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    Posted: 06 February 2016 at 8:10pm
The Anti-Matter Theory



I'm worth about a hundred stones and rubies
Movin' thru the streets of Egypt rockin' a kufi
Golden Uzi on my side with the banana clip
Watch ya lip or you'll get hit ... lift ya spirit
Up outta ya body, Nigga I embodie, the soul of Malcolm X
Black & Gold African necklace dangles from my neck
I respect the hexes of Haitian witch doctors
That know which chakras effect ya subconscious
Nigga I promise ... I drop knowledge like trees
In the Garden of Eden -- so fuck college
Where you graduate with honors
To get a degree in nonsense
I'm like why bother with ya politics and bullshit
Ya holy fathers and pulpits? I want dollas!
Not useless excuses, I want profits, not prophets
Like Judas we hung from them nooses
And dangled from trees as you ate of the strange fruit
That swayed in the breeze ... like Papua New Guinea
You cannibal theives -- your greed is agregious...I'm Idi Amin
The Last King of Scottland that buried the Queen

[Nigga

FREEZE!

Take a moment

And...

BREATHE!]

I keep having these dreams...
I'm Haile Selassie and mixed with Gaddafi
I'm sippin' on coffee and talkin to Garvey
Drawing pictures with Gandi as we listen to Marley

[Shit's gnarly

Yeah I said

The shit's...

Gnarly]

I want to par..lay with Black Panther Par..tay
Cause part of the problem is
Niggas stop participating
In the principle politics of revolution
Instead we believed what Darwin said
And put an end to our evolution
I'm a fusion of Mayan and Olmec culture
An Aztec solider, an abstract sculpture
Mold'n pyramids outta Atlas's shoulders
Rosetta Stone roll'a, with both eyes closed
But my third eye's scopin', zoom lense, focus
Absorb what you see then open doors
With mental keys that lead to both ends of eternity

So nigga PLEASE!!!

How could I ever be a sellout?
My soul isn't free, but the fee is 33x the bailout
So get the 'Hell out'...like Hercules escape from Tarturus
Who the hell you know that's as hard as this artist is?
Give you food for thought when I grow crops like harvest this
Pardon this execution of the rhyme
I'm on death row -- a Sugar Hill Don
I got ties to Roemello, but hell no, I won't go
Down the same 'Road' as Hillcoat
Cause I know, that we know, what what it feel like
To sleep nights with no pillows, just hardwood floors
In the middle of a kill zone, the ghetto is riddled
With stories like this -- I just bring em to surface                                                                                                                   
'Case the media forgets ... and I'm out!



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AAHHH shit, look who it is! Glad you can make it and welcome, broham. i was hoping you'd post this week's league verse so i can feed the shit out of it, lol. You already know how i feel about this verse but out of courtesy here ya go.
 
dope verse. historical reference can be a hollow approach and even corny if in the wrong hands but i think you had a solid foundation behind the purpose. again, very clever title ha!
 
welcome bro and you already know, its not priority but courtesy to feed other people's verse around here. plus it keeps OM alive lol!


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First off, even though I recognized the name, it took me until I read your writing to remember where I knew you from. Whatdup Self, good to you here!

This was heavy and had a lot to like about it. They type of first drop that'll give you a great first impression. I clicked on the title because it was interested, but the verse was completely opposite of what I'd expected. The first thing that reached out to me where to references. Had an ancient yet powerful feel to it. Egyptian stones and rupees, black and gold african chains, that typa shit. First verse was nice. It didn't deliver the content that I came in here expected but gave me something equally enjoyable, albeit unexpected. I liked how you broke up your verses with organic and poetic subtexts. Then the second stanza.. We stopped participating in evolution because we listened to Darwin? Fucking deep bro, for real. Another solid verse. Last stanza, the combination of flow and content in the 'fee is 33x the buyout' line was top tier. Truely delicious to read. That also accurately sums up the verse as a whole.

Overall the consistent mythical/ancient references paired with some real knowledge and a constant flow really delivered something special here. Memorable verse man, definitely 5 star material. Hope you stick around and give this site another top tier writer 
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@Sammy, thanks for the invite bro. This board seems pretty dope thus far.

@Nimga, what up man? I was wondering where you've been posting. But, uh,thanks for the feed man. I know you dig the whole conscious/mystical type subject matter and I know you understand the social political aspects as well so I'm glad you actually liked the verse. Respect.
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Very impressive Self. Expect a full feedback tomorrow!
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This is some thoroughly great stuff. I, for one, loved the concepts you incorporated, from ancient egypt to darwinic matters - and I'm all for that. You also presented a very interesting array of philosophical and tangible issues. Remarkable historic events were seemingly effortlessly woven into your overall scheme, and this is also one of the highlights of this verse, because everything fitted in so well. The Roemello reference was amazing, along with the Olmec culture couplet. You really demonstrated detailed knowledge here. I also appreciate the cleverness in your title. There's actually nothing to negatively criticise here, your flow and rhyme patterns were smooth yet interesting enough to keep the pace in such a verse. This was a very enjoyable read! Hope to read more. 
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Fire. Loving the vivid imagery and references
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Thanks for the feed fellas. I really appreciate it. I'm glad you guys dug the content.

Oh, and, alicewonder...you gotta be a little old school to catch that Roemello line lol. Glad somebody did.

Again, much love.

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So sorry, I promised this two days ago.

I'm worth about a hundred stones and rubies 
Movin' thru the streets of Egypt rockin' a kufi
Golden Uzi on my side with the banana clip
Watch ya lip or you'll get hit ... lift ya spirit
Up outta ya body, Nigga I embodie, the soul of Malcolm X
Black & Gold African necklace dangles from my neck

Immediately set the tone and a vivid picture of where we're going. Love the X line.

Nigga I promise ... I drop knowledge like trees
In the Garden of Eden -- so fuck college 
Where you graduate with honors 
To get a degree in nonsense 
I'm like why bother with ya politics and bullshit
Ya holy fathers and pulpits? I want dollas!

This part is sweet. I have no idea on how to flow it but I'm sure once done, it sounds sick.

You cannibal theives -- your greed is agregious...I'm Idi Amin
The Last King of Scottland that buried the Queen

So, he couldn't marry the Queen and opted to bury her instead. Good job on the reference.

I keep having these dreams... 
I'm Haile Selassie and mixed with Gaddafi
I'm sippin' on coffee and talkin to Garvey
Drawing pictures with Gandi as we listen to Marley

Gave me that Kendrick vibe here, for some reason. Anyway the metaphorical value is sick. 
The Ethiopian Jesus mixed with the most fashionable dictator out there, talking to Ghandi and Garvey over hot coffee? Count me in!

I want to par..lay with Black Panther Par..tay 
Cause part of the problem is
Niggas stop participating 
In the principle politics of revolution 
Instead we believed what Darwin said
And put an end to our evolution

Pointing out social issues here. Nice.

I'm a fusion of Mayan and Olmec culture
An Aztec solider, an abstract sculpture 
Mold'n pyramids outta Atlas's shoulders 
Rosetta Stone roll'a, with both eyes closed 
But my third eye's scopin', zoom lense, focus
Absorb what you see then open doors 
With mental keys that lead to both ends of eternity 

At first I wanted to quote the first two bars, but then I reread it and thought to myself "This part is so insane, I gotta put it all in". 

Honestly, man. The whole piece is a quotable so I'm not even gonna bother anymore. The seemless transitions from "scum" to "wisdom", ancient cultures and pimp dictators.... Sheesh.

9/10, and it's a 9 because I want to see more.


BODYBAG!
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote SELF ACTIVATE Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 09 February 2016 at 1:38pm
Whoa, E!

Thanks for the feed, man. It was fun just reading it.

One thing, that Idi Amin line is actually a little more complex than him just burying the Queen tho. But, it needs singular context. I'll come back later and explain it from my perspective.

Good looking out!
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Can't wait. I loved the movie so now I'm wondering what the hell I missed, lol.
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