy at times.
 
Maybe it was Stucks flow or his concepts, I can't really hit the nail on the head but overall I simply enjoyed Stucks verse more.
 
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Post Options Post Options   Quote The Composition Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 17 August 2010 at 7:52pm

Capture - Good Verse, It Kept Me Reading, The Story Went Along Great With The Flow and Depth It Came Across On Both Sides On The "Charatcer" Both "Guilty Conc. and Innocent"  But Very Good Topical verse

Stuck - Good Verse As Well You Had A Real Good Flow and Simplistic Method To Your Verse Which Worked Out Well, The Only Thing Is The Story Stayed On One Path, Which Is Okay But It Loses Intrest.
 
Again Good Verses From Both But I Gotta Go With Capture On This.
 
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