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Blood Eclipse 
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 Topic: [Text] Blood Eclipse VS Goryo [0-3]Posted: 09 May 2017 at 12:20pm |
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All the site battle rules apply I shall drop my verse soon |
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Goryo.
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Posted: 09 May 2017 at 2:23pm |
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Blood Eclipse
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Posted: 09 May 2017 at 3:09pm |
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Ayo, Check the mode of this battle./
I'm about rip and tear throat a like I'm Rambo,/ I'll Dismantle the handles of Goryo, so stand still./ I'll catch those Hands like a Martial Artist,/ Remove the pardons you're a Partial Fraudulent Mark / Its Time to catch the Marked hit, no guarding this target./ I'm bombarding, causing the Pestilence To Forewarn him,/ I'll Famine his food Just Fore scornin',/ I'm Berserk Like I'm Guts, For War Sin,/ All just to bring up the Death like the Four Horsemen./ Get caught in the trance, you know the Morbid Eclipse Perks./ I'm Forming Some Hertz, Storming On, Bursts,/ Set on Circuits circulating Hurt upon thirds,/ I'm set to breaking your Dome like an Orange Clockworks. Destroying the life of you./ Strike you faster than Lightning,smooth fighting,/ You're Doomed within the writing,/ And upon the mic I'll throw Punchlines with the groove of a Titan, BOOM./ Zoom through Battlefields, you ain't Half as real,/ A thrown fist will break bones, twist, in a zone which in Mass Appeal,/ It's A sound to catch a mass in a Cast Forreal./ I click to hit quick with then it's an Onomatopoeia,/ I'll fuck up your City like I'm Madara Uchiha,/ Plotting all these schemes but, you seem to be Dissolving in your sheets, huh?./ Hiding, scared of the nightmare, Where the darkness' mights here,/ I'll appear when 3 Strikes then Take your knees, slice and then see, right there?/ I'll drop you on your head from the height of Street Lights, bare./ Who is it you're bluffing? I'll put this Jew in the Oven,/ Pull him out, stuff him with Candy or something,/ Then Bring him to Family traditions. Envision this Marshmallow Expanding and Puffing!/ Goryo, will never be a full Pro, let go./ Your win would be Bias. Go suck on a water hose while I turn on to full blast and let your head explode/ |
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Goryo.
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Posted: 09 May 2017 at 7:01pm |
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Time to give you some lessons. Now... we need to fix your wordplay, that's what my guide's for Cause you live up to the name 'Eclipse', that shit's an eye sore So cooperate and elevate, or I'll coerce you through Dude, the only way is up! They don't come any worse than you I'm trying hard to encourage you, take notes from a Gore spit Cause I rape emcees with ease... so far you just 'force it' And don't ever let me catch you asking dudes to drop first Like a pussy checking up to see if what they've got's worse Acting like your punches hit with impact like you're pumping lead Nah! Your blows don't hurt, your shit just leaves me with a thumping head You ramble like a psycho, it's long and winding It's clear your text reflects the mess that your infected mind's in See I hate to be truthful, just no one's feeling those weak shots And you'll never go beyond a 'work in progress' like Detox You're hopeless and it's evident I ain't fighting life and limb Calls himself 'Blood' but no one faints at the sight of him 16 fuckin bars, shit I know we're gonna need a hearse And if I'm being truthful... I doubt I'll even read his verse But I'll put you out your misery, kill B.E with kindness This battle's growing pains so I can help you ease the blindness Just believe me, allow the points I make to sink right through I promise it's my 'helping hand' I'm using to strike you By the logic of 'eating rappers' this ain't even snacking Cause you're so wack you can't even match me when I'm slacking Not even worth attacking, so behind in the distance Even a punchbag gives a kind of resistance! No one's even gonna vote, why come hard with a spit? Who the fuck is gonna read 16 bars of your shit? And I got two left, so... fuck it Suck it Eat shit Weak bitch
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Lord Puente
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Posted: 09 May 2017 at 7:15pm |
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This vote has been accepted by a moderator. bro.... this was very one sided. blood eclipse, the first thing I will say, is that on this site we like to see personals. your entire verse was generic in my opinion. I might even say you had the pre written before this and just inserted his name. and if you didn't, then you could've. goryo, you had some dope lines in there in the first half, then you went a bit soft for the middle-endish part, but as you said, you can slack and still be winnin. the punchbag/resistance line was cool. I do gotta say I loved how you finished it. you sacrificed those bars but with a clear ass message, lol. mvgt Goryo. as I said this was very one sided. well done goryo, made it quick and painless. blood eclipse, id recommend focusing on mechanics and just working on open mics to help get the mechanics down. once you have that then step back in to the battlefield. otherwise I forsee many battles being onsided in your near future. also, keep your eye out for rutter knows best's 1-2 Punch League, its great to learn how to battle.
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spume corrupt
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Posted: 09 May 2017 at 7:49pm |
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This vote has been accepted by a moderator. Well I suppose everybody gotta start somewhere Blood You got fighting spirit no doubt and there is much potential in what you do But it's not good enough to compete with the regular battleheads yet... So LP pretty much summed this work up bro you had no punches no relevant wordplay no direct line of attack fitted to Goryo​ Goryo So funny stuff in here like not even reading his verse and the no one fainting number I think you came out to help this guy by fitting him into a pair of clown shoes I'm sure he'll learn from this... Vote GORYO |
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Okie
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Posted: 01 June 2017 at 9:30pm |
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This vote has been accepted by a moderator. Notables... Blood... Get caught in the trance, you know the Morbid Eclipse Perks./ I'm Forming Some Hertz, Storming On, Bursts,/ Set on Circuits circulating Hurt upon thirds,/ ^^ok.. This summed up ok. Hiding, scared of the nightmare, Where the darkness' mights here,/ I'll appear when 3 Strikes then Take your knees, slice and then see, right there?/ ^^Better wording and relation (for others to get the jist of the concept could work) Who is it you're bluffing? I'll put this Jew in the Oven,/ Pull him out, stuff him with Candy or something,/ ^^ha.. Weak, but a lil funny (jerk move haha) ---------------------------- Goryo... Cause you live up to the name 'Eclipse', that shit's an eye sore ^^Kool direction, but no umph.. ok And don't ever let me catch you asking dudes to drop first Like a pussy checking up to see if what they've got's worse ^^KooL.... See I hate to be truthful, just no one's feeling those weak shots And you'll never go beyond a 'work in progress' like Detox ^^KooL... Just believe me, allow the points I make to sink right through I promise it's my 'helping hand' I'm using to strike you ^^Haa at 2nd half (if you read it a certain way) "Dear my child" but ..Ok Who the fuck is gonna read 16 bars of your shit? ^^Word taewokfmkrafafasdfksd ----------------------------------------------------- In the end it wasn't a hard call for me-- Goryo took the needed areas with more potency, more bars at opponent-- takin a pep talk route which in volume weighed in. (More seasoned verse period). Vote - Goryo But wooorrrrrddd I ainT wanna see a bout this long like this from yaLl anytime soon. keep the potency up instead. |
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nomedic
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Posted: 04 June 2017 at 6:34pm |
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This vote has been accepted by a moderator. Blood Yo I like the rhymes and straight up raw approach but in my opinion your verse wasn't actually tailor made for your opponent it looked as if it was a key style even mentioning his name was just a shout out my opinion you didn't do enough to work your opponent and the structure of your verse was kind of awkward really you have the basics now take it a step higher hurt with it Gore Your structure was alot cleaner and solid and the punches were nicebthe detox bar i played but you made it more fresh here i could with all my confidence say you took this from alot more but is it even necessary nah Mvgt Gor for an over all better verse |
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The_Guy
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Posted: 12 June 2017 at 7:32pm |
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This vote has been accepted by a moderator. Easily going with Gor on this one Better verse, structure, punches, although your verse wasn't the greatest. The length was overwhelming long, wouldn't advise another battle like this |
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Posted: 28 June 2017 at 3:35am |
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Goryo wins via 3-0 KO
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