Text Battle Archive: [text] The_Guy Vs. The Rap Daemon [0-3]

5 Bars
1 Week
House Rules

Delete the first one mod...i made it larger to read

Daemon nothing you write is devilish, all your verses are terrible

Read each one of your open mics, bro them shits were unbearable

Your record explains it all, everything you key is lethargic

Your shots off, aiming for perfection but stay missing the target

Him throwing fast ones?! I dodge’em and crumble his knuckles to stew

You struck out, and won’t win again, best you retire with two

You’ve been here for multiple years, and can’t formulate winning tactics

And your punches, I ‘brush em off’ like a Jay Z classic

Return of the Mac?…im more like a virus to your computer

Cause your tracks aren’t ‘moving me’ like a broken commuter

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Dr. Flavor Town:



Daemon nothing you write is devilish, all your verses are terrible

technically speaking.. isnt terrible a synonym for bad? bad being a synomym for sin.. sin being.. well you get the point.

Read each one of your open mics, bro them shits were unbearable

how do you really feel? dont be coy.

Your record explains it all, everything you key is lethargic

slow.. as in retarded?

Your shots off, aiming for perfection but stay missing the target

if his shots off.. nevermind.

Him throwing fast ones?! I dodge’em and crumble his knuckles to stew

I definitely know a guy you could ghostwrite for. 100%

You struck out, and won’t win again, best you retire with two

You’ve been here for multiple years, and can’t formulate winning tactics

And your punches, I ‘brush em off’ like a Jay Z classic

is you feeling like a pimp?

Return of the Mac?…im more like a virus to your computer

Cause your tracks aren’t ‘moving me’ like a broken commuter

a broken commuter? wtf.. ok, this one I wanna actually breakdown.. so tracks.. a play on songs or recordings.. and tracks as in a means of public transportation.. either train or trolly carts im imagining.. ok.. so.. tracks.. arent.. moving you.. like broken commuters. are you the broken commuter? that the tracks dont move? or is he a broken commuter thats depressed infront of the railway thats waiting to die and hes just so wack nobody moves him out the way..but then it gets jumbled cause you said move you..and im just feeling like I have no wtf youre on about.. at all.




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Sing Angelica:


Ok... This guy... 

You said we can have 1 week deadline if needed, but if what you meant when you said that
Was we'd need 1 weak dead line you might stand a chance 'coz you have plenty of them man

I think you knew what you meant. but nobody else does.

But really though ain't no way you can win bro, you have never been dope

this actually flows nice.

The definition of you is shit and I ain't talking 'bout your skin tone

racist or ??.. either way.. never again.

While me? When I 'open mics' I rip it hard so step and you'll be stopped
'Coz I'll have to 'Double Down' and it won't be 'Friendly Fire'... No 'Cuba drops'

line of the battle imo

You even said you're rusty so when it comes to pressing the metal you should pipe down
'Coz I bring the fight like a fresh bullet, no 'light rounds' so for you it's lights out

I like that you didnt fucking overdo the light shit. kept it subtle and it worked. good job. the rusty/pipe down/metal wasnt as lucky. maybe a "rainy day" play to go with rusty. not so much pipe down.

Leave him red and purple -- bloody and bruised -- should fix him screws
Not quoting members when I say I broke this guy down into crimson juice.

you know...worded oddly.. but atleast it made sense and wasnt entirely stretched. it was coherent. I like it.. not a haymaker, but a nice nod and im sure everyone appreciates a "Hi Crimson" line.


well fellas.. this wasnt exactly battle of the year, but it also wasnt the worst one ive seen either.

Guy - I know you took daemon light.. but theres a fine line between not trying and not showing up at all.

Daemon - I see the improvements. I like them. keep working towards them, dont feel like youve hit the mark. more of this tho. please.

overall, I think guy just tossed together words that rhymed and figured it was that much of a walk in the park that who gives a fuck. daemon started off and I felt like…god damnit. not this shit again.. but he turned it around and had a couple lines that definitely took this home.


vote = daemon

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The Guy your verse was steady enough here,your punches were decent and landing
too,although they were no heavy blows as such,you seemed to come more from a
personal angle,which to be honest worked but became dull as you seemed to carry
that one concept throughout,(his record/losses),for me your last bar was your best bar,plus with the double play (mac/computer and the broken commuter) was good,
even the multi syllables of 3 were a good inclusion also,for me it was the bar of the
battle,overall you dropped a good verse,besides the last bar the piece read a little flat
because you stayed in the same vein,but in your defence you have stated your rusty,
i can see a couple more battles and your swagger will be popping off,and kicking butt..

RD your opening bar was good really,although I had to reread it due to your wording,
which still seemed strange on the 2nd attempt,but the personal/punch was present,
although not a haymaker it worked still,and to be honest this pretty much sums up
your verse on the whole,but what you did have,and worked in your favour was
creativity,i feel you tried to come off as fresh with the slants taken throughout this
drop,you also seemed to be more directed & better aimed overall,your personals was the key for you i feel here,you did have some good display of them within,the vibe from
the off was one of wanting this,that's the impression i got from your drop..

Overall this was close in my opinion,TG had a cleaner verse with his offering,and to be
honest it was good,but RD brought some spark to this battle,he did have the better
creativity and slightly better personals because they varied,then for me TG had the
best bar,hmm not an easy call this,I'm going to go with RD here,simply because his
effort stood out more for me,and TG I know that's kind of a lame way to call a winner
here,but it is all I could use to separate you both..

Vote...Rap Daemon..(just)..peace.