Battlefield: [TEXXXT] Bazooka Bastard vs Who-Is-You? (1-2)

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And now, coming to you <font size="6" color="#0033ff" face="Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif"><b style="">LIVE FROM THE INTERNET...
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<div style="text-align: center;">16-24 bars<div style="text-align: center;">Drop 48 hours from check in<div style="text-align: center;">First to 5 votes or whoever has the most after a given period of time that someone other than myself decides<div style="text-align: center;">
<div style="text-align: center;">THE HIGHLY SEXUAL BAZOOKA BASTARD vs THE RAVENOUS ANTAGONIST WHOISYOU?<div style="text-align: center;">
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Shout out to my family back at home  reading this on the live stream, shouts everyone else - stay sober & enjoy the rest of your day(s)


Prepare for more bullshit than sanitation for heifers,

You’d class a stationary lecture as a day to remember,

I challenge myself by trimming my toe nails in a blender,

We don’t mix well like gingers & Arabian weather,

 

My killer shock value’s anaphylactic,

Who is you? A parragramatic wanking fanatic,

You’re highly skilled at two things: standing in traffic and watching back to back re runs of ‘cash in the attic’

 

You can’t hack it, verses read like a computer glitch,

Said you’d put NOS in a hospital, bruised n stitched,

The way you act ‘ard is like a pugilist,

But I don’t buy it - BB see’s Who’s a bitch,

 

You get zero pussy & if you said that ya do,

I’d keep a sceptical view like ‘did we get to the moon?’,

Losin your V is proving to be an endless pursuit,

Because you stench up the room like Pepe le pew,

 

People spot my huge arms from an enormous distance,

Every shirt I wear’s a fucking awkard fitment,

I get asked about diet & sports equipment,

But I’m just ambidextrous with a porn addiction,

 

3 days of sleep neglect, maybe later,

Feeling slightly off the wall, radiator,

‘Who is you?’  right now just a mistake of nature,

Intently writing the book on wasting paper

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I read his OM's and no jokin, the dude's a clown, a bum!
Plus he soft and aint no shooter so when he say bazooka he's talkin bout the gum

My every punch a haymaker. I'd be surprised if the man still gets up
"bastard" aint had to, face this much trauma since his parents split up

This fuckin re-re, for even thinkin he could beat me
I feel like I'm 12 again, shooting cans in the backyard, how easy I sink a BB

Can't see me. But just my words alone can shut down his whole future 
Brutal! like a war veteran how official it is when I put down a Bazooka

Actually thinks his own skill's cold, but it miserable like a long day
sig says he's "born sick",  premature prick took 'having a cold' the wrong way 

16 bars?? Nobody wanna read all your lines full of rah rah
matterfact, parents of infants the only instance of someone sayin 'time for a ba ba'

don't wanna fill this with nameplay, every emcee did that 'least once in the past
But I aint got too much to bait from, still like a fisherman the way I'm hookin a bas

he's a disgrace in the cyphers, homie I'll can ya
scar your face, but ya couldn't hit a dope line if you was Tony Montanna

I'll win this and you can have a rematch , for losing, yes  that's your reward
But each time ya do. you gon' keep getting stuck like the X on your keyboard.  (see the title for this battle)

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Bazooka the use of 2-4 syllable multi's here was solid on the whole,and it aided
the flow throughout this drop too,you had some good subtle personals/shots on
his alias and the punches were also present,although I found them to come off
as forced and to extent light in landing aswell, you also had some nice wording
within plus the placement of them worked well via flow,it was also a pacey read
due to your line lengths which is also a plus for me, this drop also had some self-
hype included,which is cool and all,but it takes up space where a punch or personal
would of been more beneficial in battle,(unless it's a topical battle of course),my
main gripe is I feel you only took swipes/jabs at him rather than landing haymakers,
but this verse with all its pro's and con's still ended up being a good piece via its plays/
mechanics overall that strangely worked, good verse..


WIY,firstly i liked the way you came out snorting with opening bar,the punch/personal
was a good solid shot i thought,that also caused me to raise a smile on reading,and
to be honest you carried this on until the end,you showed some creative wordplay/
similes was good,(i do love me some w/play metaphors and similes,I know I know it's
the teen in me..lol),this drop had plenty of strong shots within,virtually every bar too,
so props there,now the gripe I have with your drop is that it lacks inners/multi's, which
if used bolsters flow, with hefty drops like yours and little other than the end words
rhyming,or shoring it all up hampers it,you word usage is excessive (try making all
unnecessary words redundant),nice drop..



Overall,this was a nice battle guys,both had plusses and minuses,but there has to be
a winner right?,and for me that was WIY, here's why,he had more punches/personals
that landing more flush/square on the old chin,this was an enjoyable battle to read,&
would like to see a rematch at some point,as I feel BB won't come in the same fashion
next time..

Vote..Who Is You..peace.
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Bazooka! 

I enjoyed the funny opener.

The second segment was the hardest imo, i enjoyed the way it read but it wasn't a true personal (as far as I understand them) this was more of a name-calling insult but ya know

Respect for the mentiBig smilen! 

bar 6 is cool; You act like a Pro Boxer but you don't fool me I see you don't wear any, kinda thing haha 

Bar 7, thats funny (and good display of multi(?) ..idk, i'm not too technical when it comes to this stuff)
 
Bar 8, Pep le pew, lol, fucking lol - ain't seen in years, thanks for bringing up

lol at segment 5.. funny

Bar 11, three day tug session? lol

Closing bar, I liked the word choice here, Intently writing the book on wasting paper haha funny stuff.

I enjoyed the read and reference's, Not a very punchy verse but you already know that.


Who-Is-You?!

I like the flow here, I'm a fan of your writing style, I like the simplicity - reminds me of my own.

bar 1-4, came out swinging, this was live and direct. 

bars 5-6, made me chuckle

"Can't see me. But just my words alone can shut down his whole future 
Brutal! like a war veteran how official it is when I put down a Bazooka" <--- fucking A

"Actually thinks his own skill's cold, but it miserable like a long day
sig says he's "born sick",  premature prick took 'having a cold' the wrong way" <--- Clever personal

bars 11-16 were all okay but none hit as hard as the first 4 imo, entertaining still.

17-18, Great closer and sums up this piece really... relevant, on point and as BB said 'thought-out' which it was.

There were more punches that landed and clever ideas in WIY's verse, I liked both ofc, BB's verse flowed well and had alot of laughs in it, better luck next time my man, ..but in comparison.. being battle verses...

my vote must goto... Who-Is-You? 

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Now this is an interesting one ...

W dropped a decent solid verse, full of personals.
Rhyming was loose in places but mostly consistent.
'Still gets up / parent split up' doesn't work ... shame as it woulda been decent.
'Homie I'll can ya / Tony Montana' was dope though.
Nothing that blew me away ... but enough to win the average battle.
And I fully endorse anyone's decision that LA's usual voting style means this has to be the outright winner.

But this is where I'm torn ... cos BB's verse is more the shit that I like, and how I would write if I could get away with it. But most people will judge bar by bar even if written in quatrains or longer schemes, and consider punch count to be the be all and end all.
Maybe they are right, but I go more for the rhyming artistry and overall entertainment value... which was rife in the BB verse.
Sections 2, 4 & 5 were fucking genius
The closer was dope too, and "slightly off the wall, radiator" was legendary
(though I can't read it with hearing it in the voice of O'Shea, lol)

So that's why for me MFVGTBB


That said it's up to you Juiceman if this is "Vote: Disallowed" based on what I said...
but you do owe me, cos you recently marked one of my Excellent votes as Good.

Peace.

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