Text Battle Archive: [TEXT] Blood Eclipse Vs. The Rap Daemon [0-3] |
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The Rap Daemon
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Posted: 12 May 2017 at 4:37am |
16 Bars (let's make 'em dope lmao)
3 Days House Rules |
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Blood Eclipse
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Blood Eclipse
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Since my name was mentioned, I'll leave his head split with swift intentions/ You ain't got grit when you spit, your throat is slit, now quit contesting, Even if you were X-Men, you couldn't storm my writ selections/ And you'll get diced in X-Forms like I swung in unknown dimensions/ Since Rap Deamon is still talking,I know he gonna drop a sneak dissery / He gets the ghetto Swiss chalet, spiked in steam rotissery/ I smoked you in your dreams, so you need a team for getting me/ I bet your regime wouldn't beam when I'm seen upon the killing spree/ You think you can diss Blood Eclipse ? I swear you're already in the crosshair/ I'm The Viet Kong artillery that moves with guerrilla warfare/ You think it's no fair? Catching 11 Ls, you battle me trying to catch a W but you're scared/ You think you can edge me because I'm new here, Bitch I'm nastier than nose hair/ You're in a matrix, but you're basic, you'll get your face lifted by the rhythms off dome, to blast like space ships/ Leaving holes in your body like time suffered a space rift/ Now why you sucker still talking?/ seen me battle, now you sucker stalking/ I'm The hungered SHARK in your local PARK to murder you off when all is DARK And, I'll drop you while you're walking/ I will, leave you running when I'm gunning you for all your gawking/ Don't get it twisted, you are more screwed than retarded body stretches/ And I'm gonna body your henchmen, they all sit aside like "keep hot the benches"/ I'm only dropping one diss cuz that's all it takes To erase you and your birthdates / From the Terror's wall to the Cyphers in L.A, I'm standing over earthquakes, now one thing is bound and certain/ Ladies and Gentlemen, Rap Deamon is still a zygote, He thought I wasn't venomous/ I'm the foul child tearing you down like rotten curtains/ You get smoked for acting blunt, so pull tricks, i'll watch you stunt it/ Now kids scram, bank robbery, you get jammed Off your ice and shine, rob you blind, you slick fam? / You get bammed By verbal hammers I throw, blasting grammar to slam ya and your Lil fam/ Then filter you like adding black an white to your funeral pic on Instagram/ Putrid spittings, Rap Deamon can't mess with the force legion/ I will body you after you been bodied again for no reason/ If you are leaking, i'll keep bashing til you're done bleeding/ Then switch out format of attack quick as the four seasons/ You rep but got beat by kicks quicker than Liu kang/ I've been too sane in here, now I'm dropping a new flame/ Haha, Its easy to mention your Name, Rap Deamon is nothing to the Game but Shame, he will get yoked harder than Hussein/ |
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The Rap Daemon
Standard Member Joined: 05 August 2015 Location: Purgatory Status: Offline Points: 1108 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 6-14-0 Form: LWLWWL |
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You should call all your raps Poetic Gymnastics 'coz they're all so distorted
So contorted and you're beatings aren't live or shit like a fucking homeless organ And we don't like what we see, so basically your flow is morbid It's repetitive bullshit so damn boring it's like you battle with a woeful chorus I know why they call you 'Eclipse', 'coz we don't wanna see you again You're so wack even I came to battle you just to ease through a win You ain't 'sick dawg' just a 'lost puppy' who don't belong in a scene full of vets You're so 'unstable' and we ain't 'buying your shit' 'homes' - you'd only prove 'lethal as rent'! You're a zero and you ain't getting this love 'coz this ain't a tennis match, shit But, by the sound of things, you can still get this racket Take you out in the open early like Borna to Andy, I'm like a blend of Sampras Mike Tyson and Chris Brown 'coz a bitch always fall to my tremendous hands bitch I can chop like Tech, but nothing Strange 'bout the way my blades end a jest Hack you up and leave your health systems fucked worse than the NHS! (Read the UK news) Silly how you sport a spider pic' because you can't even 'web a net' So I can just site(sight) these victories like Google 'coz I'm the best, face it!! So I don't really get why you're so far, up your own arse Because, you're just like school in the summertime -- no class! I'd pay you for you to just produce some gold bars But if I did, I'd be broke paying pennies 'coz I can't profit on no parts! You must be retarded to step to my face bitch, well I guess it's today then I'll have to make such a beating a special occasion! I bet this guy is such a downie he couldn't look up pressed with a facelift! Just take it on the chin... Shove this L in your mouth and have it run down your leg with a great spit! You know what? Now I'm just wasting bars This is overkill, like giving a fossil facial scars Your involvement in rap's like a wet stick 'coz when you play ya part You may not crumble under the pressure but that's just 'coz you can't even make a spark! In fact, you rap like a country off the map, no one knows that You even exist, but yo man, you keep that Up, you will see flack I mean, you populate rap with so much wackness you should be flagged!. |
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Crimson Juice
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This vote has been accepted by a moderator. This was a nice tussle here really,a little heavy due to it being 16 bars but still good,(except the voting for this to be slow via the lengths of these pieces,and with IC2 taking centre stage also).. Blood your opening bars had a good concept with the superhero's entow,but it was in the realm of generic for me,we could argue that dimension/Demons is linked,and if so it still remains a forced or created personal,however you did pick up there after, although still skating in parts on the generic rink,the personals became more and more relevant,and you had some good punches within also,although nothing heavy hitting as such,but they landed,your similes were working here which helped your punches overall,(and do like me some similes & wordplay),but here at LA the focus is personals/punches/humour/similes wordplay and metaphors,(not in any order),you seemed to go over the limit of 16 bars also,which on the norm should equate to 32 lines,by a few,(bars that is),still no biggie really as RD did also..lol.all in all a good verse on the whole,good work. R Daemon your verse was good on the whole you to had some really nice similes too, I also thought yours to be sharp and better thought out,your line lengths were way over though,but like Blood they didn't become samey,your punches were good and landing well too,and the personals were standing out also,i liked the directness you took here with the piece in general,seemed to give it some aggression and focus too,in parts you showed some clever thinking behind your plays/similes which added weight to the punches thrown here,again as with Blood an enjoyable read..also good work. Overall I'm going to go with RD here's why,he did have the better aimed verse out the 2 on display,he also had the better play/punches too,this was like a battle of similes really,both brought them within their pieces in abundance,props to Blood you just need to get a little more personal,you had a wealth of posts to use against RD for ammo,but seemed to have dropped the ball there,anyways well done to you both.. Vote..Rap Daemon..peace. |
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Concrete
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This vote has been accepted by a moderator. Ok, imma just get straight to the point here. Both verses desperately needed polishing before posting, it's just too wordy, messy and uneven. Especially you Blood, try to set up your verse more like this. **********************rhyme **********************rhyme *********************rhyme **********************rhyme instead of *****Rhyme ***********************************************Rhyme ********************Rhyme *************************************************************************Rhyme Once you the structure sorted out, try to simplify the content for heavens sake. Just pull up a direct comparison or basic wordplay. Check out Goryos guide for punching for further explanation. As for the verdict, this goes to Rap Deamon for having less mistakes and this bar So I don't really get why you're so far, up your own arse Because, you're just like school in the summertime -- no class! Tho played as hell it was still nicely flipped. I dont wanna be rude or whatever but I think you could have easily done better here if you put more effort in. |
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The_Guy
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This vote has been accepted by a moderator. Daemon gets my vote Better verse structurally and better concepts and bars. Started off decent and fell off towards the end but maintained enough hot through. Blood your opener could have been amazing if you shortened it and got right to the point. Your flow was good but your punches didn't directly land on your opponent. |
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Nigma
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Rap Daemon wins via 3-0 KO
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