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    Posted: 11 January 2017 at 6:01pm
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Stalin
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 13 January 2017 at 3:10pm
He's as naive as can be... damn right I betrayed this dummy
he signed a peace treaty with me and I still invaded his country
Then held your damn son for ransom
but you refused to pay up, who cares if if i got one nut? now you have none
I wasn't surprised though, always thought you would do this
my advisors told me some time ago, you're probably Jewish,
if one thing is for sure, it's that you rhyme pathetic, fag
this abuse is so bad I feel like your alcoholic dad
You were picked on as a kid, the stress left you with bald spots
those scars go even deeper than the ones you got from Smallpox
You Fancy yourself a cowboy? that's gay as hell.
Hey asshole, you should get a lasso and HANG yourself
Your best quote is one you stole from your ghost writer
Mein kamph is better than anything you ever wrote, biter
I don't respect you, so I talk to you like a bitch
My mustache is a must have, you tried to copy the shit

All facts...i read his shitty biography

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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 13 January 2017 at 4:37pm
Hitler started his little brigade but history states this image was fake
He'll always be remembered as the guy that ran but couldn't "finish a race"
Anne I'm just being frank... It's a clear fact your gaffe couldn't touch me
Just like your mustache, I shaved down your troops and took half ya country
So Mr. Killer, 'The Great Dictator', the war with the world must've had your head swole
Cause when it came down to the numbers, I had 4 times your death toll
Go ahead.. 'Hitler, be creative and paint that picture'... start investing in catharsis 
and brush aside those thoughts cause you even got rejected as an artist
^ got that 'best or greatest' tarnished and confined in what you are
'Landsberg Prison' was the only time this Hitler landed behind those bars
My USSR on the battlefield taking the life of believers
The whole world was happy to retire this 'jerry' unlike rice the receiver
 But it was an iron piece and swinging with one ball that sent him under
He was always 'sub-par'... first shot by himself and he never "left the bunker"
He began a fake and fraud, even stole the swastika from the Indians
Now ended off his reign as a grammar nazi, thats used as a lame ass idiom

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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 01 February 2017 at 12:55am

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this was an interesting battle....Intrikits verse i felt was just a history leason where law came with some dope punches here. was far more creative than intrikit.

Laws start was dope enough to take this
"Hitler started his little brigade but history states this image was fake
He'll always be remembered as the guy that ran but couldn't "finish a race"
Anne I'm just being frank... It's a clear fact your gaffe couldn't touch me
Just like your mustache, I shaved down your troops and took half ya country
So Mr. Killer, 'The Great Dictator', the war with the world must've had your head swole
Cause when it came down to the numbers, I had 4 times your death toll"




Intrikit had this bar i thought was nice
You were picked on as a kid, the stress left you with bald spots
those scars go even deeper than the ones you got from Smallpox

but besides that this was one sided all around
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Intrikit your verse was good on the whole,the topic did have factual content within,
which was an added bonus here,plus the vibe/tempo was present also,to be honest
it was a good verse overall,the gripe I do have is with detail,I would of liked to have read about his WW1 yrs,him getting gassed and his temporary blindness,all that
severes as a back drop to his bitter thought process and make up,even his hatred
and ideology,it's the lack of imagery that is really the drawback to this piece,brcause
with it it would of stood up and out at a reader,I feel you did your homework well but
the concept/angles were flat,this verse just didn't have any real ambience about it for
me,it seemed to rigid in approach and directness,but i'll stress now it was a good read still..


Law I liked your approach to this theme,you actually turned this into to a character
battle,which I thought was creative here,also you incorporated punches to your verse
also,which added more weight to this topical,the angles/concept was ripe overall,you
even had the bonus of including humour within,I liked how you belittled your opponents character too,you Really did show up for this topical here,and the creativity was off the hook aswell,i would highlight a few lines, but where do i start?,the whole fucking piece is a highlight in truth,from flow/wordplay/punches and slants,all were ripe n humorous,
a very enjoyable take and read here..


Overall a good showing and offering from both here,I thought Intrikit did well by using
facts with his verse,but Law brought another dimension to his piece with its approach
and humour,and for me was a clear winner here today,unlucky Intrikit,Law was just to
much for you in this tussle,but props still for a good verse..

Vote...Law..peace.
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 05 February 2017 at 9:39am

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Law:
Hitler started his little brigade but history states this image was fake
He'll always be remembered as the guy that ran but couldn't "finish a race"
Nice opener, affective punch which was also personal...
Anne I'm just being frank... It's a clear fact your gaffe couldn't touch me
Just like your mustache, I shaved down your troops and took half ya country
Dope wordplay and another solid punch
So Mr. Killer, 'The Great Dictator', the war with the world must've had your head swole
Cause when it came down to the numbers, I had 4 times your death toll
Okay personal but just a light jab here
Go ahead.. 'Hitler, be creative and paint that picture'... start investing in catharsis 
and brush aside those thoughts cause you even got rejected as an artist
Again just a slight jab
^ got that 'best or greatest' tarnished and confined in what you are
'Landsberg Prison' was the only time this Hitler landed behind those bars
Creative, nicely worded and a decent punch
My USSR on the battlefield taking the life of believers
The whole world was happy to retire this 'jerry' unlike rice the receiver
No this was a miss
 But it was an iron piece and swinging with one ball that sent him under
He was always 'sub-par'... first shot by himself and he never "left the bunker"
Nice personal and a decent punch
He began a fake and fraud, even stole the swastika from the Indians
Now ended off his reign as a grammar nazi, thats used as a lame ass idiom
Not really feeling his ender, punch missed

Overall a prety solid verse.... You had some dope punches and a lot of good personals..... Almost every bar packed a punch, so I have to say a solid verse overall, good drop....


Intrikit:
He's as naive as can be... damn right I betrayed this dummy
he signed a peace treaty with me and I still invaded his country
Not much, light jab
Then held your damn son for ransom
but you refused to pay up, who cares if if i got one nut? now you have none
Swing and a miss, this bar was just filler
I wasn't surprised though, always thought you would do this
my advisors told me some time ago, you're probably Jewish,
Again no landing
if one thing is for sure, it's that you rhyme pathetic, fag
this abuse is so bad I feel like your alcoholic dad
Nothing hard, but a light jab
You were picked on as a kid, the stress left you with bald spots
those scars go even deeper than the ones you got from Smallpox
Decent punch, best landing so far
You Fancy yourself a cowboy? that's gay as hell.
Hey asshole, you should get a lasso and HANG yourself
Mostly filler, punch missed
Your best quote is one you stole from your ghost writer
Mein kamph is better than anything you ever wrote, biter
Okay nice jab, light punch, yet this is your best bar
I don't respect you, so I talk to you like a bitch
My mustache is a must have, you tried to copy the shit
Another miss

Overall you produced a lot of facts in this verse, but you didn't produce them in the right way to land affective punches...... You had decent set ups but then you fell flat when trying to deliver the actual punch....  You done a great job with research, just should have worked harder on producing solid punchlines..... You had too many misses and not enough landings


Punches- Law
Personals- Tie
Wordplay- Law
Flow- Law
Creativity- Law
Enjoyment- Law

Vote- The Law

The reason I voted for The Law is because he produced a lot of solid punches..... He came out swinging harder and had just as many personals as Intrikit, but he used them more affectively...... Intrikit just stated a bunch of facts, without using them to produce affective punches...... So in my opinion The Law took this battle easily by simply landing more punches......
Topical Twist League= 1-0
1-2 Punch League= 0-3
Regular Text= 0-1
Alias= 0-1
Topical= 1-0
Horrorcore= 1-0

Overall= 3-5
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Intrikit - The opener is actually not bad as you put in some factual content. That is a nice way to open this. The second line fell short for me. Again i liked how you brought up his testicles as its another factual statement. The jewish statement was ehhh. not feeling it. not really a good bar here. That alcholic dad line was pretty nice. The smallpox line was pretty good. I actually am enjoying this verse for what it is. Overall Intrikit, this is one of the better verses i have read from you. Not bad.

The Law - The finish a race was a nice and subtle punch. Now that second bar was really nice. Good word play and nice factual references. That death toll line was also really nice. Much more punchier and written well. That artist line was dope, many people didnt know he was a little painter that got rejected from ART-School. He couldnt paint people well. Damn, bringin up Hitler going to jail lol. not feeling the bar with Rice the receiver. Nice line on the bunker and his suicide. Ending was nice.


Overall - MVGT THE LAW
. His verse has more punch to it and his mechanics were on point. He used more wordplay and his flow was on point. It was a good battle and i enjoyed both verses.
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 23 February 2017 at 10:00pm
Stalin owns the dead dictators car parking space in the afterlife.

Plus, Law wins by KO
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