Open Mic: **The ballad of Patrick Tre-zee**

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    Posted: 17 November 2013 at 9:58am




The Ballad Of Patrick Tre-zee



So - Patrick Tre-zee went all GHOST & did a missed appearance
n though I don't hold him in high regards, I'm lifting spirits
so don't be sad the loner's back - was it the timing confusing him? 
or the thought of my lines dropping him? - the finest Peruvian
man was sniffing round LI asking my crew for some help
BUT GUESS WHAT!! - he came back on ere as his usual self
yet dudes ave gelled, its corny - you can tell he's not what he might seem
cuz he just plays the game - why else would he proxy his IPs?

guys please! - it's time ya seen the light.. open ya eyes! Geez!!

Imagine this...
'Tre' joined a team.. made Dean think he'd bring some weight n,
it seems Dean agreed to bring the king of infiltration Shocked
trading stocks of ammo, he lingered for information 
gingerly winged for ages till he's stinging the clique he stays in
amazing!!
 

See - Trey-zee couldnt 'end me' so Ive gotta be real
he'd stand more chance of fuckin' Demi over pottery wheels
like a G of half pure bashed - cutting him is not a big deal
my plays are like Savilles dick - suttin a lotta kids feel
fuck it, look ere.. 
You ducked you pussy!!
"I'm gonna destroy you"
they want the honest truth - the fact we didn't want you annoys you
stop the small talk, just walk cuz I don't wanna be 'boys', dude
Oi !!, shoe !! - now you're a mong in that Points crew Sleepy
the backlash? a vendetta - I wunt authorize his scholarship
I cut the pussy free, I'm like a sword inside his oroffice
 others saw it as it's like he's mortified he wasn't picked
^^^^^ shit !!
my internals abuse him like a sordid gynecologist Embarrassed



I could off this kid, resort to writing proper hits but why?
LI clocked him from the off but Vis has offered him a line
now it's 'Broseph' this & 'Broseph' that, his troops are salivating
just last week his pals were hating - there's a truth to marinate in

Don't come apologize to LA - go take that through ya crew 
they're the one's made to look stupid for recruiting you
ya seeming foolish too - people can tell Dave hit the nail
one minute O "put lots of work in"... next he's "LAsBiggestFail" ?????
get ya stories straight... cuz I got a thing for stinging bitches quick
the crowning moment for Trizz is he's the King of inconsistencies 
"this is just a hobby" - now it's - "I'll still battle Manc actually"
bitch you cunt make 6 figures working in the Action Man factory!!!
that's a fact ya see!!, be real, you're NEVER hurting a boss (uh huh)
just so yano - 
A GRUDGE MATCH NO SHOW IS WORSE THAN A LOSS !!!



Fuck outta here with your lies, all LA laughed n we sneered
cuz EVERYBODY saw you get punked just like 'Ashton' was here
take back the jeers you craft to steer the fact you'da still gotten murked son
I had no net access, kids ILL, work heavy - STILL GOT A VERSE DONE
"Manc sez he saves his best for verses so I'll stall & back-out
I'll let him drop & when he's wasted words I'll call him back out"
see, people see what ya GAME is Trizz - no need watching aimless shit
my aim just hit - its plain n blatant we've got an alias



Edited by Manc - 17 November 2013 at 10:03am


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Solid as fuck,manc.
One of the most extrnsive and best disses ive seen here... You just nailed his coffin.
Crazy!!!



Don't come apologize to LA - go take that through ya crew 
they're the one's made to look stupid for recruiting you
ya seeming foolish too - people can tell Dave hit the nail
one minute O "put lots of work in"... next he's "LAsBiggestFail" ?????
get ya stories straight... cuz I got a thing for stinging bitches quick
the crowning moment for Trizz is he's the King of inconsistencies 
"this is just a hobby" - now it's - "I'll still battle Manc actually"
bitch you cunt make 6 figures working in the Action Man factory!!!
that's a fact ya see!!, be real, you're NEVER hurting a boss (uh huh)
just so yano - 
A GRUDGE MATCH NO SHOW IS WORSE THAN A LOSS !!!



Fuck outta here with your lies, all LA laughed n we sneered
cuz EVERYBODY saw you get punked just like 'Ashton' was here
take back the jeers you craft to steer the fact you'da still gotten murked son
I had no net access, kids ILL, work heavy - STILL GOT A VERSE DONE
"Manc sez he saves his best for verses so I'll stall & back-out
I'll let him drop & when he's wasted words I'll call him back out"
see, people see what ya GAME is Trizz - no need watching aimless shit
my aim just hit - its plain n blatant we've got an alias

^^^^^ enjoyed each and every word of this part... You smoked em up. Props
Fuck That Fat smelly cunt Donald Trump, a racist asshole who is fucked in the head.

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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote DressToKill Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 17 November 2013 at 12:13pm
I love how you can keep fluidity within your verses! It's not like 25 seperate concepts moulded into one, it's like they're all tied together and daisy chained nicely. My fav part was the closer, it was hard hitting because you worded it to perfection. Loved this one, Dave. I'm glad you didn't agree to re battle him, he doesn't deserve it. Also, dead @ that no show is worse than a loss line..#TheTruth
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solid overall...some nice hits at trizz in this and the flow was pretty smooth for the most part...there was a good amount of diss in here w/o it coming off as forced...the six figure line was pretty funny...wonder if there'll be a response
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That shit was brutal
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not much more i can say that hasnt been said....simply dope.
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What Cuba said, but I was also hoping for more Patrick Swayze movie references haha...the Ghost reference/concept continued for a bit (demi/pottery, see the light, lifting spirits) which I loved. I liked what you did here in an overall sense too. Much more interesting than your typical diss verses where it's just a bunch of barely connected punchlines and your last two sets were pretty tight too, probably you're strongest parts. 
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The whole Patrick Tre-zee / Ghost shit had me cracking up. 

This was one of the best disses i've read in a long time. I've tried to start incorporating similar concepts into my own battles, coming more direct, more personal and more point blank facts, rather than constant plays. To me, things like that are starting to land harder. 

Keep it up. 
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DAMN manc... I told you I was gonna leave you detailed feed, so I'll try, but this was niiiiice.
The proxy IP part Im assuming was making fun of BG too? that was nice. The flow to this was fire. The internals in this were nasty too. Multis are perfect... \



Imagine this...
'Tre' joined a team.. made Dean think he'd bring some weight n,
it seems Dean agreed to bring the king of infiltration Shocked
trading stocks of ammo, he lingered for information 
gingerly winged for ages till he's stinging the clique he stays in
amazing!!


Damn.... Dope as fuck. this shit is godly, man. Im really impressed by this.

"Manc sez he saves his best for verses so I'll stall & back-out
I'll let him drop & when he's wasted words I'll call him back out"


This was dope too. The 2 lines before it were sick too. Dead


Man there's really nothing I could critique in this. You really went in on this and displayed your dominance. I don't think Triz would ever come back from a verse like this. This  is a monstrous verse....  Im reallllly looking forward to triz's response lol!
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote CHAIN Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 17 November 2013 at 9:33pm
Trizzy Tre is my dude but ...
Originally posted by Manc Manc wrote:


*aggressive content & harsh realities*

Damn, damn, damn.....*DON DEMARCO*

You've outdone yourself Manc, shit was crazy.
Us 'regulars' cant do it like this, there's levels to this shit, lol. 




+Sick-Witted+
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Ha

Alright man this was dope. I can definitely respect that. It was a solid diss all around no doubt.

I would say too, it was on of the better disses I've seen on here.

Props
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Manc my main man! This was sum other level type shit! The whole concept was ill and each punch was executed with precision! Salute fam "Ole, ole, ole ole!"
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This shit was uppercuts.

Besides the aggression, I was also feeling the plays. That Demi/pottery wheel made me swerve hard and then the Action Man play ran me straight into the ditch. Entertaining as fuck, kiddo.

Some of my fellow yanks might miss that Action Man play, that's Gi Joe in the states by the way.

This was a classic.
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I missed it tbh.  dope though...and probably shawn.
 
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Originally posted by J504 J504 wrote:

Some of my fellow yanks might miss that Action Man play, that's Gi Joe in the states by the way.

Ahhhh - I never realized they were the same lol 

Appreciate all the feed too lads Smile


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Nice shit forreal, feeling this...

So - Patrick Tre-zee went all GHOST & did a missed appearance
n though I don't hold him in high regards, I'm lifting spirits

nice way to set the pace and open it up ^^

the backlash? a vendetta - I wunt authorize his scholarship
I cut the pussy free, I'm like a sword inside his oroffice
others saw it as it's like he's mortified he wasn't picked
^^^^^ shit !!
my internals abuse him like a sordid gynecologist

ewwww feeling this ^^


Good shit nigga, fairly consistent all the way through.


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dam manc i dunno where to start u bodied triz in ur verse for lax but this shit right here was just the icing on the cake good solid drop my fav segment was

See - Trey-zee couldnt 'end me' so Ive gotta be real
he'd stand more chance of fuckin' Demi over pottery wheels
like a G of half pure bashed - cutting him is not a big deal
my plays are like Savilles dick - suttin a lotta kids feel
fuck it, look ere.. 
You ducked you pussy!!
"I'm gonna destroy you"
they want the honest truth - the fact we didn't want you annoys you
stop the small talk, just walk cuz I don't wanna be 'boys', dude
Oi !!, shoe !! - now you're a mong in that Points crew Sleepy
the backlash? a vendetta - I wunt authorize his scholarship
I cut the pussy free, I'm like a sword inside his oroffice
 others saw it as it's like he's mortified he wasn't picked
^^^^^ shit !!
my internals abuse him like a sordid gynecologist Embarrassed



I could off this kid, resort to writing proper hits but why?
LI clocked him from the off but Vis has offered him a line
now it's 'Broseph' this & 'Broseph' that, his troops are salivating
just last week his pals were hating - there's a truth to marinate in
I'll explode at the drop of a dime like proximity mines
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savile play was sick, whole thing was direct and heavy and your flow was the standard manc-ness. though i wasnt a fan of the orifice bar. but im sure thats accent. dope as usual tho 
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Read this like 5 times already. Def dope,I liked your approach with disses,all very true and personal. Shit was verbal manslaughter. Good shit manc and real thorough read,barely stumbled on any wording,if any at all.
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