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Fentanyl 
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Joined: 04 May 2015 Location: Philly Status: Offline Points: 95 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 3-2-1 Form: WWLNLW |
 Topic: [Text] Droidian Vs Fentanyl (3-0)Posted: 24 June 2016 at 3:01am |
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{Text} Droidian Vs Fentanyl
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Fentanyl
Groupie
Joined: 04 May 2015 Location: Philly Status: Offline Points: 95 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 3-2-1 Form: WWLNLW |
Posted: 26 June 2016 at 8:03pm |
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Trust you aint the best noob around/
we saw that when Juice murdered you like Ron Goldman an Nicole Brown/ You aint jewing me out a win I'm topping you like a yamaka/ Droid a fake bitch he reminds me of ex machina/ I'm smoking dro all day like I'm a fuckin rasta/ Ya styles ass droid (asteroid) These punchs will have you flying into space/ and droids busted (android) like droping the cell with out the case/ I'll run threw the 6 with my bros Then fuck up this fag like it was a hate crime/ he'll be sped off in a ambulance on his day off like he was working over time/ |
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Droidian
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BIG GAME KILLER! Joined: 07 May 2016 Location: Toronto Status: Offline Points: 776 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 7-2-0 Form: WWLWWW |
Posted: 27 June 2016 at 8:08am |
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Fentanyl? Really? You fucking kidding me? You bring pain relief 'cuz you can't bring a dope scheme Even dope fiends find the dose lean as your bars seem a slow read and so weak they go clean Users peel it off their skin selling 'em to junkies who'll chew or smoke these patches It's fitting 'cuz you get peeled when you bite more than you can chew and get lit in these matches Facts: you're a fake, your structure's wack, too abstract, bars asymmetric Proof: Fentanyl ain't even a real opiate.....it's synthetic So your substance is just trash and your attacks just rehash all these tired ass angles Your rhymes? Basic as fuck. Lines? Basically fucked - mismatched lengths in mass tangles I got a theory, so don't tear out your hair or whine before you mull it:
Fentanyl ain't here to bring the pain, Fentanyl's come to dull it |
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Crimson Juice
Site Moderator 
Joined: 20 December 2015 Location: U.K. Status: Offline Points: 3258 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 6-11-0 Form: LLWLW |
Posted: 27 June 2016 at 3:49pm |
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This vote has been accepted by a moderator. I like this one here.. Fantanyl that's a nice hard hitting opener,not just because I'm part of it,but the play was Ripe,it also brought a smile to my face,the personal was directed well too,(Nice use of the word Juice here),in your next bar the first half was good with the (ex machines),but the 2nd part was a forced personal really (smoking drop like a rasta),i get it but it was reaching here, still it counted,just not a hard impact after the start was decent,you did have better luck in your next offering though, asteroids/android plays were decent,the punch was present and landed,although not a swing as such,it worked,on your closing bar the set up was strange,yeah it was worded OK,just didn't to me match the punch really,(unless I'm missing something), all in all a good account of yourself here.. Droid you still suffer from that chunky rhymes syndrome eh,I liked.the concept with the opener here,subtle and delivered well,nothing to hard though,sort of a diss stroke jab really, plus it seemed placid/tame,nice though as some thought went into it,your next bar was decent again subtle,but this time the punch was good,i liked the way you played him down here, typing about how he gets burnt in battle,nice touch,your 3rd bar was still running with the drug concept/thereby this was a decentjabat he's alias here,(although I feel this might take some ppl a couple of reads to get..lol),it was worded quite well also,I liked it,the next bar about he's last lines was kind of meh,not alot in this to be fair,more of a jab,and the last bar was ok,again nothing brilliant but still had some effect to it.. Overal a.nice.battle.on the face of it,the best bar for me was Fantanyl opener,but there got to be a winner right?,and for me that was Droid,and here's why,he came with creative angle,plus he had a good concept that he kept up in different parts of he's drop,Fantanyl your were unlucky here,your verse was also nice, just Droid's was more comprehensive Overal.. Vote...Droid..peace. |
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Sky Scrapur
Standard Member 
Joined: 21 October 2014 Status: Offline Points: 1133 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Audio Rank: Unranked Stats: 0-1-0 Form: L |
Posted: 28 June 2016 at 10:13pm |
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This vote has been accepted by a moderator. Fen Trust you aint the best noob around/ we saw that when Juice murdered you like Ron Goldman an Nicole Brown/ "I see no punch here dawg, the history is a fact but ya bar just packed no punch..." You aint jewing me out a win I'm topping you like a yamaka/ Droid a fake bitch he reminds me of ex machina/ I'm smoking dro all day like I'm a fuckin rasta/ "ok i'm loving your setup and the dro play/punch but the wording is just bad, you knew what you wanted to do but couldn't execute it well. I think this could have been a strong hit with better execution or wording. otherwise i liked the idea behind the whole thing. Nice" Ya styles ass droid (asteroid) These punchs will have you flying into space/ and droids busted (android) like droping the cell with out the case/ "The setup got ruined by the nameplay, i think it would've been wise not to put a play in ur setup. Punchline is ok and it could've had more impact if the setup was good". Nice attempt I'll run threw the 6 with my bros Then fuck up this fag like it was a hate crime/ he'll be sped off in a ambulance on his day off like he was working over time/ "No punch here man, or maybe im missing some? ok verse overall not that bad". VERSUS Droid Fentanyl? Really? You fucking kidding me? You bring pain relief 'cuz you can't bring a dope scheme Even dope fiends find the dose lean as your bars seem a slow read and so weak they go clean "The setup is good, the punch just reads weak there's no sting to it. oK Opener" Users peel it off their skin selling 'em to junkies who'll chew or smoke these patches It's fitting 'cuz you get peeled when you bite more than you can chew and get lit in these matches "Lol your wordings are crazy man, a bit abstract but it's cool. ok matches play, overall ok bar" Facts: you're a fake, your structure's wack, too abstract, bars asymmetric Proof: Fentanyl ain't even a real opiate.....it's synthetic "No punch here man, or i just don't feel it" So your substance is just trash and your attacks just rehash all these tired ass angles Your rhymes? Basic as fuck. Lines? Basically fucked - mismatched lengths in mass tangles "same here just facts but no sting to it" I got a theory, so don't tear out your hair or whine before you mull it: Fentanyl ain't here to bring the pain, Fentanyl's come to dull it "Ok closure, overall ok battle verse" VERDICT Fen got ideas but still need to learn one or two things about executing em. Droid got bars that connect whether there are punches or not. I'll have to give this to Droid since his first 2bars packed punches and connected well. MVGT DROID. |
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Ridley Squat
Street Team 
Joined: 20 November 2015 Location: UK Status: Offline Points: 830 Crew: Tha Syndicate Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 9-6-0 Form: WWWWLW |
Posted: 01 July 2016 at 5:17pm |
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This vote has been accepted by a moderator. Fen: Nice opener, decent personal, nice Juice play. The first part of the next setup was a bit contrived but the 'yamaka' line was decent. The other two lines of the second bar were nicely done too but all unrelated. I like the asteroid/android plays. Just feel it'd be better reworded and shortened. The closer, I do get what you are going for here, actually a decent concept, but executed way wordily. Droid: Now this opener was just dope. The second bar didn't hit so well, cos you were trying to put too much into it which made it clunky to read ... informative though! Facts/Proof bar was an excellent concept. Executed pretty well but the flow in the punch let's it down, or was it deliberately asymmetric? Lol Now the next bar is cool, cos it references the previous concept, while bringing the sick flow and the strong personal about his structure issues. But one nit-picking point ... shame not to have syllable matching "tired" in the punch, cos that's a stressed syllable so sounds better as part of the multi ... IMO The closer was well put together, and works really well. Verdict: The first post doesn't say what the criteria of this battle were So we got 4 paragraphs of short lines versus 5 bars of 2 long lines So, fuck it. Good showing by both, but for better all round content MFVGT Droidian |
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Arthur
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Joined: 23 August 2013 Location: London Status: Offline Points: 2311 Text Rank: #5 Stats: 36-7-0 Form: WWWWLL |
Posted: 10 July 2016 at 3:42am |
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Droidian wins KO
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