Text Battle Archive: [Text] O Block vs Neek [0-3] |
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O Block
Standard Member Joined: 07 May 2013 Location: Cincinnati Ohio Status: Offline Points: 474 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 10-9-2 Form: WWWNLL |
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Posted: 24 April 2017 at 9:20pm |
Lets get it
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O Block
Standard Member Joined: 07 May 2013 Location: Cincinnati Ohio Status: Offline Points: 474 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 10-9-2 Form: WWWNLL |
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U wanted war bro? Lets watch this bum get popped like norcos, Sendin shots at ya torso, I'ma rock U-neek like the clothes in my wardrobe, I might Scoop em like a table spoon and give em fatal wounds, So stay in tune cus this homicide won't even make the news, This creep frail, Somebody give this hoe a plate and a cheap meal, Do em like meek mill, you'll think neeks real till my heat spill, have this geek killed. Back to back im spittin facts and facts, neek got nut up in his cataracts, Fucked his hoe in the caddilac then passed her back, Im done smashin that u can have it back
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Neek
Site Moderator Super Mario Slaughterer Joined: 05 October 2004 Status: Offline Points: 3862 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 3-1-0 Form: LWWW |
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what kinda cat would, make an account at a site he was banned from talkin bout he manned up?!?! sounds like you want the fuck shit to spread… same cat would spend three hours… refreshing his introductory thread…
*yawn*. I even linked the rules, thinking you could use whatever your mother gave to crew for a whopper meal and some payless shoes.. but negative. still set the topic like a french kid washes… you missin all sorts of shit. tell your momma to tell her momma R.I.P but suck my dick. |
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#Bananas
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The Law
Site Moderator God of the Minions Joined: 15 June 2013 Status: Offline Points: 5504 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 64-8-8 Form: LNWWWW |
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Obviously your spam shit is getting hid for a reason.
Votes only. If you post again, you will receive a 3 day battle ban. Also FYI House Rules #
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Crimson Juice
Site Moderator Joined: 20 December 2015 Location: U.K. Status: Offline Points: 3258 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 6-11-0 Form: LLWLW |
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This vote has been accepted by a moderator. O Block you did your thing here with the wordplay/similes that came off as fair to middle really,nothing to hard though or out the box in the thought process to make them appear with the wow factor,but they worked all the same,what struck me the most about your piece was the aggression,that & coupled these plays,they actually turned your jabs into punches,your personals also here were present too,it was via the 1st and 3rd bar and being name flips,which in themselves were good i thought, you also had a nice flow which added weight on the whole as well,out off the 4 bars you dropped 2 off them containg personals and that suggest a 50/50 case of being generic,as they were flips rather than a direct personal,still a good rounded verse.. Neek i think your approach here to this battle was real good,obviously you did your homework for this battle,your punches were decent on the whole but your personals were stinging,they were witty and thought out well here i believe,plus the fact that their relevant and current just heightened them to another level,your verse was also creative due to this course and the added link (which on the norm detracts for me) worked well in this tussle,plus you flow bolstered the whole verse well together here and contributed too,nice read.. Overall although the OB had plays and a good verse here,I feel he was outclassed via personals Neek brought with his offering,he did have the closer to the bone vibe,and the fact he put some thought behind them worked well here,unlucky OB and props,but you were beaten by the better man today.. Vote..Neek..peace. |
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Goryo.
Groupie Joined: 28 June 2016 Status: Offline Points: 431 Crew: Tha Syndicate Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 4-4-0 Form: LWLWLW |
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This vote has been accepted by a moderator. O-Block: U wanted war bro? Lets watch this bum get popped like norcos, Sendin shots at ya torso, I'ma rock U-neek like the clothes in my wardrobe, ^Basic nameplay but I liked the flow and rhymes. For a first bar it was decent. I might Scoop em like a table spoon and give em fatal wounds, So stay in tune cus this homicide won't even make the news, ^In a text battle this is filler. I think in a live battle it would be quite funny depending how it was executed but aside from the consistent rhymes this bar didn't have anything to offer. This creep frail, Somebody give this hoe a plate and a cheap meal, Do em like meek mill, you'll think neeks real till my heat spill, have this geek killed. ^Filler again. Would be good as a transitional bar in an OM diss or something. Back to back im spittin facts and facts, neek got nut up in his cataracts, Fucked his hoe in the caddilac then passed her back, Im done smashin that u can have it back ^Filler again. I could say the exact same about this as I did about your last bar. Overall: It was a good little verse but it lacked the components you need to win a battle. Nothing in it was directed as Neek as a person, it didn't attack or degrade his character on a personal level. It was just universals with his name (aside from the first bar). I think if you dropped some 16 bar OM and used them as transitional bars no one would have a problem but in a battle you need to make the most of every line. I sound like I'm being harsh but I'm not. As a whole it was good but it was just out of place in a battle I think. Neek: what kinda cat would, make an account at a site he was banned from talkin bout he manned up?!?! ^Decent. Nothing 'wow omg' punchline wise but what I liked was how it was personal and had a clowning vibe to it. sounds like you want the fuck shit to spread… same cat would spend three hours… refreshing his introductory thread… ^About the same as the first bar. The screenshot made it what it was though. *yawn*. I even linked the rules, thinking you could use whatever your mother gave to crew for a whopper meal and some payless shoes.. ^I liked the vibe of the bar but it was pretty generic. but negative. still set the topic like a french kid washes… you missin all sorts of shit. tell your momma to tell her momma R.I.P but suck my dick. ^I guess it was quite funny. It was a unique approach to a played insult. Overall: I think the 'I don't take you serious' tone you set added weight to your verse. It was personal and condescending most of the way through. This was quite an odd battle, Neek seemed to write less but say a lot. O-Block wrote a lot and said very little. Again, his verse was good but not as a battle verse, and what he had missing Neek seemed to have. You have to come personal, and attack your opponent. Rip on the way he carries himself on the forum, take shit he's said before and use it against him. Make him look like a fraud. Personals are essential. Vote - Neek.
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Nigma
Site Moderator Joined: 25 March 2013 Location: Canada Status: Offline Points: 4077 Crew: Elision |
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This vote has been accepted by a moderator. O Block U wanted war bro? Lets watch this bum get popped like norcos, Sendin shots at ya torso, I'ma rock U-neek like the clothes in my wardrobe, almost a solid bar, little more cohesion of concepts between setup/punch. wordplay was there but was kinda expected I might Scoop em like a table spoon and give em fatal wounds, So stay in tune cus this homicide won't even make the news, thought this was weak This creep frail, Somebody give this hoe a plate and a cheap meal, Do em like meek mill, you'll think neeks real till my heat spill, have this geek killed. statements, nothing effective in a battle. Back to back im spittin facts and facts, neek got nut up in his cataracts, Fucked his hoe in the caddilac then passed her back, Im done smashin that u can have it back yeah this wasn't great. your first bar was really close to the right track but the rest was wack tbh. just try and study the difference between that first bar in the rest.. thats my advice Neek what kinda cat would, make an account at a site he was banned from talkin bout he manned up?!?! sounds like you want the fuck shit to spread… same cat would spend three hours… refreshing his introductory thread… *yawn*. no stingworthy shiz here but you gain the bare minimum by using relevant material against your opponent I even linked the rules, thinking you could use whatever your mother gave to crew for a whopper meal and some payless shoes.. but negative. still set the topic like a french kid washes… you missin all sorts of shit. tell your momma to tell her momma R.I.P but suck my dick. i cant believe im gonna vote for this shit. if this took you any longer than 5 minutes to write you should retire from life and master the art of kicking yourself in the nuts. rating this battle, id give o block 1 point for his first bar, and between 0 and 0.5 for the rest of them. neek at least referenced his opponent and clowned him for relevant shit, even though he did it with apparently the least amount of effort possible +1 Neek
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Nigma
Site Moderator Joined: 25 March 2013 Location: Canada Status: Offline Points: 4077 Crew: Elision |
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Neek wins via 3-0 KO
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