Open Mic: The Contract - Lord Puente

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    Posted: 17 December 2016 at 4:52pm
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The Contract

 

I’m smooth with the melody, I’m on a different pedigree
vernacular complexity and flow be both my specialties
forget all of my recipes, forget that there’s a chef in me
all that came in secondly, I’m back to normal tendencies

peeps gave me credit cuz I spit my writs so tastefully
rap be a business so i built my business sensibly
everything collected i invested it tenaciously
all y’all gainin’ interest, got me building up my equity

you nothing but a mortal while I’m bringing that longevity
they said we couldn't cure death,  I found the fuckin’ remedy
I’m fearless front of enemies, ain’t no fear for death you see,
there ain’t a need for breath in me, i do this all so breathlessly,

flexin’ all this weaponry gon’ make you see my devilry
blow your fuckin’ head off, like lee did to Kennedy
all you fuckers best believe this verse right here’s a guarantee
I’m bound by the contract and I’ve underwritten tons of these

Signed, Lord p, 12/17, Peace!

 
 

 
 
 
 
 
 
 
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Goryo. Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 17 December 2016 at 11:15pm
I like the style, it's a really fun one to read. Fun one to listen to as well so definitely something for an audio if you're not considering it already. I dunno if I'm just tired and talking shit but I was getting a Jadakiss vibe at some parts, just that type of swagger which is always a plus. So yeah flow and rhyme placements were on point, and props for keeping consistent to the end without forcing multis or writing shitty lines just to keep it going. It's a shame you had the pic of Hennessy without using it as a rhyme though lol. If I had to choose a favourite section it would probably be the third but to be honest the whole thing kept to the same standard and it was balanced out nice. Keep at it.
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I like the wording and the rhyming you did.. it's more like a self hyped verse which is an ok thing but not the best. Looking at your verse you got the skills and it's best if write topical or battle verse.
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote rhetorical Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 18 December 2016 at 4:47pm
hey bud, just returning the feedback 

really nice verse here. . a bit braggadocio but layered under that tightly knitted rhyme scheme and vocabulary. The image definitely lends a personal touch and with the theme you had going on in this written. A signature to ones own craft haha. . very enjoyable read. Keep that pen moving  
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote SELF ACTIVATE Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 19 December 2016 at 12:56am
Dope picture! I like the entire presentation. It feels proper and creates a certain motif when reading -- it's atmospheric. Lyrically, you had some solid lines thrown into the mix like the interest/equality play. That was nice. Rhythmically, the strong "E" sound kept the flow pretty smooth. This would translate into audio really easily. Good stuff, LP. Peace.
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