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intrikit 
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I am Vib. Klean Joined: 11 September 2015 Status: Offline Points: 370 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 1-4-0 Form: WLLLL |
 Topic: [Text] Intrikit vs. Beans (0-3)Posted: 08 February 2016 at 5:03am |
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Due in 48 hours No flips Check. Edited by Arthur - 10 February 2016 at 9:36pm |
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intrikit
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I am Vib. Klean Joined: 11 September 2015 Status: Offline Points: 370 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 1-4-0 Form: WLLLL |
Posted: 08 February 2016 at 7:35am |
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Ok hopefully you can resond asap too
What happened to being the leader of your crew again? He took more than a step down, he fell down a flight of steps, a few of them You called out o, lol...the point is ur bound to dissapoint, kid If you keep thinking your the shit, I'll eat beans then drop you into a toilet. This is war, I have to kill beans in a way he has to feel Maybe I should drown him since his shit battles keep flooding the battlefield I'll make you fail like your gifs, you try too hard to be cool Your so addicted to text, regardless who wins the joke is on you You promoted other sites like a spam bot, u got exposed as a bitch son This loss will remind you of your ban cuz it'll be a nightmare for 6 months Expos: he called out o Not the leader Empire with tre anymore Meh the rest should be easy fuck expos. |
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Beans
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Joined: 12 October 2013 Location: MA Status: Offline Points: 6718 Crew: EMPIRE Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 95-24-5 Form: WWWWWW |
Posted: 10 February 2016 at 12:33pm |
His bar vs Rutter in the diss cypher... See... You a faggot W/That Bar^^, & bein Sick be what I stand for, kid Cypher Games really got ya hands wet..right Before putting them in a Mans Orphis Im Scary Nice, you Chocolate soft & ya face is what I plan to beat I cant Mask the fact I'll leave this KitKat more Wrapped In'a Bag than Halloween Candy sweets Reading ya bars is a Ruff Ride, Boring... while everything I post is great They put PPL to sleep so quick, DEA could consider them hard evidence in the DMX Overdosing case Im too noisy in the ranks, Slayin Noobs & Downing Vets Intrikit wont even make a Pop @ the top, Unless its my arms around his Neck This a one punch KO, the Dent-I'll leave'll dump this guy Upper cut to ya jaw so hard it'll leave teeth prints above your eyes |
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1-2 Season 1 Final Champ
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Notez
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Joined: 21 May 2014 Location: United States Status: Offline Points: 220 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 6-3-2 Form: WWNWLN |
Posted: 10 February 2016 at 9:30pm |
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This vote has been accepted by a moderator. What happened to being the leader of your crew again? He took more than a step down, he fell down a flight of steps, a few of them if he was on a steady decline in wins...this might have worked...too generic tho...flowed good tho You called out o, lol...the point is ur bound to dissapoint, kid If you keep thinking your the shit, I'll eat beans then drop you into a toilet. this was played to the grave.... This is war, I have to kill beans in a way he has to feel Maybe I should drown him since his shit battles keep flooding the battlefield worded better this would have hit much harder..decent jab tho I'll make you fail like your gifs, you try too hard to be cool Your so addicted to text, regardless who wins the joke is on you this doesnt really register as a punch to me more of a statement..... You promoted other sites like a spam bot, u got exposed as a bitch son This loss will remind you of your ban cuz it'll be a nightmare for 6 months again u attempted a personal but lacked the wording to pull it off...... vs See... You a faggot W/That Bar^^, & bein Sick be what I stand for, kid Cypher Games really got ya hands wet..right Before putting them in a Mans Orphis im assuming u meant orifice...either way it wasnt great but okay for opener Im Scary Nice, you Chocolate soft & ya face is what I plan to beat I cant Mask the fact I'll leave this KitKat more Wrapped In'a Bag than Halloween Candy sweets played..but executed nicely Reading ya bars is a Ruff Ride, Boring... while everything I post is great They put PPL to sleep so quick, DEA could consider them hard evidence in the DMX Overdosing case this bar is way too long imo....decent jab, better wording woulda made it great Im too noisy in the ranks, Slayin Noobs & Downing Vets Intrikit wont even make a Pop @ the top, Unless its my arms around his Neck this was the bars im used ta readin from u beans direct n to the point...nice one This a one punch KO, the Dent-I'll leave'll dump this guy Upper cut to ya jaw so hard it'll leave teeth prints above your eyes ha-douken!!!!...lol good closer best bar of the battle imo.... Intrikit i can tell your just getting the hang of this so ill offer some words of encouragement...u couldve taken this bout, but u lacked the creativity in your punches it takes for readers to say DAYUM...keep playin with the bars after you write n see if you could change nething about it to make it more effective/relevant....stay away from the generic disses when facing people like beans...all in all you had an okayish verse but like i said if u polished it up a lil more i think some of your bars woulda won u this Beans OMFG i think i read ya whole verse and didnt see one gun reference (i knew u could do it)...although i dont think u took this battle too seriously cuz some of ya bars flows were choppy and too damn lengthy...but u did have some good punches in there MVGT Beans.....better punches more polished verse
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The Rap Daemon
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Joined: 05 August 2015 Location: Purgatory Status: Offline Points: 1108 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 6-14-0 Form: LWLWWL |
Posted: 12 February 2016 at 12:48pm |
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This vote has been accepted by a moderator. intrikit Man I was kind've annoyed with you here. I've seen MILES more from you man quality-wise. Your wording was poor throughout, like in the 4th bar your saying anyone could win, disregarding yourself as formiddable competition and not making a single proper punch at him. If you worded things differently so it'd actually offer some sort of shot against Beans directly then it MAY have worked, but I don't know. Also your rhyme scheme was very basic and your wordplay fell completely flat on a punch level (and was either overplayed, forced, or lacked much depth). A completely lackluster performance. PLEASE revise for your next battle as to not fuck up like this again. Beans Your execution of your punches was on-point - despite having a 29-syllable-long verse! (Lol XD wtf!?). Yoir wordplay here wasn't top-notch but it can be completely let off as they at least tied in with punches, and towards the end, you made straight attacks. An extremely easy decision... ... MVGT Beans. |
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Venomonology
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Joined: 23 October 2012 Status: Offline Points: 674 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 9-2-0 Form: WWLWWW |
Posted: 13 February 2016 at 1:55am |
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This vote has been accepted by a moderator. This is war, I have to kill beans in a way he has to feel Maybe I should drown him since his shit battles keep flooding the battlefield You promoted other sites like a spam bot, u got exposed as a bitch son This loss will remind you of your ban cuz it'll be a nightmare for 6 months opener didn't quite work out, also not a fan of using the same word (step / steps) in the same line.. especially the punch line, totally takes away the sting for me. 2nd bar you could've really gone for the throat with the Orion thing, but you came really generic and played so totally missed there. 3rd bar the drown him / flooding the battlefields had potential and did land a decent jab but wording took away from the sting again. 4th bar was a statement and felt like filler, can't be bringing that. total miss. closer I thought was actually quite good, had sting to it. shame the rest of your verse didn't match up. vs Im too noisy in the ranks, Slayin Noobs & Downing Vets Intrikit wont even make a Pop @ the top, Unless its my arms around his Neck This a one punch KO, the Dent-I'll leave'll dump this guy Upper cut to ya jaw so hard it'll leave teeth prints above your eyes opener was a bit too basic, maybe I'm being harsh but only because I know you can bring much better. 2nd bar just totally wasn't feeling, and the punch line seemed stretched. 3rd bar again the punch line was stretched and the only shot you really took at your opponent was in the first part of the set up. cut the self hype, not what you're here for. 4th bar was more like it, pop at the top / breaking neck was a nice play. closer was ok, a bit generic for a closer if I'm being harsh but was direct and worded well. overall - much closer battle than I expected, thought Beans would walk it but if intrikit came more polished and consistent here, he had a chance against what Beans dropped. the hits that Beans landed though were much crisper, better concepts and better executed so he takes the W but this is probably the weakest verse I've seen from him. vote Beans
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Cuba
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Posted: 13 February 2016 at 9:17am |
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Beans wins 3-0 KO
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