Open Mic: The Beginning

Military minded, hard to lyrically define it
How someone can be so spiritually blinded
And never looking in the mirror thats behind him
Wonder if it'll be out done by his out come and terror he's designin
Switch the flow, is he even getting close
To a place where his past isn't known
Feel like I done too much for a different growth
Spent years and wept tears for blocks I didn't own
Now I'm over 30 the road was dirty
Ran the streets til I planted seeds to know I'm worthy
Claimed sets and banged yet I'm broke and hurtin
But I keep a smile, keep them out, knowing it's workin
Notice when this becomes a joke to mess with
I'll explode in essence on any foe in presence
Growin resentmant, til I'm blowing relentless
Am I a king of LA, we could get a vote in a second

Edited by Stalin - 04 July 2018 at 6:37am

Military minded, hard to lyrically define it
How someone can be so spiritually blinded
And never looking in the mirror thats behind him
Wonder if it'll be out done by his out come and terror he's designin

(straight off the bat i'm feeling this rhyme scheme here,this piece was quite vivid in
details really,but seemed hidden in a guise of subtlenes,the military mind aspect is
a cool inclusion as it set the tone from there on,and yeah this piece does have an air
of truth within,(as a soldier fights for life on different scales,but they don't fight to live
life as per say) clever,and the mirror scenario was also clever too,is the mirror the past
because he's not looking back,or is the mirror he's future,if only he'd look back?,i'm
feeling this concept as of yet,nice start)


Switch the flow, is he even getting close
To a place where his past isn't known
Feel like I done too much for a different growth
Spent years and wept tears for blocks I didn't own
Now I'm over 30 the road was dirty
Ran the streets til I planted seeds to know I'm worthy

(now this part came off like a man retracing his foot steps via thoughts,the what ifs
when's and where's,like he's conscience is beginning to weigh heavy on him,maybe
reaching 30 (which is still young) he's already lived a life,yeah i'm really liking this
verse,it's coming off as a seasoned piece,plus the whole concept and contents have
been solid,well done)

Claimed sets and banged yet I'm broke and hurtin
But I keep a smile, keep them out, knowing it's workin
Notice when this becomes a joke to mess with
I'll explode in essence on any foe in presence
Growin resentmant, til I'm blowing relentless
Am I a king of LA, we could get a vote in a second

(although tired the military training still kicks in eh,you ain't going down without a
fight is what i'm getting on reading here,and via training you'll always be a danger
to any foes,to be honest I've enjoyed this offering Stal,it seemed very concise and
focused,with a hint of a moral compass for good measure thrown in,and to answer your question on being a king of LA,either in life or here at this siteyour definitely
one of them,solid verse that was a real kick to read,entertaining friend,entertai-
ning..peace.

@DJFLAME "Claimed Sets and banged"

Gangbanging. He claimed he was part of a "set". A set is usually a part of a certain gang in a neighborhood block.

As for this piece, it was raw and authentic. Im digging the opener, came off like some Tupac shit. Flow and technical stuff was well done. This right here was fire "Spent years and wept tears for blocks I didn't own". Too many OG'S in Chicago know this line too true. Overall, i thought this was a nice little banger. Some parts were ehhh but you had some lines that hit hard. Specially the one i mentioned. Good shit here.